For The One
My intentions with poetry and friendship.39 total reviews
Comment from Domino
Hi, Mike.
Excellent romantic writing here showing true love and intended commitment for sure. As it's true I hope the intended recipient appreciated your lovely poetic words. Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2008
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Hi, Mike.
Excellent romantic writing here showing true love and intended commitment for sure. As it's true I hope the intended recipient appreciated your lovely poetic words. Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2008
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What a nice review and idea. I would consider that a great thing. I thank you very much for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from nora arjuna
Mike, I guess I don't have to tell you that this is heavenly. It doesn't reduce me to physical tears, cause I'm rather tough in that sense. It does overwhelm me, inside. There's nothing to fault here, just the most beautiful thoughts cascading down the page, straight into the hearts of the readers. The One is indeed the luckiest.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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Mike, I guess I don't have to tell you that this is heavenly. It doesn't reduce me to physical tears, cause I'm rather tough in that sense. It does overwhelm me, inside. There's nothing to fault here, just the most beautiful thoughts cascading down the page, straight into the hearts of the readers. The One is indeed the luckiest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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As long as it produces a warm fuzzy feeling, then you know a part of you is in this. Thank you so much for your generous rating, the compliments and this review. Mike K2
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much much flattered. :)
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Good!
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Mike, this is great work. The poem is sincere in it's message and the voice is authentic and empathetic. The first person venue works very well. So nice to read you, as always. I hope you are well. Hugs, Sara ~
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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Mike, this is great work. The poem is sincere in it's message and the voice is authentic and empathetic. The first person venue works very well. So nice to read you, as always. I hope you are well. Hugs, Sara ~
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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I'm doing Ok, and will send out tomorrow. I did a couple, "For you poems," and decided to change it to, "For the One." To me it honors the people that touched me in the past, a tibbit for the people touching me presently, but I also wanted my words to be significant for a person in the future that would decide to stay in my life. lol
Thank you so much for your compliments and this review, hoping for a good week ahead for your too. Mike
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem with a good strong cadence that makes for an easy read. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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A very well written poem with a good strong cadence that makes for an easy read. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Mike K2
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You're welcome, Mike. Charlie
Comment from Donovan
Poems that express emotions and feelings with a basic philosophy are always good and this sure falls into that category. I like it. The one line that I question is I want to reduce you to tears...sounded kind of ..hmm controlling..not sure..was my least favorite line.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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Poems that express emotions and feelings with a basic philosophy are always good and this sure falls into that category. I like it. The one line that I question is I want to reduce you to tears...sounded kind of ..hmm controlling..not sure..was my least favorite line.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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I didn't mention using Mace, so no, just to that extent an involentary feeling of being touched. lol Thank you so much for your reivew. Have a good week ahead too. Mike
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Aww that's beautiful. If only we could all have someone who felt that way in our lives, world would be a much more peaceful place. Have one suggestion for you and I know you'll think but that ruins the rhyme, but there is nothing wrong with what I'm about to suggest, will actually make the poem a little more sound. There was only one place I questioned the rhyme because it feels forced the way written.
Provide for you...
Butterfly filled, picturesque gardens in flower;
when needed the most, a refreshing gentle shower.
Butterfly filled, picturesque gardens of flowers;
when needed the most, a refreshing gentle shower.
A garden will be filled with flowers, has to be plural. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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Aww that's beautiful. If only we could all have someone who felt that way in our lives, world would be a much more peaceful place. Have one suggestion for you and I know you'll think but that ruins the rhyme, but there is nothing wrong with what I'm about to suggest, will actually make the poem a little more sound. There was only one place I questioned the rhyme because it feels forced the way written.
Provide for you...
Butterfly filled, picturesque gardens in flower;
when needed the most, a refreshing gentle shower.
Butterfly filled, picturesque gardens of flowers;
when needed the most, a refreshing gentle shower.
