Cautionary Tales
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Comment from Badger_29
Wow, you really covered a LOT of ground in this hilarious parody. You alluded to a lot of well known words and phrases, and took me back to Mary Poppins and that whole era.
I enjoyed such collections as scared and scarred, skivers and Skanks, and expostulations atrocious. Although ending on a humorously sorrowful note, I found this style to be whimsical, upbeat, and nothing short of meticulously genius,
Very clever, and quite quickly loquacious.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Very funny political satire.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Wow, you really covered a LOT of ground in this hilarious parody. You alluded to a lot of well known words and phrases, and took me back to Mary Poppins and that whole era.
I enjoyed such collections as scared and scarred, skivers and Skanks, and expostulations atrocious. Although ending on a humorously sorrowful note, I found this style to be whimsical, upbeat, and nothing short of meticulously genius,
Very clever, and quite quickly loquacious.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Very funny political satire.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Why thank you, Brother Badger. I am glad you enjoyed this cantankerous tomfoolery.
I have just added it as the third chapter of my 'Cautionary Tales' book. If you go back to the poem, you will see the links to the other poems at the top of the page - they are just as much fun!
Steve
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Thanks so much for reply, I really enjoyed your poem!, and will gladly take a look at some of the others.
Thanks again,
Darren
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a fun poem that galloped right along to the end of the earth. Zachary seems like someone I know and don't want to know better.
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This is a fun poem that galloped right along to the end of the earth. Zachary seems like someone I know and don't want to know better.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Bill.
That other name didn't fit in quite as well, and anyway, i enjoyed making him British!
Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from rjuselius
this is an entertaining piece of poetry dear steve! i'm not sure what to say about it but it left a smile with it. the ending is just classic in a sense that it brings so much to the table.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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this is an entertaining piece of poetry dear steve! i'm not sure what to say about it but it left a smile with it. the ending is just classic in a sense that it brings so much to the table.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Rebekka - glad you enjoyed.
Like many of my poems this started as a simple piece of rhyming fun, but the devil got into it.
Steve
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Steve,
This is a great story in a poem. Good job on the use of end &internal rhyme.
Your lines flow smoothly with a sad story for one who is such a know it all, can't be bothered by the little people.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Steve,
This is a great story in a poem. Good job on the use of end &internal rhyme.
Your lines flow smoothly with a sad story for one who is such a know it all, can't be bothered by the little people.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Jan.
I have just added it as the third chapter of my 'Cautionary Tales' book. If you go back to the poem, you will see the links to the other poems at the top of the page - they are just as much fun!
Steve
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
LOL ... that's what you get when you vote in a loud-mouthed, egotistical idiot ... a nuclear winter! Oh, this was a fun, and very clever write, Steve! Creativity to the max!!
You create vivid imagery for your reader. This is a zippy piece of writing with excellent rhyme and flow. "... but no one was left who could hear him" is a strong conclusion to your write. Excellent alliterations throughout the poem. The artwork and poem pair perfectly together.
I chorkled (is that a word? combo twixt chuckled and snorkled?) every time I read how you worked in common sayings such as "ahoy/aha/avest ye/caramba/cor blimey/oy vey, etc. You had me in stitches when I came to "Super XP Alidocious" .
It was all terrific. A stand-out line for me is: "if you think I'll be scammed and my poor noggin crammed". That really tickled my funny bone.
Fantastic job on this contest entry! Best wishes for the contest with this exceptional write.!
Connie
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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LOL ... that's what you get when you vote in a loud-mouthed, egotistical idiot ... a nuclear winter! Oh, this was a fun, and very clever write, Steve! Creativity to the max!!
You create vivid imagery for your reader. This is a zippy piece of writing with excellent rhyme and flow. "... but no one was left who could hear him" is a strong conclusion to your write. Excellent alliterations throughout the poem. The artwork and poem pair perfectly together.
I chorkled (is that a word? combo twixt chuckled and snorkled?) every time I read how you worked in common sayings such as "ahoy/aha/avest ye/caramba/cor blimey/oy vey, etc. You had me in stitches when I came to "Super XP Alidocious" .
It was all terrific. A stand-out line for me is: "if you think I'll be scammed and my poor noggin crammed". That really tickled my funny bone.
Fantastic job on this contest entry! Best wishes for the contest with this exceptional write.!
Connie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Connie, I really appreciate your thoughtful review and the six stars.
This started out as a simple piece of fun, but took on a life of its own as I approached the end. Let's hope it doesn't get too real.
Steve
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Haha, isn't it funny, Steve, how a poem will sometimes do that ... "take on a life of its own". It happens to me sometimes too. I'm determined to take a poem in a certain direction, but low and behold it sometimes just has a mind of its own. :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
This is the most terrifying poem story I ever read in fanstory, mostly because it is true partly and a very possible future.
How can this be happening in America? What will happen next? Nobody knows we must learn to use Twitter to find out what our future holds... it doesn't look good.
Your exceptional poem is a unique masterpiece. Bravo!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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This is the most terrifying poem story I ever read in fanstory, mostly because it is true partly and a very possible future.
How can this be happening in America? What will happen next? Nobody knows we must learn to use Twitter to find out what our future holds... it doesn't look good.
Your exceptional poem is a unique masterpiece. Bravo!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Gypsy, thanks for the kind words and the six stars - and sorry for frightening you, but perhaps we should all be scared. Even we kiwis, safely tucked away in our little island haven can hear the distant rumbling...
Steve
Comment from robina1978
Nice picture that complements your poem perfectly. Is it a imitation of Trump and his election. It rhymes all the way. And it tells an original story. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Nice picture that complements your poem perfectly. Is it a imitation of Trump and his election. It rhymes all the way. And it tells an original story. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind words...
It is about Herr Drumf of you want it to be!
I have just added it as the third chapter of my 'Cautionary Tales' book. If you go back to the poem, you will see the links to the other poems at the top of the page - they are just as much fun!
Steve
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good story in a poem and got me thinking about Trump lol. Sorry if you voted for him, no offence. I liked the Charatuture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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This is a good story in a poem and got me thinking about Trump lol. Sorry if you voted for him, no offence. I liked the Charatuture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you.
Thankfully I live far from the reaches of the newest resident of the White House, and I certainly wouldn't have voted for him in a month of Sundays!
Steve
Comment from Janet Foor
Well done my friend - from beginning to end. I loved the alliteration, rhyme and internal rhyme. This is a fun story in a poem to read. I even learned some new words. haha
Well done.
Blessings and good luck in the contest Steve.
Janet
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Well done my friend - from beginning to end. I loved the alliteration, rhyme and internal rhyme. This is a fun story in a poem to read. I even learned some new words. haha
Well done.
Blessings and good luck in the contest Steve.
Janet
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Janet.
I have just added it as the third chapter of my 'Cautionary Tales' book. If you go back to the poem, you will see the links to the other poems at the top of the page - they are just as much fun!
Steve
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, I wonder if our American friends think this is about their newly elected President. It was so funny to read, and you added some words that I'd long forgotten. This is a great story in a poem, and a really excellent contest entry. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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LOL, I wonder if our American friends think this is about their newly elected President. It was so funny to read, and you added some words that I'd long forgotten. This is a great story in a poem, and a really excellent contest entry. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Sandra - glad you enjoyed. Yes, some people think they know who this is about. Trump would never have made it through Oxford, though!
I have just added this poem as the third chapter in my book of 'Cautionary Tales'. If you go back to this poem you can click the links at the top to go back to the other two poems which are just as much fun.
Steve
