Child Prodigy (500 words)
Angel or Demon?24 total reviews
Comment from Heidi M
What a fascinating story and interesting perspective. This is a great supernatural flash fiction. Very intriguing to have the split ownership of angels and demons.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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What a fascinating story and interesting perspective. This is a great supernatural flash fiction. Very intriguing to have the split ownership of angels and demons.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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thank you so much. Tchaikovsky's music is so brilliant and he was a troubled soul. I feel so happy that you took the time to read this. The Supernatural contest intrigued me. I am a musician but definitely not a prodigy.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi
I really enjoyed reading your story about how you saw yourself in the supernatural world and also the real world, torn between the two. Music being your life in both places. Tchaikovsky being your favorite, I just love his concerto.
I have seen children pushed into professions they do not want. and some of them do rebel. I rate this a six as exceptional.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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Hi
I really enjoyed reading your story about how you saw yourself in the supernatural world and also the real world, torn between the two. Music being your life in both places. Tchaikovsky being your favorite, I just love his concerto.
I have seen children pushed into professions they do not want. and some of them do rebel. I rate this a six as exceptional.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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thank you so much. Tchaikovsky's music is so brilliant and he was a troubled soul. I feel so happy that you took the time to read this. The Supernatural contest intrigued me. I am a musician but definitely not a prodigy.
Comment from Mabaker
Hey you nailed that one, no doubts. Very well researched which makes the difference between a great piece and an ordinary one. You told me some interesting facts that I didn't know. Well done. Regards Mabaker.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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Hey you nailed that one, no doubts. Very well researched which makes the difference between a great piece and an ordinary one. You told me some interesting facts that I didn't know. Well done. Regards Mabaker.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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thank you so much. Tchaikovsky's music is so brilliant and he was a troubled soul. I feel so happy that you took the time to read this. The Supernatural contest intrigued me. I am a musician but definitely not a prodigy.
Comment from nuthead
Fantastic! I was hooked from first sentence. Lured me in with the ever and always good and evil duel. :) Age 5, is that the Gnosis belief? Perhaps others as well. Doesn't really matter.
The story is gripping and feels real and normal, nothing supernatural per se, until the end. Beautifully done. Love it!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Fantastic! I was hooked from first sentence. Lured me in with the ever and always good and evil duel. :) Age 5, is that the Gnosis belief? Perhaps others as well. Doesn't really matter.
The story is gripping and feels real and normal, nothing supernatural per se, until the end. Beautifully done. Love it!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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thank you, enjoyed writing it. Got a lot of help on the way with critiques. So glad I made the changes now that you honor me with a six. I so appreciate it.
Comment from chcbeck
A great supernatural story I was gripped from start to finish largely due to the style it was written in. A great way the story line ended.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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A great supernatural story I was gripped from start to finish largely due to the style it was written in. A great way the story line ended.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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thank you so much.i enjoyed writing for this contest and I so appreciate your words.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This is utterly superb, what utter brilliance, I loved it , well done this is a fantastic piece of work, wonderful well done kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is utterly superb, what utter brilliance, I loved it , well done this is a fantastic piece of work, wonderful well done kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. It was a great time writing and correcting it with help from the people on line.
Thank you for making me feel special.
Comment from barkingdog
This was a very interesting and intriguing story. It kept my attention throughout.
For those of us who know Tchaikovsky, the mention of his various compositions brought magnificent sound to the piece.
Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This was a very interesting and intriguing story. It kept my attention throughout.
For those of us who know Tchaikovsky, the mention of his various compositions brought magnificent sound to the piece.
Best of luck in the contest.
:) e
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you, it is incredible music isn't it. Thrilling. I enjoyed writing this one.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Interesting piece here and generally well written. technically sound as well. Good emotions throughout.
Amazingly, both sides encouraged me to be good - blond hair, blue eyes, intelligent, gifted insight, compassionate, loyal.
- I didn't really get the significance of this within the context of the story. It's just a list of attributes, both of physical, and of personality/talent but it doesn't really go with the opening line for this paragraph. there is a certain discord. It felt, to me, that this was a way of shoehorning these in.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi there,
Interesting piece here and generally well written. technically sound as well. Good emotions throughout.
Amazingly, both sides encouraged me to be good - blond hair, blue eyes, intelligent, gifted insight, compassionate, loyal.
- I didn't really get the significance of this within the context of the story. It's just a list of attributes, both of physical, and of personality/talent but it doesn't really go with the opening line for this paragraph. there is a certain discord. It felt, to me, that this was a way of shoehorning these in.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Great point, I will go back and look at that. I meant to bring up personality traits that would capture both sides, one evil and one good. For example: Be Kind, Helpful, get others to like you, Make sure they trust you. Both evil and good could use these traits. Thank you for that great suggestion.
Comment from emptypage
Hmm. I like this. I'm not certain I get the ending...I've been awake too long, maybe??
Anyway, it held my attention. It was a fresh approach, which I always appreciate.
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"Was that how he felt at that
moment? When he wrote it, was it one of those brief moments in..."
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hmm. I like this. I'm not certain I get the ending...I've been awake too long, maybe??
Anyway, it held my attention. It was a fresh approach, which I always appreciate.
You wrote:
"Was that how he felt at that
moment? When he wrote it, was it one of those brief moments in..."
^^ Formatting/spacing issue.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I love your stage name. Me either on the ending. any suggestions. I want him to ignore the others ti e demons and the Angels and just be human.
Comment from mvbrooks
Interesting story with a very likable/ sympathetic narrator. It has elements easy to relate to--such as battles with "angels and devils" and "good and evil." The choice of Tchaikovsky ensured that the reader would be familiar with the composer's work, especially The Nutcracker.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Interesting story with a very likable/ sympathetic narrator. It has elements easy to relate to--such as battles with "angels and devils" and "good and evil." The choice of Tchaikovsky ensured that the reader would be familiar with the composer's work, especially The Nutcracker.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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thank you, his music is amazing. He is known as the sad composer but in reality, so many of his works are full of joy.
