Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great job in writing in Robert's trido poem form, Patricia. I'm wondering if you really did get 3 dozen gifts because moms are often forgotten at Christmas! But I like that your family members are your most precious gifts!

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

I never got three dozen gifts as a child. I was lucky to get and orange, apple and a walnut in my stocking.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Passing the tree around to shield the gifts, that it's a very nice tradition:
"tree that morn
long ago."Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review.

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

What a meaningful and beautiful Christmas poem! I especially love the theme of the poem which is reinforced in your author notes. This is so true! I like this form too. Are there any rules about rhyme? I will check out Robert's poem too. This is intriguing and really lovely. Merry Christmas to you and your "gifts." MM

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review. The only rule I found was that each line had to have 3 syllables and could be as many stanzas as you want, nothing was said about rhyming.

reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Author Notes "I once was lost but now I'm found" (Amazing Grace) Our post modern society has valued the cheap and cheapened the valuable. This is a style I created for this poem and developed the style specifically for this poem. I call it a Trido. (Each stanza has 4 lines of 3 syllables per line) The minimum rhyme standard is abcb. There can be unlimited number of stanzas.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A clever and festive Trido poem Patricia and I'm glad you tried one of these and your memories helped you to make this poem mean something, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

The three dozen gifts was not the case. I seldom got a lot of gifts for Christ,mas as a child. I was lucky to have an orange, apple and walnuts in a stocking.

Comment from RodG

Good

I like the comparison of those gifts you received as a child to those you see now as an aged adult. But three dozen makes you sound terribly greedy. May I suggest rephrasing line 1 as: The special
(One small error line 4-UNDER the)
You also do not need a comma in line 2 or at the end of lines 3 & 5.
Rod

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 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review, and catching the errors.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a lovely verse that you've posted for the Chrismas Poetry contest.
Nicely done. I found one typo: underh the
I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

What a wonderful offering in Trido for your Christmas contest offering, Patricia!! ;) :) Excitement around Christmas time is so very welcome no matter our age! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Trido, Christmas times did change over the years and it is true that when we get older our family members' well being and peace between everyone is more important than the gifts no matter big or small.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your poem is touching and well-written. It conveys a powerful message about how our view of gifts matures as we do. Yes, those family members are surely gifts!

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 Comment Written 11-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019

Thanks for the review.