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Comment from Paradox Tremors
No accountability hurts 'us' little guys (and women). It doesn't bother our government the 'banks' aren't using the bailout money as it was intended. Well written and your point made clear.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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No accountability hurts 'us' little guys (and women). It doesn't bother our government the 'banks' aren't using the bailout money as it was intended. Well written and your point made clear.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Thank you - yes, the little people don't seem to get bailed out the way the big wigs do, Brooke
Comment from dtimes3
It seems to be rolling along! No telling where the bottom is located. Circuit City is one of those stores that will realize after the fact (maybe) that it is not about quantity of goods sold but about customer satisfaction with the shopping experience (my opinion - they were v=never really good at customer service).
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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It seems to be rolling along! No telling where the bottom is located. Circuit City is one of those stores that will realize after the fact (maybe) that it is not about quantity of goods sold but about customer satisfaction with the shopping experience (my opinion - they were v=never really good at customer service).
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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thank you for your most insightful comments, Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke....we have a Circut City store here and it is heart breaking for all those employees. I keep thinking we have seen the worst of this depression but I guess not....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Hi Brooke....we have a Circut City store here and it is heart breaking for all those employees. I keep thinking we have seen the worst of this depression but I guess not....blessings....chey
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Chey, thanks so much for you perceptive comments, Brooke
Comment from Firefly54
AN odd subject for cinquain... but then, why not?, I ask myself... and it is a poem that tells much of our times. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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AN odd subject for cinquain... but then, why not?, I ask myself... and it is a poem that tells much of our times. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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I'm not sure what makes an appropriate topic for a cinquain! LOL Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
Ouch! This poem hits close to home. I know that I've been guilty of exhibiting glee over wonderful sale prices, oblivious to the financial worries of those employees who will soon be unemployed. What a good reminder to show compassion and awareness of others' pain.
Technically, this is in great shape. (Just like always!) I didn't see any spag and your word choices are good.
The illustration is a great choice. The people are all looking at the window displays, but not at each other. It seems that the material possessions available to them are more important than the people around them.
Well done. Laura
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Ouch! This poem hits close to home. I know that I've been guilty of exhibiting glee over wonderful sale prices, oblivious to the financial worries of those employees who will soon be unemployed. What a good reminder to show compassion and awareness of others' pain.
Technically, this is in great shape. (Just like always!) I didn't see any spag and your word choices are good.
The illustration is a great choice. The people are all looking at the window displays, but not at each other. It seems that the material possessions available to them are more important than the people around them.
Well done. Laura
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Laura, your review is insightful and positive - thank you, Brooke
Comment from Hurricane Dean
Yeah, I read about Circut City as well. We are all in a real bind here. I certainly have a lot of hope for Obama. Seems like he just might be smart enough to get us out of this national bankruptcy. This is a quick read that makes us all think. Nice job. Much Love, Dean
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Yeah, I read about Circut City as well. We are all in a real bind here. I certainly have a lot of hope for Obama. Seems like he just might be smart enough to get us out of this national bankruptcy. This is a quick read that makes us all think. Nice job. Much Love, Dean
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Dean, we are all counting on him so much - let us put lots of positive karma into the air in hopes he can come through! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from bard owl
WHen one of us is hurt, our brother often bleeds. Your poem says this very clearly with a minimum of words. Excellent thought in this one with a touch of rhyme that doesn't lighten the core sadness of this piece. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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WHen one of us is hurt, our brother often bleeds. Your poem says this very clearly with a minimum of words. Excellent thought in this one with a touch of rhyme that doesn't lighten the core sadness of this piece. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Linda, thank you for this perceptive read!! Brooke
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Nice piece you have here. The author's note helps to make the meaning clearer. It is pathetic when people are denied their means of livelihood for no fault of theirs. The passion is well conveyed in this sattirical piece. kudos
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Nice piece you have here. The author's note helps to make the meaning clearer. It is pathetic when people are denied their means of livelihood for no fault of theirs. The passion is well conveyed in this sattirical piece. kudos
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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And this happens so often now - people who've worked in a factory or a store for 25 years only to get dismissed when they shut down with hardly a thank you. Brooke
Comment from davidray
Certainly some pretty crappy news for quite a number of people. Too bad when this happens. SO many people affected indirectly too. Well done,Brooke. Always good to read,
David :)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Certainly some pretty crappy news for quite a number of people. Too bad when this happens. SO many people affected indirectly too. Well done,Brooke. Always good to read,
David :)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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David, thank you - and yes, it's crappy! Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
No doubt, shoppers will jump on the many liquidation and bankruptcy sales! Personally, I hate shopping and steer clear of shopping mobs. LOL
A unique look at the awful mess things are in right now. LOL I enjoyed this poem, Brooke.
~Nic
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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No doubt, shoppers will jump on the many liquidation and bankruptcy sales! Personally, I hate shopping and steer clear of shopping mobs. LOL
A unique look at the awful mess things are in right now. LOL I enjoyed this poem, Brooke.
~Nic
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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I go to our mall, the second largest in the U.S., twice a year when my daughter visits. Other than that, I make myself scarce. Thanks, Brooke
