Judge Not The Lost Lambs
Inner city can hide some ugly truths... a poem -*NOTES*32 total reviews
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Dawn,
Excellent heptameter and rhyme. You really touch upon what Xmas should really be about. Not the giving of gifts per se, but to care for charity.
Regards
Reg
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Dear Dawn,
Excellent heptameter and rhyme. You really touch upon what Xmas should really be about. Not the giving of gifts per se, but to care for charity.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from nancyjam
You convey a strong message with your poem.
A sad story to be sure and one that touches
the heart.
Beautifully rhymed with stark images that stress
the sad situation that exists in the world today.
Nancy
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You convey a strong message with your poem.
A sad story to be sure and one that touches
the heart.
Beautifully rhymed with stark images that stress
the sad situation that exists in the world today.
Nancy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from Zue65
Yes, I believe in every word in this poem, many out there are suffering barely eating, some praying that evening may not come again, so they won't sleep without food. I understand and feel that pain and despair when one has nothing but a penny in one's pocket. Your poem did justice to that emotion. Thanks for sharing a truly excellent poem. God bless you. Susan
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Yes, I believe in every word in this poem, many out there are suffering barely eating, some praying that evening may not come again, so they won't sleep without food. I understand and feel that pain and despair when one has nothing but a penny in one's pocket. Your poem did justice to that emotion. Thanks for sharing a truly excellent poem. God bless you. Susan
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from abbasjoy
A truly poignant story but oh so apt, especially at this time of year when many have so much. I join with you in agreement about not being judgmental and instead being part of the solution.
How different it would be, instead of giving Christmas presents to those who don't even really want it, and will only open the gift then toss it aside, we join with other members of our family and adopt a needy family? Just a thought. Perhaps the joy of being able to help those who would never be in a position to repay our kindness, would certainly change our perspective of focusing on ourselves, and in the process lift someone up from the mire and help "put their foot upon a rock." What if this was extended beyond Christmas?
Well done! Loved the video.
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A truly poignant story but oh so apt, especially at this time of year when many have so much. I join with you in agreement about not being judgmental and instead being part of the solution.
How different it would be, instead of giving Christmas presents to those who don't even really want it, and will only open the gift then toss it aside, we join with other members of our family and adopt a needy family? Just a thought. Perhaps the joy of being able to help those who would never be in a position to repay our kindness, would certainly change our perspective of focusing on ourselves, and in the process lift someone up from the mire and help "put their foot upon a rock." What if this was extended beyond Christmas?
Well done! Loved the video.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from seaglass
Christmas is not a happy time for everyone. Years ago I experienced a few Christmases that broke my heart and I will always appreciate those who did what they could to help me. This nicely rhymed poem, reminds us that Christmas is more about thinking of others and bring relief and joy, not receiving it.
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Christmas is not a happy time for everyone. Years ago I experienced a few Christmases that broke my heart and I will always appreciate those who did what they could to help me. This nicely rhymed poem, reminds us that Christmas is more about thinking of others and bring relief and joy, not receiving it.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Some people's lives are so tough, and when children are involved and there is no money people do get desperate. Well expressed views, excellent rhyming and message.
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Some people's lives are so tough, and when children are involved and there is no money people do get desperate. Well expressed views, excellent rhyming and message.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from AnnaLinda
Dawn,
Your well written poem has got me close to tears. Your author notes are also appreciated and both your poem and notes are a strong reminder for each of
us to do our part, no matter how small it seems.
You have beautiful rhymed lines and it's perfect...I have to end the review...for the tears...I will remember your message though...thank you,
Linda
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Dawn,
Your well written poem has got me close to tears. Your author notes are also appreciated and both your poem and notes are a strong reminder for each of
us to do our part, no matter how small it seems.
You have beautiful rhymed lines and it's perfect...I have to end the review...for the tears...I will remember your message though...thank you,
Linda
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from doggymad
So sad and true. You have painted a picture of despair that is not caused by this woman's deeds, but those of a feckless other.
A great reminder that we should thank God every day for the countless blessings we have
hugs
Freda
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So sad and true. You have painted a picture of despair that is not caused by this woman's deeds, but those of a feckless other.
A great reminder that we should thank God every day for the countless blessings we have
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from Ric Myworld
Even since childhood, Christmas has been a depressing time for me. Fortunate to have family and friends I have never spent too many holidays alone, but I have never been able to forget those less fortunate, and the children without food, much less something under a tree. I hope everyone of us do all that we can, knowing it will never be enough. I hope your poem can put at least one person to thinking, what can I do. Great job. :-)
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Even since childhood, Christmas has been a depressing time for me. Fortunate to have family and friends I have never spent too many holidays alone, but I have never been able to forget those less fortunate, and the children without food, much less something under a tree. I hope everyone of us do all that we can, knowing it will never be enough. I hope your poem can put at least one person to thinking, what can I do. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
Comment from Ricky1024
Thanks for this power full message.
I lost a son in a car accident but the World hath lost thyself.
'Tonight in New Jersey over 68,000 people will go to bed hungry but Why Dawn?"
'Why does the world suffer and cry?"
"In A 'Blink of an Eye?'
Read it today!
Ricky 1024.
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Thanks for this power full message.
I lost a son in a car accident but the World hath lost thyself.
'Tonight in New Jersey over 68,000 people will go to bed hungry but Why Dawn?"
'Why does the world suffer and cry?"
"In A 'Blink of an Eye?'
Read it today!
Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
