Will I Rise?
a contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This could be a six-star if I had one. How profound! Sometimes we have these flashes of words that are few in number but mean so much. This is one of those.
Ralf
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
This could be a six-star if I had one. How profound! Sometimes we have these flashes of words that are few in number but mean so much. This is one of those.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written five-line poem about life that's not always good to us and we often feel discarded as trash. When we know God is with us no man can take our souls from us.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
A very well-written five-line poem about life that's not always good to us and we often feel discarded as trash. When we know God is with us no man can take our souls from us.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from The Death
Excellent word economy! It has a good flow despite being a short poem. It speaks about the outcasts doubting their decisions. And also highlights how one can rise from failures. Nice presentation. Good luck!
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
Excellent word economy! It has a good flow despite being a short poem. It speaks about the outcasts doubting their decisions. And also highlights how one can rise from failures. Nice presentation. Good luck!
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from Pantygynt
Although this form does not require rhyme or metre, merely syllabic compliance to a 2-2-5-7-5 pattern, your use of both devices here certainly adds to the overall rhythmic feel of this post-crematory piece.
I felt moved to pen a sequel that both answers your question and follows your attractive metre and rhyme scheme
Phoenix
fallen
your beauty in flames
from cold ash on new pinions
arise once again
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
Although this form does not require rhyme or metre, merely syllabic compliance to a 2-2-5-7-5 pattern, your use of both devices here certainly adds to the overall rhythmic feel of this post-crematory piece.
I felt moved to pen a sequel that both answers your question and follows your attractive metre and rhyme scheme
Phoenix
fallen
your beauty in flames
from cold ash on new pinions
arise once again
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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A six is always flattering and appreciated, and then you go and honor me with your own poetic response! Thank you, this is the highest praise!