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Comment from Algernon
Made me think of that little book called the shack, do not ask why, lol it just did, for no apparent reason.
I dream of seeing snow like that. Most we get is a few centimetres...
This has a certain warmth to it...
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Made me think of that little book called the shack, do not ask why, lol it just did, for no apparent reason.
I dream of seeing snow like that. Most we get is a few centimetres...
This has a certain warmth to it...
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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thank you! If I can manage warmth out of snow, I must be doing something right! LOL Brooke
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LOL, indeed you are...
Comment from redrider6612
Great job with this. Wonderful buildup, great word choices, I could olmost feel the frigid snow. Onc e more you have educated me on a poetic form I've never seen.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Great job with this. Wonderful buildup, great word choices, I could olmost feel the frigid snow. Onc e more you have educated me on a poetic form I've never seen.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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this is my first time ever using this form, prompted by entering a contest started by a friend. So, it's my first and only one! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from mjarabrab
This is lovely, the photo, and your words. I also agree with you , that poetry should have passion, rather than the emphasis on rules. This photo looks like something that you might have taken yourself, and to me, that adds more to the originality of your work, rather than a writer using someone else's drawing or photo.
Hope that's right!!
take care,
Mj
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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This is lovely, the photo, and your words. I also agree with you , that poetry should have passion, rather than the emphasis on rules. This photo looks like something that you might have taken yourself, and to me, that adds more to the originality of your work, rather than a writer using someone else's drawing or photo.
Hope that's right!!
take care,
Mj
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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well, it is not actually my photo but from fan art, but I'm glad I chose well. Thank you so much for your positive review, Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
A classic cinquain with the obscuring of the view at the end as a literal winding down.
I thought the title and the picture were perfect, especially with the blocking of the numbers on the mail box.
(I'm catching up--it's hard to be away, when one is "addicted."
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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A classic cinquain with the obscuring of the view at the end as a literal winding down.
I thought the title and the picture were perfect, especially with the blocking of the numbers on the mail box.
(I'm catching up--it's hard to be away, when one is "addicted."
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I'm thrilled you think it adheres to the classic form as I tried very hard - this my first cinquain had me nervous as a schoolgirl - did not submit it until a half hour before the contest deadline! LOL Thanks ever so much, Brooke :-)
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Being nervous is healthy--it just shows how seriously we take our efforts.
Well done.
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I just posted a new fairy sonnet dedicated to Ian's little girl who loves my fairy sonnets, and I am SOOOO pleased with it - I love it when I love one of my own creations! LOL
Comment from Marathonwriter
I love the picture. It adds a nice touch. This is a fascinating form of poetry which would help any writer in mastering language use.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I love the picture. It adds a nice touch. This is a fascinating form of poetry which would help any writer in mastering language use.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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it's my first time trying the form, and you're right!! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from LadyMary
This is an excellent example of a cinquain writing. One expects to look out the window and see a blizzard in progress. Projects a beautiful sense of the beauty of winter. Much enjoyed. LadyMary
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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This is an excellent example of a cinquain writing. One expects to look out the window and see a blizzard in progress. Projects a beautiful sense of the beauty of winter. Much enjoyed. LadyMary
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Lady Mary, as it is my first and only cinquain, I am glad you think it's a good example!! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from A.D.
I like this and am willing to give you this score. However, your line of 8, well, I think might have 9 syllables. It's a small point, but I would recommend checking it. Lovely picture/graphic too.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I like this and am willing to give you this score. However, your line of 8, well, I think might have 9 syllables. It's a small point, but I would recommend checking it. Lovely picture/graphic too.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I rechecked and it definitely has 8, not 9 syllables. Not sure how you arrive at 9?? thanks so much, Brooke
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Sorry about that. Hence, while I said "I think might." When I was sounding it out, I was counting pile as 2 because that is how it was sounding on my ear, but I just confirmed with a dictionary, well, that I'm a dunce :) You're good to go. It wasn't affecting your score, my apologies.
Comment from jlsavell
adewpearl, I do not know where you find the time or the words to post a unique work each and everyday. you are truly gifted..this is a great cinquain..jlsavell
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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adewpearl, I do not know where you find the time or the words to post a unique work each and everyday. you are truly gifted..this is a great cinquain..jlsavell
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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well, I posted this one one half hour before the submission deadline!! I have never written a cinquain before and it took me a week while I wrote other stuff to put this off :-D
Thanks ever so much! Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
these are not my favorite kinds of poetic formats, these ultra short pieces, but as one of these goes this was quite good.This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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these are not my favorite kinds of poetic formats, these ultra short pieces, but as one of these goes this was quite good.This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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John, it is my first short syllable poem ever - I've never done a haiku, so this cinquain is as close as I've come! glad you think I did an OK job! :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
A very creative cinquain that is saying so much in this limited form and very descriptive too well done good presentation and good luck regards Fuller
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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A very creative cinquain that is saying so much in this limited form and very descriptive too well done good presentation and good luck regards Fuller
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Fuller - I don't do all the forms you do, so this was my very first cinquain - I was nervous! so I'm so glad you think it worked out :-) thank you, Brooke
