I drew a blank
Short term memory loss26 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This rondeau is perfectly done as i can tell by the notes and i truly loved the light and lively way you did the whole piece, as we have done it before. Excellently done
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This rondeau is perfectly done as i can tell by the notes and i truly loved the light and lively way you did the whole piece, as we have done it before. Excellently done
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Thank you Barb!
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, excellent idea for a poem, J. It's not exactly the easiest thing to remember all the names of absolutely everyone.
This is a fine rhyme, and since no set metre is required top of the line work.
A pleasure to read and review today. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Ha, excellent idea for a poem, J. It's not exactly the easiest thing to remember all the names of absolutely everyone.
This is a fine rhyme, and since no set metre is required top of the line work.
A pleasure to read and review today. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Gloria, I am lucky that no set meter was required or I would have bombed miserably LOL
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your rondeau. Your image and words pair nicely. Your lines flow smoothly with good imagery. I believe the rhymes are not in place as per the rules. A rondeau has rhymes in a specific pattern throughout the entire piece and yours doesn't fit that scheme. It doesn't take away your effort. However, you may wish to label this 'modified rondeau.' Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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I enjoyed reading your rondeau. Your image and words pair nicely. Your lines flow smoothly with good imagery. I believe the rhymes are not in place as per the rules. A rondeau has rhymes in a specific pattern throughout the entire piece and yours doesn't fit that scheme. It doesn't take away your effort. However, you may wish to label this 'modified rondeau.' Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Thanks Jan
Comment from Minglement
What a melancholy, and yet touching Rondeau poem. I have never tried to write one, but you handled it beautifully and made it work well. You leave us to wonder how it worked out lol. Well done :)
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What a melancholy, and yet touching Rondeau poem. I have never tried to write one, but you handled it beautifully and made it work well. You leave us to wonder how it worked out lol. Well done :)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review and comments!
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My pleasure- take care
Comment from Eternal Muse
A good romantic Rondeau. He sounds smitten seeing this girl and is not even sure if he knows her. I liked the rhymes and flow.
I am befuddled, what do I do?
Feeling as though I am in a stew
Time is waning, think hard and fast
Seeing you sudden will not last
Excellent picture and artistic presentation, great visuals and imagery.
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A good romantic Rondeau. He sounds smitten seeing this girl and is not even sure if he knows her. I liked the rhymes and flow.
I am befuddled, what do I do?
Feeling as though I am in a stew
Time is waning, think hard and fast
Seeing you sudden will not last
Excellent picture and artistic presentation, great visuals and imagery.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Thank you,
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I really like the rondeau. Yours is excellent in every respect--skillfully-composed, descriptive, conveying a powerful message about memory failures and the mortifying feeling afterwards! Love the humor
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I really like the rondeau. Yours is excellent in every respect--skillfully-composed, descriptive, conveying a powerful message about memory failures and the mortifying feeling afterwards! Love the humor
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Janice, thanks a ton!
Comment from lyenochka
Well done expressing that dreadful feeling of "drawing a blank" when somehow we can't access that folder in our brain! If it's just the name we can't remember, the Scots have a word for that "tartle."
"I must a least offer a bon adieux" (adieu)
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Well done expressing that dreadful feeling of "drawing a blank" when somehow we can't access that folder in our brain! If it's just the name we can't remember, the Scots have a word for that "tartle."
"I must a least offer a bon adieux" (adieu)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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I have tartled more later,
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello JLR,
I believe, we all have had a memory loss (draw a blank) at some point in our lives. I've learned, it easier to man up and say, "I'm sorry, I don't recall where I met you or or something similar." It's ok, because it's the truth. This is a very good Rondeau French poem your wrote about memory loss and drawing a blank. Enjoyable read. I like these two words, "bon adieux." Goodbye forever!!! Thanks The photo used is a good one, also. Well-done. Happy writing:-)
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Hello JLR,
I believe, we all have had a memory loss (draw a blank) at some point in our lives. I've learned, it easier to man up and say, "I'm sorry, I don't recall where I met you or or something similar." It's ok, because it's the truth. This is a very good Rondeau French poem your wrote about memory loss and drawing a blank. Enjoyable read. I like these two words, "bon adieux." Goodbye forever!!! Thanks The photo used is a good one, also. Well-done. Happy writing:-)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Thank you Joyce, have a blessed dandy day.
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You are welcome.
Comment from w.j.debi
I think we all have those moments when we meet someone by chance. We know we've met them before, but when and where was it. Do they recall the meeting? It can be fun or embarrassing, or just plain befuddling. You've captured the feeling well.
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I think we all have those moments when we meet someone by chance. We know we've met them before, but when and where was it. Do they recall the meeting? It can be fun or embarrassing, or just plain befuddling. You've captured the feeling well.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Debi, thanks!
Comment from Bill Schott
This rondeau, I Drew a Blank, has the proper formatting and runs through the worst problem, forgetting a name. It really is embarrassing.
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This rondeau, I Drew a Blank, has the proper formatting and runs through the worst problem, forgetting a name. It really is embarrassing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
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Bill thanks
