The Tail of Two Cities.
Politics or art consciousness?65 total reviews
Comment from earthlybeing
It is a well written poem. It has a lot of great detail. It is interesting how and Art Commission can hold so much power over a city. But you know how it goes it who you know and the strings you pull and not what is necessarily correct. I can understand your frustration. Thanks Jeanette
reply by the author on 13-May-2008
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It is a well written poem. It has a lot of great detail. It is interesting how and Art Commission can hold so much power over a city. But you know how it goes it who you know and the strings you pull and not what is necessarily correct. I can understand your frustration. Thanks Jeanette
Comment Written 13-May-2008
reply by the author on 13-May-2008
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I do. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Nanny 6
Now that was an informative read about Zappa and the Balitmores public city art. You always have something to say and it is alway profound. I enjoyed your poem and your authors notes. Who says you cant' learn stuff on FS? Great job, my friend. Judy
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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Now that was an informative read about Zappa and the Balitmores public city art. You always have something to say and it is alway profound. I enjoyed your poem and your authors notes. Who says you cant' learn stuff on FS? Great job, my friend. Judy
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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Wow, what an honor to be bestowed. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from jsturgeon
This was a great poem with detail. It was also very long, but that made it a very enjoyable poem. Overall, I think it was a very good poem. Danielle Sturgeon.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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This was a great poem with detail. It was also very long, but that made it a very enjoyable poem. Overall, I think it was a very good poem. Danielle Sturgeon.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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When I hear comments and responses like you have about the poem's length, it tells me that I have planned very well. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Shari_K
I thought this was well written, more like a short story, but still written very well with political views I would think that most people could connect with? I'm glad for your notes so that I could understand most of it. I do think though that there are a lot of poetry that could be hard to understand, but that doesn't make for a bad poem, it is how well it is written, how well the flow and structure and I think you did great with those and with that I give you 5 stars.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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I thought this was well written, more like a short story, but still written very well with political views I would think that most people could connect with? I'm glad for your notes so that I could understand most of it. I do think though that there are a lot of poetry that could be hard to understand, but that doesn't make for a bad poem, it is how well it is written, how well the flow and structure and I think you did great with those and with that I give you 5 stars.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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When I started here, I was intimidated by one poetess I refused to review her works. Then I read it about six times, posted it at work and the key was found to unlock its beauty. Her poems held several meanings, through imagery at once. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Max Edon
Was this poem meant to be funny? I certainly did laugh at it. I don't know who Schaefer is, but I do know Zappa! Great poem.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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Was this poem meant to be funny? I certainly did laugh at it. I don't know who Schaefer is, but I do know Zappa! Great poem.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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You have to have a sense of humor about city government! Both of them fit in nicely. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Johnny Carwash
The message of this poem is commendable, but it just came off as a little too prosey for me. I realize this is free verse, but it still read more like a story than a poem.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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The message of this poem is commendable, but it just came off as a little too prosey for me. I realize this is free verse, but it still read more like a story than a poem.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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It actually contains three stories. The former mayor's statue, Frank Zappa's statue and the total hiprocrasy of the art commission. Thank you for taking the time to review this.
Comment from AlvinTEthington
I think I understand what you are doing with this poem and it is innovative to put song titles in poems (though that is becoming more common), but I think it makes the flow ragged. The prose poem juxtaposes such different thoughts that I had trouble understanding how it all formed a unified whole. I think you have two poems here--one about the mayor, and one about Frank Zappa. The connection, of course, is Baltimore. So I have two suggestions--either split the poem into two separate poems, or expand the poem to be about Baltimore and add other famous people from Baltimore, such as Edgar Allan Poe. Powerful descriptions in this poem, however.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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I think I understand what you are doing with this poem and it is innovative to put song titles in poems (though that is becoming more common), but I think it makes the flow ragged. The prose poem juxtaposes such different thoughts that I had trouble understanding how it all formed a unified whole. I think you have two poems here--one about the mayor, and one about Frank Zappa. The connection, of course, is Baltimore. So I have two suggestions--either split the poem into two separate poems, or expand the poem to be about Baltimore and add other famous people from Baltimore, such as Edgar Allan Poe. Powerful descriptions in this poem, however.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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I alway appreciate your review and understand it. The main emphasis is actually about the art commission. I regret that the title couldn't incorperate its full length "The Tail Of Two Cities, Wagged by the Art Comittee. Thank you for your review.
Also, I was planing to record this like one of Zappa's songs. My musician friend has a complex. lol Being a R&B and jazz combination, many of Zappa songs have turns in it. This one was really a challenge, five days in the mind and five hours putting it on the board. I enjoyed penning this one.
Comment from The Guardian
Mike
This is such a well-put-together ballad (I think). It describes the inner workings of this Art Commission and I love you to incorporate the positions, the mayor, the artists who were honored, etc. in your verses. Such a great job. Had to laugh when the subject turned to Frank Zappa. He was an early predecessor of Wierd Al Jancovic. Offensive, yes. But Al's lyrics, equally offensive were more harmonic with the times. Zappa was a genius, an artist, and a rebel. You do him justice with this piece.
Excellent job!
Merle
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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Mike
This is such a well-put-together ballad (I think). It describes the inner workings of this Art Commission and I love you to incorporate the positions, the mayor, the artists who were honored, etc. in your verses. Such a great job. Had to laugh when the subject turned to Frank Zappa. He was an early predecessor of Wierd Al Jancovic. Offensive, yes. But Al's lyrics, equally offensive were more harmonic with the times. Zappa was a genius, an artist, and a rebel. You do him justice with this piece.
Excellent job!
Merle
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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I did try to get my musician friend who composes over here to turn this into a Zappa like song.
Comment from Grimgranite
A job well done, but a little long for my taste. But it does deserve a high rating since I usually don't like reading such poems. Keep up the good work and I will to stop back by during my travels through cyber-space to read more of your work.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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A job well done, but a little long for my taste. But it does deserve a high rating since I usually don't like reading such poems. Keep up the good work and I will to stop back by during my travels through cyber-space to read more of your work.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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Well, you just told me that I actually had the propper length as I held you. If I shortened this up, I bet there would have been a comment about being disjointed. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from phild
This felt like a short story to me or maybe even and editorial, but not a poem. I understand your message and agree with most of it but I think I was in the mind-set of expecting something different. That doesn't mean it's bad, just different from my expectations.
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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This felt like a short story to me or maybe even and editorial, but not a poem. I understand your message and agree with most of it but I think I was in the mind-set of expecting something different. That doesn't mean it's bad, just different from my expectations.
Comment Written 12-May-2008
reply by the author on 12-May-2008
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I have had a lot of unexpected sucess with this type of poetry. Many enjoyed it because the were able to read along and put the images together in the end. I appreciate your reviews and comments.
