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A modern sonnet on life's twists and turns.74 total reviews
Comment from E. W. Crowe
What's the old country song? You could have missed the pain, but then you would have missed the dance. This is a lot like that. You know it's the downs that make the ups so wonderful. Ying-Yang, right?
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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What's the old country song? You could have missed the pain, but then you would have missed the dance. This is a lot like that. You know it's the downs that make the ups so wonderful. Ying-Yang, right?
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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You're not the person who said one of my poems reminded him of Garth Brooks lyrics are you? This is the second time in a couple days I've reminded someone of country music! I'm a classic rock gal. LOL But I guess I must have more country in me than I ever figured. ;-) Thanks for your most interesting review :-) Brooke
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I may have been that person. But you do know there are some astonishing similarities between classic rock and country music. That's why so many of them are made into country songs.
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I would imagine the ties between most genres of music are stronger than their differences :-) There are actually some country songs I like - usually the lyrics more than the music.
Comment from DictionaryGirl
Oh how true this poem is! Nothing in life in a guarantee and if our destiny was something we could look at and know what was going to happen would we? Anyway good poem I really liked it!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Oh how true this poem is! Nothing in life in a guarantee and if our destiny was something we could look at and know what was going to happen would we? Anyway good poem I really liked it!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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I'm glad you got meaning from my musings. Thank you! Peace, Brooke : -)
Comment from olagherej
Yea, life is unpredictable, thats the scary but yet beautiful thing about it. Good poem though none the less. I think its better we take each step by step
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Yea, life is unpredictable, thats the scary but yet beautiful thing about it. Good poem though none the less. I think its better we take each step by step
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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yes, that is the point of the poem, that it is best left unpredictable. I am glad you agree. Thank you for your positive review. Peace, Brooke
Comment from RaymondJohn
I admit I'm glad I don't know what the future holds for me. I know where I'll end up after all is said and done. Nice job. You put your ideas across very well. Ray.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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I admit I'm glad I don't know what the future holds for me. I know where I'll end up after all is said and done. Nice job. You put your ideas across very well. Ray.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Ray, thanks for yet another perceptive commentary! :-) Brooke
Comment from snowhite
OMG! this is WONDERFUL! i love the sonnet form and you use it well. also, the theme is hefty: "no way to know if this my final day/ might be, no chart wherein each hour plotted" - it gets right to the point, and it somehow reminds me of Shakespeare and his references to impermanence, etc. it is a timeless poem, though executed in a very modern way. also, i like the fresh attitude which says: "But no chart was written nor would I read;/
life as I want it is not guaranteed." it says that one has to make one's own fortune in life & not rely on the fortune-tellers & i agree.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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OMG! this is WONDERFUL! i love the sonnet form and you use it well. also, the theme is hefty: "no way to know if this my final day/ might be, no chart wherein each hour plotted" - it gets right to the point, and it somehow reminds me of Shakespeare and his references to impermanence, etc. it is a timeless poem, though executed in a very modern way. also, i like the fresh attitude which says: "But no chart was written nor would I read;/
life as I want it is not guaranteed." it says that one has to make one's own fortune in life & not rely on the fortune-tellers & i agree.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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you are a most enthusiastic and positive reviewer - thank you! :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
We meet again; this time with a wonderfully reflective sonnet about life.
The "graph" metaphor is delightful.
(Don't "days" and "ones" need apostrophes in the 2nd stanza?)
I agree with the sentiments--the alternative is pretty boring.
See you again, soon.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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We meet again; this time with a wonderfully reflective sonnet about life.
The "graph" metaphor is delightful.
(Don't "days" and "ones" need apostrophes in the 2nd stanza?)
I agree with the sentiments--the alternative is pretty boring.
See you again, soon.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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no, they are plural, not possessive
thanks so much for your positive review :-)
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Oh, I see; I read them as which "day is dismal" which "is grand". Sorry.
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no need to apologize - we all misread someone else from time to time!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Pearl....This is a fine sonnet even though it is not the strict iambic pentameter style we are use to. The rhyme is lyrical and the flow is smooth. I think we all wonder when we will die or what lies ahead of us...but the Lord is smarter than that. Just think what a nervous wreck we would be if we had that information! I like the whole poem but to me your third stanza is the most powerful and thought provoking. Very well done....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Hi Pearl....This is a fine sonnet even though it is not the strict iambic pentameter style we are use to. The rhyme is lyrical and the flow is smooth. I think we all wonder when we will die or what lies ahead of us...but the Lord is smarter than that. Just think what a nervous wreck we would be if we had that information! I like the whole poem but to me your third stanza is the most powerful and thought provoking. Very well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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I am so glad you enjoyed this sonnet in the modern style - thanks for your supportive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from S.Yocom
This is nice, Brooke. A friend once told me that she tries to live each day as if it were her last, for one day she'll be right. I like your modern sonnet.
Sally
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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This is nice, Brooke. A friend once told me that she tries to live each day as if it were her last, for one day she'll be right. I like your modern sonnet.
Sally
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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thanks so much Sally for your most insightful comments! Brooke :-)
Comment from SteveI
Your poem is perfect as can be
but I must respectfully disagree.
To have in my hands the gaurentee,
the parchment paper of a warranty.
Oh what a life of joy and glee,
To control the future of what is to be.
The thought of avoiding the pains I see,
would certainly make the happier me!
You have great talent, rythm and ryhme.
Do not stop writing for all of time.
Sincerely,
Steve!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Your poem is perfect as can be
but I must respectfully disagree.
To have in my hands the gaurentee,
the parchment paper of a warranty.
Oh what a life of joy and glee,
To control the future of what is to be.
The thought of avoiding the pains I see,
would certainly make the happier me!
You have great talent, rythm and ryhme.
Do not stop writing for all of time.
Sincerely,
Steve!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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You wrote a poem for me - I am honored :-) I'm so glad you want me to keep writing, and just for you, I will! LOL
Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from mmichelle97219
If I handed you a jewelled box
containing the next ten years
would you treat it like a pox
or share it with your peers
would you peek in just one time
in an effort to change your fate
or would you ignore it's gentle chime
and sit and watch and wait
i thought your poem was excellent. I thought the meanign and beat and just everything about it was excellent.
Michelle
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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If I handed you a jewelled box
containing the next ten years
would you treat it like a pox
or share it with your peers
would you peek in just one time
in an effort to change your fate
or would you ignore it's gentle chime
and sit and watch and wait
i thought your poem was excellent. I thought the meanign and beat and just everything about it was excellent.
Michelle
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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I love the poem you included - thank you for your thoughtful comments,Brooke :-)
