~ Heart and Soul ~
Short Poem - 20 Syllables23 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
There are loves that touch our heart and our soul exactly as you describe them. The word 'imprint' is perfect here.
Good luck in the contest. I think you deserve a six, but I have none left.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
There are loves that touch our heart and our soul exactly as you describe them. The word 'imprint' is perfect here.
Good luck in the contest. I think you deserve a six, but I have none left.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Maria JG, Thank you so much for popping in to review my short poem. Your comments are very much appreciated as is the mention of a six - thank you. ~DD
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Good imagery that shows
the effect he had on you,
and it will seemingly
always be there to touch your soul.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
-Nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Good imagery that shows
the effect he had on you,
and it will seemingly
always be there to touch your soul.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Pam, Thank you so much for popping in to review my short poem. Your comments are very much appreciated, as always. ~DD
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You are quite welcome, DD.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Well done with your Short Poem, 20 syllables poem.
Very descriptive and I love the picture. Not so easy to create such a picture with so few words.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
Well done with your Short Poem, 20 syllables poem.
Very descriptive and I love the picture. Not so easy to create such a picture with so few words.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much Sharon for popping in to review my short poem. Your comments are very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello nice entry and nice use of the words
My heart skipped a beat
while the imprint
of you
I wonder who is this the special person in your life.
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
Hello nice entry and nice use of the words
My heart skipped a beat
while the imprint
of you
I wonder who is this the special person in your life.
Gert
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much Gert for popping in to review my short poem. Your comments are very much appreciated, as always. ~DD
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You are welcome DD
Gert
Comment from Irish Rain
A delightful entry in this short poem contest. I find this little contests so much harder than the big ones, but yours is a wonderful offering!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
A delightful entry in this short poem contest. I find this little contests so much harder than the big ones, but yours is a wonderful offering!! Blessings...
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Irish Rain, Thank you so much for popping in to review my short poem. Your comments are very much appreciated, as always. ~DD
Comment from Pantygynt
If I suggest you move the "forever" so it becomes the last word, I am not complaining about a split infinitve but suggesting that "forever" is a really strong word to end on and it wouldn't make any difference to the total syllable count.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
If I suggest you move the "forever" so it becomes the last word, I am not complaining about a split infinitve but suggesting that "forever" is a really strong word to end on and it wouldn't make any difference to the total syllable count.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Pantygynt, Thank you so much for your review of my short poem. Your comments are very much appreciated, as always. I had a play around and decided to take up your suggestion to move the word 'forever'. I think it does work better. Thank you. ~DD
Comment from Kazzawin
Very nice short poem.
Not easy to fit much in but you have managed to tell a story of love in the past, present and future. In just a few words.
Well done and good luck in the contest : )
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
Very nice short poem.
Not easy to fit much in but you have managed to tell a story of love in the past, present and future. In just a few words.
Well done and good luck in the contest : )
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Kazzawin, thank you for taking the time to review my short poem. Your comments are much appreciated. Have a lovely weekend. ~DD
Comment from fastdigits
you say so much in but 20 syllables, warm words that spill down the page in an artistic sculptured phrase of words of love.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
you say so much in but 20 syllables, warm words that spill down the page in an artistic sculptured phrase of words of love.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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fastdigits, your comments are very much appreciated. Thank you for taking the time to review my short poem. Have a lovely weekend. ~DD
Comment from johnwilson
First, thank you for writing a piece that made me smile. I felt something when I read your short poem, which means, to me, that you did it right. I felt love!!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
First, thank you for writing a piece that made me smile. I felt something when I read your short poem, which means, to me, that you did it right. I felt love!!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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JohnWilson, I appreciate you taking the time to review my short poem. Your comments are much appreciated and I am pleased to have put a smile on your face. Thank you ~DD
Comment from Kerry Foley
I really love your short poem, my friend.
"while the imprint
of you
remains
to forever
touch my soul ~" So beautiful! Good luck! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
I really love your short poem, my friend.
"while the imprint
of you
remains
to forever
touch my soul ~" So beautiful! Good luck! ~Kerry
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Kerry, thank you so much for taking the time to review my short poem. Your comments are appreciated : -) ~DD
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It was my pleasure:)