Wanderlust
Because I like this word.27 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
I liked this poem very much, partly because of the many excellent similes and partly because you are so cleverly describing something that many artists feel, and can't quite put into words. You've said it very well and quite smoothly used the first word as the last, as you were required to do for this contest. An excellent entry, I believe. I wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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I liked this poem very much, partly because of the many excellent similes and partly because you are so cleverly describing something that many artists feel, and can't quite put into words. You've said it very well and quite smoothly used the first word as the last, as you were required to do for this contest. An excellent entry, I believe. I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you for your heart warming review and for the best wishes.
Comment from seaglass
Being one who has long suffered from wanderlust, I relate to this poem For me it's curiosity of the unknown, the rush of challenging the unexpected, and the stimuli of learning something new. It is magical in a sense.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Being one who has long suffered from wanderlust, I relate to this poem For me it's curiosity of the unknown, the rush of challenging the unexpected, and the stimuli of learning something new. It is magical in a sense.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Oh yes, you captured the essence of this poem oh so well. The thrill of the unexpected...Glorious.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 'begin and end' poem, Wanderlust, certainly does wander about and hit on several seemingly unrelated points. 'All minds clamp miracles" is lost on me. If how I perceived this is what you intended, well done.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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This 'begin and end' poem, Wanderlust, certainly does wander about and hit on several seemingly unrelated points. 'All minds clamp miracles" is lost on me. If how I perceived this is what you intended, well done.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you for commenting in this work.
Comment from Zue65
Sometimes it is difficult to live up with the challenge of the prompt. there are times we have to compromise content for the sake of complying with the contest requirements. But you were to combine both the message and the requirements of the prompt, and blend them effectively into an excellent poem. God bless.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Sometimes it is difficult to live up with the challenge of the prompt. there are times we have to compromise content for the sake of complying with the contest requirements. But you were to combine both the message and the requirements of the prompt, and blend them effectively into an excellent poem. God bless.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you.
Thank you for your wonderful comments!
Comment from frogbook
Lovely and original with a smooth and easy flow. Great descriptive words and phrases, Like "Living in a magician's hat". What a great image. This excellent entry should have a great chance at being a winner.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Lovely and original with a smooth and easy flow. Great descriptive words and phrases, Like "Living in a magician's hat". What a great image. This excellent entry should have a great chance at being a winner.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you for reading my work and for your best wishes.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is very well written - rules followed with first and last line the same Wanderlust. Your lines from l to 5 are good examples of simile and the whole is a good read. Great dramatic picture. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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This is very well written - rules followed with first and last line the same Wanderlust. Your lines from l to 5 are good examples of simile and the whole is a good read. Great dramatic picture. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you for liking this work, dear Dorothy.
Comment from rama devi
HI dear friend.
As you can see in edits sent via email, my main advice is to use caps as per sentence style for ease of read. Otherwise, a couple of suggestions are to use ON instead of IN in this sentence:
Like going in a peregrine quest
Like going on a peregrine quest
and to consider using an ellipses for dramatic pause effect (entirely optional) here:
Because, because(...)
LOVE THIS LINE:
All minds clamp miracles.
*Freaky Wonderful
Wanderlust
One more suggestion to fix caps and add a comma in above lines:
Freaky, wonderful
wanderlust
As I know you'll fix that one spag and consider the other options, five stars in advance.
This is a fine depiction in poetic free verse style with a wonderful medley of similes and metaphors...mixed into a recipe of descriptive quality. I enjoyed the unique and imaginative content and ultimately uplifting theme.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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HI dear friend.
As you can see in edits sent via email, my main advice is to use caps as per sentence style for ease of read. Otherwise, a couple of suggestions are to use ON instead of IN in this sentence:
Like going in a peregrine quest
Like going on a peregrine quest
and to consider using an ellipses for dramatic pause effect (entirely optional) here:
Because, because(...)
LOVE THIS LINE:
All minds clamp miracles.
*Freaky Wonderful
Wanderlust
One more suggestion to fix caps and add a comma in above lines:
Freaky, wonderful
wanderlust
As I know you'll fix that one spag and consider the other options, five stars in advance.
This is a fine depiction in poetic free verse style with a wonderful medley of similes and metaphors...mixed into a recipe of descriptive quality. I enjoyed the unique and imaginative content and ultimately uplifting theme.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you and much love dear friend.
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:-)) Voted for yours!
Comment from redrocklover
Your poem is interesting and imaginative. I like the different word pictures you created, especially "living in a magician's hat". Best wishes for the contest.
Linda
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Your poem is interesting and imaginative. I like the different word pictures you created, especially "living in a magician's hat". Best wishes for the contest.
Linda
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you for featuring the image that called to you. Best wishes.
Comment from wordspinner314
This poem makes me want to get up right now and do something!
I love all the descriptions of wanderlust, especially ("Or watching a cloud above a cloud"). Oftentimes when I'm feeling restless, I'll lie on my back in the grass and watch the clouds, wondering about all the infinite possibilities of the world. You just captured that moment in this wonderful poem.
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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This poem makes me want to get up right now and do something!
I love all the descriptions of wanderlust, especially ("Or watching a cloud above a cloud"). Oftentimes when I'm feeling restless, I'll lie on my back in the grass and watch the clouds, wondering about all the infinite possibilities of the world. You just captured that moment in this wonderful poem.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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What a joy to hear from someone who thinks how i do. Thank you, thank you for your comments.
Comment from BeasPeas
To me your poem suggests the joy of discovery of the unexpected. How wonderful to delve into the unknown to find out what is hidden there--yes "wonderlust" and wanderlust. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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To me your poem suggests the joy of discovery of the unexpected. How wonderful to delve into the unknown to find out what is hidden there--yes "wonderlust" and wanderlust. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Exactly, you can read those in between the lines so well. Thank you, Marilyn.
