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Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I think this is just for fun. I actually thought, is there any day that doesn't end in Y? But I got it. Telly did need to work on his diet daily but apparently didn't so alas, his heart couldn't take it.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Lol. I think this is just for fun. I actually thought, is there any day that doesn't end in Y? But I got it. Telly did need to work on his diet daily but apparently didn't so alas, his heart couldn't take it.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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People tried to tell him.
Comment from rspoet
Why, oh why, must every day end in "y"
If I ate a deep-fried butterstick
I'd be prone to dying, too.
I guess he just fizzled out
or maybe he was electrocuted.
Schott with good humor and rhyme.
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Why, oh why, must every day end in "y"
If I ate a deep-fried butterstick
I'd be prone to dying, too.
I guess he just fizzled out
or maybe he was electrocuted.
Schott with good humor and rhyme.
Well done
RS
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks, RS
Comment from jdrhye
Cute read... I suppose many meanings could be derived from this clever little write. Individual realities and life styles may vary in opinions. The flow and rhythm are good.
J
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Cute read... I suppose many meanings could be derived from this clever little write. Individual realities and life styles may vary in opinions. The flow and rhythm are good.
J
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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THANKS, J
Comment from Angela Post
I enjoyed your poem. It was humourous. It sounds like he quite enjoyed his food, perhaps a little too much. I like the lighthearted nature of the poem and an unusual ending.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
I enjoyed your poem. It was humourous. It sounds like he quite enjoyed his food, perhaps a little too much. I like the lighthearted nature of the poem and an unusual ending.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Angela
Comment from meeshu
WONDERFUL POEM, bill. fun and funny. with a limerickish pace.
whoa, spellcheck hated that. oh well, I really enjoyed your poem.
at first I thought it would be about a goodfellow.......meeshu
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
WONDERFUL POEM, bill. fun and funny. with a limerickish pace.
whoa, spellcheck hated that. oh well, I really enjoyed your poem.
at first I thought it would be about a goodfellow.......meeshu
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Meeshu
Comment from nomi338
Foolish fish. He should have known better, follow your diet down to the letter. Never ever deviate, never ever regret what you ate. Make your stomach your prized possession, never let food be your only obsession. I hope that he learned this valuable lesson.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Foolish fish. He should have known better, follow your diet down to the letter. Never ever deviate, never ever regret what you ate. Make your stomach your prized possession, never let food be your only obsession. I hope that he learned this valuable lesson.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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The lesson was likely learned by the witnesses.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your appealing version of mono-verse rhyme and the message. It's a message we should heed about dietary and exercise changes. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
I enjoyed your appealing version of mono-verse rhyme and the message. It's a message we should heed about dietary and exercise changes. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Joan
Comment from judiverse
Actually, this sounds like people I've seen in those electric carts at Kroger. You get more mileage out of jellyfish than the journalists do out of Trump. Excellent synonyms for fat in your first stanza. I would not recommend the deep fried butterstick. I believe they have them at our Indiana State Fair. That could certainly stop a jellyfish heart. Great work with your rhyme. judi
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Actually, this sounds like people I've seen in those electric carts at Kroger. You get more mileage out of jellyfish than the journalists do out of Trump. Excellent synonyms for fat in your first stanza. I would not recommend the deep fried butterstick. I believe they have them at our Indiana State Fair. That could certainly stop a jellyfish heart. Great work with your rhyme. judi
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Judi
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from Katya
Light and humorous, but maybe an unkind characterization at bottom? Anyway, somebody we certainly don't want to emulate! Great name for the character! You use rhyme and meter well.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Light and humorous, but maybe an unkind characterization at bottom? Anyway, somebody we certainly don't want to emulate! Great name for the character! You use rhyme and meter well.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Katya
Comment from jusylee72
Well, I did just that, went back to the beginning and read it again. It still didn't make a huge difference, except I understood the line about days ending in Y the second time. ( The first time I said. "What is the country or city or an imaginary place called Y) Still, though I don't truly understand it other than dying from too much butter. It was definitely interesting to read.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Well, I did just that, went back to the beginning and read it again. It still didn't make a huge difference, except I understood the line about days ending in Y the second time. ( The first time I said. "What is the country or city or an imaginary place called Y) Still, though I don't truly understand it other than dying from too much butter. It was definitely interesting to read.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Rotund with bulbous belly = Santa times two fat with a stomach looking like a huge bulb
Amorphous fellow = fat to point of shapelessness
in a cart = has to get the electric cart to move his mass around