Daisy Chain
Quatrain Poem about Young Love111 total reviews
Comment from pabelk
This piece is a work of art. You painted a perfect picture.
The rhythm and rhyming was very fluid.
A good example of love without using the "word" well done.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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This piece is a work of art. You painted a perfect picture.
The rhythm and rhyming was very fluid.
A good example of love without using the "word" well done.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this - thank you! Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
Magnificent. Now this is showing us and not telling us of the love between this couple. Really a great and colourful poem. It rhymed and flowed so gently one felt as if you were following through the delightful garden.
Well penned, Brooke. luv jada
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Magnificent. Now this is showing us and not telling us of the love between this couple. Really a great and colourful poem. It rhymed and flowed so gently one felt as if you were following through the delightful garden.
Well penned, Brooke. luv jada
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Jada, thank you so much for this most generous rating and for your absolutely lovely comments :-) I am pleased as punch!!! Brooke
Comment from amada
Great entry for this contest. The word love is spread out all over the poem but it's invisible, and that's the fun of the contest. I wish you the best.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Great entry for this contest. The word love is spread out all over the poem but it's invisible, and that's the fun of the contest. I wish you the best.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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I like that - invisible love - you're most kind. Brooke
Comment from Rain Chapman
This is beautiful. Do not change a thing. Your poem is so vivid, I could picture the young couple in love, sweet, innocent, first love.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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This is beautiful. Do not change a thing. Your poem is so vivid, I could picture the young couple in love, sweet, innocent, first love.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Lorraine, I truly appreciate your gracious comments. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from ~Dovey
A touching story/poem of sweet, innocent love. You did a beautiful job with this poem and met all the objectives for the contest criteria. I wish you the best of luck. :)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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A touching story/poem of sweet, innocent love. You did a beautiful job with this poem and met all the objectives for the contest criteria. I wish you the best of luck. :)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Dovey, thank you for your encouragement and for your thoughtful comments! Brooke
Comment from Buzz Bellam
Well, you certainly had me fooled by your title. I was thinking erotic rather than innocence. I see why this offering won an "All Time Best" Blue Ribbon Award.
Thanx ;-)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Well, you certainly had me fooled by your title. I was thinking erotic rather than innocence. I see why this offering won an "All Time Best" Blue Ribbon Award.
Thanx ;-)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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An erotic daisy chain? I'm so innocent I can't even think of why that is erotic after you tell me it is. LOLOLOL Thank you for your positive review :-) Brooke
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Sorry I popped your innocence!
An erotic Daisy Chain is made with sexually adding boys and girls together at an orgie in a never ending chain.
Please forgive me for having trampled your innocence. :-) lol !
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Oh, dear Lord - perhaps I should change it to a violet chain. LOL I had no blooming clue. When I was a freshman at a girl's college we sat around and read a porno book out loud - each taking turns - that is as down and dirty or as close to an orgy as I have ever come. LOL And I don't think that particular book had any daisy chains in it! ;-)Brooke
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You make me smile!
God bless you!
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
This was superb! I loved it and can think of no possible way to improve it. I truly appreciate you placing your banner out there for without it I would not have discovered this entry. It's an intriguing piece.
The Rivaling Mimic
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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This was superb! I loved it and can think of no possible way to improve it. I truly appreciate you placing your banner out there for without it I would not have discovered this entry. It's an intriguing piece.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind comments - I appreciate your reading the ad and following up on it. Brooke
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - Such a cute and romantic story in your poem. Did they ever find a four-leaf clover? I can remember chaining daisies with a girl who was a friend. Enjoyed it and good luck in the contest. Charlie
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Brooke - Such a cute and romantic story in your poem. Did they ever find a four-leaf clover? I can remember chaining daisies with a girl who was a friend. Enjoyed it and good luck in the contest. Charlie
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Charlie - it takes a confident man to admit to making daisy chains! LOL I sure hope they found a clover! Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from zeezeewriter
I remember doing all these things when I was a wee lass. then I grew up and everything went down hill from there. Nice walk down memory lane, Brooke. Good luck in the contest. ZeeZee
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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I remember doing all these things when I was a wee lass. then I grew up and everything went down hill from there. Nice walk down memory lane, Brooke. Good luck in the contest. ZeeZee
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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ZeeZee - good luck to you too! Thanks so much - I have such a hard time thinking of you as an innocent wee lass. LOL Brooke
Comment from Helen Oaks
Oh that is nice! I can picture the scene so easily. The rhyming is seemingly effortless - that is a real gift. The image of blowing the dandelion seeds and wishing for unending time is very effective. Thank you!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Oh that is nice! I can picture the scene so easily. The rhyming is seemingly effortless - that is a real gift. The image of blowing the dandelion seeds and wishing for unending time is very effective. Thank you!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Seemingly is the key word. LOL Thank you so much!! Brooke
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Seemingly indeed - maybe they should have a facility for sprinkling a few drops of sweat from the fevered brow onto the page! - Helen
