Cry
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Comment from Mark Valentine
For me, this one straddles the line between a Dean Kuch-esque eerie horror poem ( the ghouls are beckoning) and a more straightforward philosophical poem - (death calls us all - just the way it is). The fact that it's open to interpretation is a plus.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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For me, this one straddles the line between a Dean Kuch-esque eerie horror poem ( the ghouls are beckoning) and a more straightforward philosophical poem - (death calls us all - just the way it is). The fact that it's open to interpretation is a plus.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Mark. As you know I like to leave the reader with some work to do. I would be leaning more towards your second option.
Steve
Comment from phill doran
Hello Steve
Don't tell me: this is a first draft that took 2 minutes!
Excellent writing Steve.
Sombre, direct - perhaps 'Gothic' even - but beautifully worded and structured.
This has got 'second' written all over it (insert smiley face, here).
Seriously, this is good stuff and I hope you get the credit is deserves.
I wish you well.
cheers
phill
Perhaps 'this' could be 'their' on line four?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Hello Steve
Don't tell me: this is a first draft that took 2 minutes!
Excellent writing Steve.
Sombre, direct - perhaps 'Gothic' even - but beautifully worded and structured.
This has got 'second' written all over it (insert smiley face, here).
Seriously, this is good stuff and I hope you get the credit is deserves.
I wish you well.
cheers
phill
Perhaps 'this' could be 'their' on line four?
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Phill. I always like it when the very first review is a sixer - much appreciated.
Took about 30 minutes actually while I fiddled and tweaked to get the idea I wanted in line with the required syllable count.
I shouldn't have moaned about all the second places - I didn't even get near the podium in the last contest, and as usual I thought I'd written a winner...
Steve
