Tanka Waka
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Comment from SueZen
Good first try, but more like a "statement" than a poem.
Particularly as content (and picture) evoke the vast, boundless, free
realms of the Natural world, the wild horses galloping at the "speed of light",
the wind in their manes, spirited creatures indeed, I would suggest to make poem less "rational", more "mystical" and symbolic of the awesomeness, magic and power of, in this case, horses.
See in book Medicine Cards (Jamie Sams & David Carson) chapter on Horse, you'll love it - Native Indian in symbolism, wisdom and teachings.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Good first try, but more like a "statement" than a poem.
Particularly as content (and picture) evoke the vast, boundless, free
realms of the Natural world, the wild horses galloping at the "speed of light",
the wind in their manes, spirited creatures indeed, I would suggest to make poem less "rational", more "mystical" and symbolic of the awesomeness, magic and power of, in this case, horses.
See in book Medicine Cards (Jamie Sams & David Carson) chapter on Horse, you'll love it - Native Indian in symbolism, wisdom and teachings.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thanks Suzen, I am learning and it is suppose to be like a sentence.
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Okay then !
Comment from lyenochka
It must have been an amazing sight to see a herd of wild horses running across the plan! The Native Americans certainly had more of a spiritual interpretation of the world. Good alliteration in the "saw...symbols...spirit" and "wild...west...world."
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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It must have been an amazing sight to see a herd of wild horses running across the plan! The Native Americans certainly had more of a spiritual interpretation of the world. Good alliteration in the "saw...symbols...spirit" and "wild...west...world."
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and review.
Comment from kahpot
Good on you I am still learning about Tanka and other styles so no help or change from here to me this is excellent, not hard to see from your artwork why they are considered spirits so free and pure ( back in the day) thank you****kahpot
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Good on you I am still learning about Tanka and other styles so no help or change from here to me this is excellent, not hard to see from your artwork why they are considered spirits so free and pure ( back in the day) thank you****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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I thank you for your wonderful comments and review. I am just learning about many styles myself that I've never heard of; so exciting and fun. Kerry
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, Kerry, Natives saw horses as symbols of the spirit world. You lovely tanka captured the sense of wildness and freedom of these noble animals. You also capture the vastness of the western landscape as horses ran across it.
Thank you for sharing your superb tanka.
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Yes, Kerry, Natives saw horses as symbols of the spirit world. You lovely tanka captured the sense of wildness and freedom of these noble animals. You also capture the vastness of the western landscape as horses ran across it.
Thank you for sharing your superb tanka.
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much Andre, I honestly was not certain It was correct, it was my 1st; Whew~Glad you like it. lol
