Perennials of War
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi;
another well written chapter filled with intrigue and mystique. I wonder if the showdown will go in Anderson's favor. I'm already looking forward to the next chapter, though I know you will be very busy,
May God bless you as your work with these evacuees,
~patty~
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Hi;
another well written chapter filled with intrigue and mystique. I wonder if the showdown will go in Anderson's favor. I'm already looking forward to the next chapter, though I know you will be very busy,
May God bless you as your work with these evacuees,
~patty~
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
There we go. Some good food, lots of money and some action. I can't wait to see what happens next. I had some time to review this morning. Thank goodness, all caught up for now. Thanks for sharing
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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There we go. Some good food, lots of money and some action. I can't wait to see what happens next. I had some time to review this morning. Thank goodness, all caught up for now. Thanks for sharing
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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I always enjoy hearing from you. I understand time issues.
Comment from rama devi
Sending prayers. Wonderful you can work with the evacuee kids. Bless you.
As usual, you nailed the closing hook. Good build up of tension. good pacing, dialog and characterization. just a few suggestions:
*and was ready for new customers,(;) the two men who had been watching from the bar occupied it.
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As Maxim set the dinner plates in front of Anderson, Philip, and Jeff, another man(,) joined the four sitting at the next table.
* You two have forgotten your Texas roots(,) and Anderson(,) you own a huge ranch in Texas."
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"I'm sure(,) for the correct amount of money(,) you will."
*"Oh(,) what the heck."
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Sending prayers. Wonderful you can work with the evacuee kids. Bless you.
As usual, you nailed the closing hook. Good build up of tension. good pacing, dialog and characterization. just a few suggestions:
*and was ready for new customers,(;) the two men who had been watching from the bar occupied it.
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As Maxim set the dinner plates in front of Anderson, Philip, and Jeff, another man(,) joined the four sitting at the next table.
* You two have forgotten your Texas roots(,) and Anderson(,) you own a huge ranch in Texas."
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"I'm sure(,) for the correct amount of money(,) you will."
*"Oh(,) what the heck."
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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I am off today, because of Labor Day so I had time to add those pesky commas. Thank you.
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Yay! It's a holiday in India too, today (Onam--harvest festival).
Comment from c_lucas
Three against five is not very good odds. No doubt others are pretending to be spectators. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Three against five is not very good odds. No doubt others are pretending to be spectators. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from rheabug
What an exciting addition to the story. I enjoyed the read and am looking forward to the next post. You are an excellent writer/author and I enjoy your post and presentations. Thank you for sharing. HUGS...
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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What an exciting addition to the story. I enjoyed the read and am looking forward to the next post. You are an excellent writer/author and I enjoy your post and presentations. Thank you for sharing. HUGS...
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I got so into this chapter and then you unexpected Cliffhanger makes it more exciting to see what happens after
Anderson whispered loudly, as they turned in unison and pointed their weapons at the five men.
Gert
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Hello Barb
I got so into this chapter and then you unexpected Cliffhanger makes it more exciting to see what happens after
Anderson whispered loudly, as they turned in unison and pointed their weapons at the five men.
Gert
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Smiles and you are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Sankey
This needed another SIX! I loved the suspense and drama. Can't wait to see what happens next. Good work and absolutely NO SPAGS this time around. The picture is good, too. Thanks again!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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This needed another SIX! I loved the suspense and drama. Can't wait to see what happens next. Good work and absolutely NO SPAGS this time around. The picture is good, too. Thanks again!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you for this wonderful review.
Comment from Sasha
Absolutely great work with this chapter. You are the Queen of cliffhangers and this is one is proof of that. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter which I anticipate to be as exciting as this one.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Absolutely great work with this chapter. You are the Queen of cliffhangers and this is one is proof of that. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter which I anticipate to be as exciting as this one.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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I don't do as well with the action part. LOL I hope I don't let anybody down.
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Barbara.
This was an interesting and entertaining chapter to read.
They are being followed, but they are prepared.
I'm looking forward to reading what happens next.
This looks like a typo:
Anderson placed his hand on this concealed weapon.
Did you mean...
Anderson placed his hand on HIS concealed weapon.
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Nicole
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Hi, Barbara.
This was an interesting and entertaining chapter to read.
They are being followed, but they are prepared.
I'm looking forward to reading what happens next.
This looks like a typo:
Anderson placed his hand on this concealed weapon.
Did you mean...
Anderson placed his hand on HIS concealed weapon.
?
Nicole
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Sure did. Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, what a compelling chapter, Barbara. I hope Anderson does not get over his head but he is certainly proactive. This chapter kicks up the action a notch. The end was unexpected. I noticed Shana's absence but it is nice for other characters to drive the narrative in what is developing into a crime thriller. Quite engaging and imaginative.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Wow, what a compelling chapter, Barbara. I hope Anderson does not get over his head but he is certainly proactive. This chapter kicks up the action a notch. The end was unexpected. I noticed Shana's absence but it is nice for other characters to drive the narrative in what is developing into a crime thriller. Quite engaging and imaginative.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
