Painless
A six-word story.24 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Maria,
Your words are strong but sad.
They do paint a horrible picture--something that is true some of the time.
You did a good job with the prompt.
The image is perfect & so sad itself.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Maria,
Your words are strong but sad.
They do paint a horrible picture--something that is true some of the time.
You did a good job with the prompt.
The image is perfect & so sad itself.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jan.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Maria Jose, those are stark six words, which you managed to turn into a full blown story. The imagination just takes over. Yeah, she's free, but at what price. I liked this a lot. Very well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Wow, Maria Jose, those are stark six words, which you managed to turn into a full blown story. The imagination just takes over. Yeah, she's free, but at what price. I liked this a lot. Very well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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You know what? When I wrote this, I kept on thinking of Sally. This could have been her...
Thanks for reading and for the generous rating.
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Yeah, that could have been Sally. What a great compliment that my story should give you inspiration. Next chapter is coming soon. xx
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Cool!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH yes this is a complete story in six words and it is as complete as can be. Todays happening and the whole thing so uncalled for and so many get away with it
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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OH yes this is a complete story in six words and it is as complete as can be. Todays happening and the whole thing so uncalled for and so many get away with it
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your review, Barb.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Maria
= Boy, this is far too true these days.
= Excellent depiction in these six words, and the artwork sends it all home.
= Good entry. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers, J
*** Happy Holidays ***
(*.*) A Smile Is A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Hi, Maria
= Boy, this is far too true these days.
= Excellent depiction in these six words, and the artwork sends it all home.
= Good entry. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers, J
*** Happy Holidays ***
(*.*) A Smile Is A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Jax.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow.
There's a lot of meaning in these six simple words, Maria.
Although this story has been told using only six words, I think we can all figure out what type of life this poor woman must've led before her significant other put her out of her misery.
Excellent...
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Wow.
There's a lot of meaning in these six simple words, Maria.
Although this story has been told using only six words, I think we can all figure out what type of life this poor woman must've led before her significant other put her out of her misery.
Excellent...
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your review, Dean. Have a nice weekend.
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You too, Maria.
You do the same.
Comment from aryr
That most definitely says everything in just six words. How sad that something like this could happen and unfortunately it does. I agree she is free but what a terrible price to pay for that freedom. Well done. Thanks Maria.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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That most definitely says everything in just six words. How sad that something like this could happen and unfortunately it does. I agree she is free but what a terrible price to pay for that freedom. Well done. Thanks Maria.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reviewing, Aryr.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from patcelaw
Maria, this is a sad thought, but true all too often. Men who kill are evil as far as I am concerned. It also holds true for women who kill. Many blessings for a great weekend. Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Maria, this is a sad thought, but true all too often. Men who kill are evil as far as I am concerned. It also holds true for women who kill. Many blessings for a great weekend. Patricia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your review, Patricia.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt six-word story. Too many people are abused and keep it silent until they are killed by the abuser before the abuse is revealed.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt six-word story. Too many people are abused and keep it silent until they are killed by the abuser before the abuse is revealed.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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So true.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from dracofelsinensis
Very impressive for six words and only six syllables (because 'killed' is pronounced /kild/ and the other five words are all monosyllables).
It's quite a thought, that being killed might represent a liberation; it makes me think of some very painful incurable illness, from which death comes as a merciful release. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Very impressive for six words and only six syllables (because 'killed' is pronounced /kild/ and the other five words are all monosyllables).
It's quite a thought, that being killed might represent a liberation; it makes me think of some very painful incurable illness, from which death comes as a merciful release. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your interesting review. I hadn't thought about the syllable thing.
Comment from tfawcus
The sentence break between these two statements adds a dramatic pause that gives time for the full meaning of this short story to take effect in the mind of your reader. It is to your credit that, despite the strength of the picture, the story line does not depend upon it for its effect.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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The sentence break between these two statements adds a dramatic pause that gives time for the full meaning of this short story to take effect in the mind of your reader. It is to your credit that, despite the strength of the picture, the story line does not depend upon it for its effect.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind review. Have a nice weekend.