A garden will be filled with flowers, has to be plural. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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I appreciate your suggestion and debated that myself. I settled for my finaly line as gardens filled with flowers are not always in bloom. In flower not only refers to that state, but indicate a timelessness about it too. Thank you very much for taking the time to review this, aslo for your compliments too. Mike
Comment from penelope
This is a dlight to the eyes and to the heart, Mike. Your artwork compliments the beautiful poem. I just love the words you speak and hope you've found 'the one'. You've got so many lovely words here. Penelope
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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This is a dlight to the eyes and to the heart, Mike. Your artwork compliments the beautiful poem. I just love the words you speak and hope you've found 'the one'. You've got so many lovely words here. Penelope
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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Possibly I have, but she hasn't let me know yet. lol I thank you so much for your compliments and this review. Also I wish that you have a great week ahead too! Mike
Comment from Helen Tan
I feel as if after reading this poem , I have found a best friend who is selfless and who is there just for me. Apologies to all other readers of this poem but I don't think that I will let you go.:)
So I am totally flattered and you are most welcome to carry on and do what you say "I would love to bestow only my best for thee."
"Because, you're you...","Just for you...", "With just you... ","Provide for you...", "Why for you? "
These lines are simple and effective. It makes me feel that you are talking only to me :), I mean to only the reader.
The flow of the poem was smooth and pleasant when I read it out loud, it's a great serenade.
I think that you have indeed achieve your objective
"I want my words to be your
comfort and alleviate your fears. "
Let me know if you're running for presidency. Oops sorry I forgot, I'm not American.
I enjoyed the poem thoroughly.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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I feel as if after reading this poem , I have found a best friend who is selfless and who is there just for me. Apologies to all other readers of this poem but I don't think that I will let you go.:)
So I am totally flattered and you are most welcome to carry on and do what you say "I would love to bestow only my best for thee."
"Because, you're you...","Just for you...", "With just you... ","Provide for you...", "Why for you? "
These lines are simple and effective. It makes me feel that you are talking only to me :), I mean to only the reader.
The flow of the poem was smooth and pleasant when I read it out loud, it's a great serenade.
I think that you have indeed achieve your objective
"I want my words to be your
comfort and alleviate your fears. "
Let me know if you're running for presidency. Oops sorry I forgot, I'm not American.
I enjoyed the poem thoroughly.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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The office just got grabbed up recently, but could you imagine the field day the media will have with all of these reviews. lol
The lines that you stated as simple and effective were actually my interagations of myself as I was writing the body. The naturally wanted to fit in.
"I want my words to be your comfort and alleviate your fears." This has been a point of mine as this years on so many fronts, just to say hi or trying to do something, I have been hit with such attitudes, that the fears in many women reminds me of "A Christmas Carol." These women are there own Scruge, fearing about the past, what could happen in the future and/or the future.
I thank you very much for this review and those compliments. Have a great week ahead, Mike
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Scandalous!!! I'm so glad that you've been sparred!
Keep writing and happy!
Comment from eveeator
This is so great, I love every word, the artwork, I love the format you write it in, I love the way you separate it with the - - You lines inbetween, this works so well, and I want someone to think and say all these things to me and mean them, truly lovely and great thought translated into your piece of poetry, keep well regards Yvonne
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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This is so great, I love every word, the artwork, I love the format you write it in, I love the way you separate it with the - - You lines inbetween, this works so well, and I want someone to think and say all these things to me and mean them, truly lovely and great thought translated into your piece of poetry, keep well regards Yvonne
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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The lines in were actually my own interagation of myself as I was working on the body. Until I deem it a finished work, ready for posting. I try to keep the form fluid allowing each poem to seek its own. I thank you so very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from wierdgrace
great try with the photoshop I have to do that once in a while, I use to be good at it, now I am lazy, this is great, enjoyable, excellent, no revisions, and no errors. just emotions as you said.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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great try with the photoshop I have to do that once in a while, I use to be good at it, now I am lazy, this is great, enjoyable, excellent, no revisions, and no errors. just emotions as you said.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2008
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I really enjoy the tools that photoshop has to offer. Being a photographer, I don't use too much retouching, but it is great to fix exposures. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
