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Comment from LynSys
That's quite a picture you've painted there Bill...one I'm sure those who went to see it did more than "oo" and "oh"!
Great imagery...I think ;o)))
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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That's quite a picture you've painted there Bill...one I'm sure those who went to see it did more than "oo" and "oh"!
Great imagery...I think ;o)))
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Lyn. I would have paid to see that (or to forget it).
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love it, Bill! LOL, Poor Milton, I don't think I'd fancy a hose shoved up my nose! I really enjoyed your story in a poem contest entry, my friend, it's fun and bouncy. Good luck! :) Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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I love it, Bill! LOL, Poor Milton, I don't think I'd fancy a hose shoved up my nose! I really enjoyed your story in a poem contest entry, my friend, it's fun and bouncy. Good luck! :) Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Sandra. It is a bit gross.
Comment from Alyssa Reynoso-Morris
I appreciate the rhyming. I am more of a free-style poet because rhyming is challenging for me. This author tells a comedic story and paints a vivid picture while rhyming the whole time for all 6 stanzas. I could picture the magic trick; I grew up in NYC where there are many street performers. After reading the trick, I found myself re-reading those stanzas as the trick was original, which adds to the originality of the poem. With that said, I would share this poem with middle school or high school students as it is comedic to keep them engaged yet easy enough to understand. Great job!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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I appreciate the rhyming. I am more of a free-style poet because rhyming is challenging for me. This author tells a comedic story and paints a vivid picture while rhyming the whole time for all 6 stanzas. I could picture the magic trick; I grew up in NYC where there are many street performers. After reading the trick, I found myself re-reading those stanzas as the trick was original, which adds to the originality of the poem. With that said, I would share this poem with middle school or high school students as it is comedic to keep them engaged yet easy enough to understand. Great job!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Alyssa. I appreciate that you would consider this to share with your students. Bill
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very interesting story you have penned for the Share a Story in a Poem contest. You used very good words and very good descriptive words for the imagery. Blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Bill, This is a very interesting story you have penned for the Share a Story in a Poem contest. You used very good words and very good descriptive words for the imagery. Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Kelly Grim
This was such an enjoyable read... first off, your meter is perfect and your rhyme spot on! The story is a little bit gross (haha!), but so vibrant and so well told in this poem! Love the characters, had a little trouble following the trick itself and how it ended, but this was really an enjoyable read!
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This was such an enjoyable read... first off, your meter is perfect and your rhyme spot on! The story is a little bit gross (haha!), but so vibrant and so well told in this poem! Love the characters, had a little trouble following the trick itself and how it ended, but this was really an enjoyable read!
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Kelly. Milton melts, Dodo sucks him up through a hose into his nose then, after inflating a rubber shark, vomits on it and Milton reappears. Yeesh!
