Willing Hearts
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Comment from Sankey
A great but continually mysterious read. Quite a few possible spags, sorry.
Not sure about the following? I'd be happy to[o]?.
Either..."I'm guess(ing) that's right.
OR "I['m] guess that's right.
eyes a[d]verted to the floor,
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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A great but continually mysterious read. Quite a few possible spags, sorry.
Not sure about the following? I'd be happy to[o]?.
Either..."I'm guess(ing) that's right.
OR "I['m] guess that's right.
eyes a[d]verted to the floor,
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the help and have made the changes.
Comment from DeboraDyess
Barbara, it's getting intense!
A couple of things to consider...t...
~ standing right here >>> standing right there?
~ One thing's for sure we know Boss won't budge. >> One thing's for sure we know -- Boss won't budge.
~Then why you are leaving?" >> The why are you leaving?
~"I'm guess that's right." >> I guess that's right
~What do to do with them, so our cover >> What to do with them so our cover
Great story!
When my daughter had a Great Dane, Ladybug had her own matress in the giant bathroom at their house. I swear that matress was better than what Steve and I have! lol. I'm enjoying thinking of Jasper as looking like Ladybug. :)
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Barbara, it's getting intense!
A couple of things to consider...t...
~ standing right here >>> standing right there?
~ One thing's for sure we know Boss won't budge. >> One thing's for sure we know -- Boss won't budge.
~Then why you are leaving?" >> The why are you leaving?
~"I'm guess that's right." >> I guess that's right
~What do to do with them, so our cover >> What to do with them so our cover
Great story!
When my daughter had a Great Dane, Ladybug had her own matress in the giant bathroom at their house. I swear that matress was better than what Steve and I have! lol. I'm enjoying thinking of Jasper as looking like Ladybug. :)
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the help and have made the changes. Danes are great dogs. I grew up with one.
Comment from Paul McFarland
I hope that Sami is going to finally straighten out. I have been unhappy with her attitude. Hopefully that talk with Sarah will have done some good.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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I hope that Sami is going to finally straighten out. I have been unhappy with her attitude. Hopefully that talk with Sarah will have done some good.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. The does do it's job. LOL
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting chapter, but I'm not quite sure why she has jumped to the conclusion that Noah hates her, and even if he does why that would make her so angry and almost petulant. Maybe I just don't understand her reactions. But I still am enjoying the story and I am looking forward to seeing how their situation is resolved.
Wendy
Edit: "I'm guess ..." (Either "I guess" or "I'm guessing...", and a little earlier, you used "too" instead of "to".
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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An interesting chapter, but I'm not quite sure why she has jumped to the conclusion that Noah hates her, and even if he does why that would make her so angry and almost petulant. Maybe I just don't understand her reactions. But I still am enjoying the story and I am looking forward to seeing how their situation is resolved.
Wendy
Edit: "I'm guess ..." (Either "I guess" or "I'm guessing...", and a little earlier, you used "too" instead of "to".
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have made the corrections. I'm happy you helped.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The hard men fall the hardest and it's for keeps. You write an entertaining story. I wonder what's after this one. I am impressed by you novelists. How you keep it all going and stay fresh. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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The hard men fall the hardest and it's for keeps. You write an entertaining story. I wonder what's after this one. I am impressed by you novelists. How you keep it all going and stay fresh. Karen :-)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have a very ornery muse. LOL
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All I can say is, keep writing. Or, re post old ones .
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Love your stuff. Karen
Comment from Ben Colder
Sorry to be tardy in reviewing your nice story. I see you keep the same styl which is a very good write. You keep it interesting and easy to pick up and read . Good one Barb. Having good and bad days.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Sorry to be tardy in reviewing your nice story. I see you keep the same styl which is a very good write. You keep it interesting and easy to pick up and read . Good one Barb. Having good and bad days.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
As always, Barbara.
You definitely give your readers the accurate feeling of the friction of the giving and the taking between your characters, Sami and Noah. Probably like in many relationships neither of them wants to take that first step, but both hope and pray the other one will. Great storyline making it seem so real. Thank you for sharing this with us. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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As always, Barbara.
You definitely give your readers the accurate feeling of the friction of the giving and the taking between your characters, Sami and Noah. Probably like in many relationships neither of them wants to take that first step, but both hope and pray the other one will. Great storyline making it seem so real. Thank you for sharing this with us. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
The confusion between Noah and Sami continues with neither of them prepared to concede ground. You are handling the complexity of this relationship well.
Not sure if this is an idiom I'm unaware of a half mile on the Northside of the pond, but I'd have expected 'north side'.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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The confusion between Noah and Sami continues with neither of them prepared to concede ground. You are handling the complexity of this relationship well.
Not sure if this is an idiom I'm unaware of a half mile on the Northside of the pond, but I'd have expected 'north side'.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. You're probably right. I'll fix that.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
The tension builds up well here as Noah leaves to deal with an unknown threat. Sami, meanwhile, continues to feel guilty and unsure of Noah and seems to need a lot of convincing that, rather than hate her, he is actually falling in love. She doesn't seem to understand some of the complexities of emotions (or have the confidence to do so) and, instead sees them in quite a binary form. Maybe, soon, she'll start to understand.
Small edit: Are (you) implying my ego can't handle...
Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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The tension builds up well here as Noah leaves to deal with an unknown threat. Sami, meanwhile, continues to feel guilty and unsure of Noah and seems to need a lot of convincing that, rather than hate her, he is actually falling in love. She doesn't seem to understand some of the complexities of emotions (or have the confidence to do so) and, instead sees them in quite a binary form. Maybe, soon, she'll start to understand.
Small edit: Are (you) implying my ego can't handle...
Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have made the correction and appreciate the catch.
Comment from patcelaw
The story is very well written your paragraphing, and your sentence structure are all very good. It was a pleasure to listen to as it was being read aloud. It moved along very smoothly. I wish you a very good week and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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The story is very well written your paragraphing, and your sentence structure are all very good. It was a pleasure to listen to as it was being read aloud. It moved along very smoothly. I wish you a very good week and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
