The Quest
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Comment from light
I am enjoying following your journey. I understand how discouraging this can be as I want through this with a friend. Your writing is precise and informative. I will continue to follow your progress.
Elaine
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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I am enjoying following your journey. I understand how discouraging this can be as I want through this with a friend. Your writing is precise and informative. I will continue to follow your progress.
Elaine
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Elaine, thank you so much, and I so appreciate your support. All best. Ulla
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Ulla,
You story is very interesting, is it true? You developed the plot carefully and with much detail. Your wording is clear to understand and very expressive. Excellent job!
~Gypsy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Hello Ulla,
You story is very interesting, is it true? You developed the plot carefully and with much detail. Your wording is clear to understand and very expressive. Excellent job!
~Gypsy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Hi Gypsy, Yes it is so true. It is excatly what happened. I am glad you like my way of telling my story. More to come soon. I hope you will follow on. All best. Ulla
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Yes, I will follow :) I forgot to mention that I am from Spain. I saw in your profile that you live there, or have lived in the past.
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Oh I live in spain since many years and I am never going to leave. I have known Spain since I was a little girl and very well, which goes back more than fifty years ago. Also lived in Madrrid studying Spanish literature back in early seveties. Where are you from in Spain?
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I'm from Madrid but I moved to the United States when I was 16 years old. My family, brother and sister, still lives there and I have gone back a few times to visit. Spain is a beautiful country.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi, this is a good read. I am hooked. Now I want to know what the conversation was about...and I agree must be Army Bases...
I like the dialogue and the pace.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Hi, this is a good read. I am hooked. Now I want to know what the conversation was about...and I agree must be Army Bases...
I like the dialogue and the pace.
padumachitta
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, and for your support. Next chapter is soon to follow. Ulla
Comment from justafan
Dang it!!! I got to the last line and went to scroll down and nothing...TO BE CONTINUED...grrr. I was hungry for more. Mark of a good storyteller eh??? You are doing an amazing job, Ulla. Thank you for sharing hon!
Always,
Missy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Dang it!!! I got to the last line and went to scroll down and nothing...TO BE CONTINUED...grrr. I was hungry for more. Mark of a good storyteller eh??? You are doing an amazing job, Ulla. Thank you for sharing hon!
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Oh Missy, I am so sorry that I've left you hanging there. Tough! You have to wait a little longer. He.he. On a serious note, more is to follow soon, Thanks so much for reading. All best. Ulla
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Ulla. Good job on this chapter, my friend. YUour story is moving right along as yuou establish a background and move forward nicely.
Suggestions: "The rumble in my stomach woke me early the next morning, and I realised that I was ravenous." (KI realized I was very hungry when my stomach rumbled and woke me next morning) (a bit smoother-sounding, I think)
"Oh what the heck, another cup wouldn't do any harm, while I tackled some of the issues awaiting me. (I thought)
" as I prepared for my trip. Every day I continued to check my emails three times." (I continued to check my e-mails three times a day...etc."
Fine job here for the most part, my friend. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Hi, Ulla. Good job on this chapter, my friend. YUour story is moving right along as yuou establish a background and move forward nicely.
Suggestions: "The rumble in my stomach woke me early the next morning, and I realised that I was ravenous." (KI realized I was very hungry when my stomach rumbled and woke me next morning) (a bit smoother-sounding, I think)
"Oh what the heck, another cup wouldn't do any harm, while I tackled some of the issues awaiting me. (I thought)
" as I prepared for my trip. Every day I continued to check my emails three times." (I continued to check my e-mails three times a day...etc."
Fine job here for the most part, my friend. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Hi Bob, thanks a lot for your review which is as always very appreciated. I have ammended to some of your corresction and I think it reads better now. Thanks a lot for your suggestions. All best. ulla,
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, ulla, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where you make plans to go to America to meet with friends and remember a conversation as a teenager. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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this is an excellent write, ulla, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where you make plans to go to America to meet with friends and remember a conversation as a teenager. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review. Ulla
Comment from jpduck
This story is becoming more and more riveting. I thought this chapter was very fluently written.
'Grethe, you're a tease, so you are!' (Great phrasing! Quintessentially Irish, but I think perhaps the Scots use it as well -- which is, maybe, how you have discovered it).
One typo. (* * indicates suggested insertions):
'fare I only ate on rare occasion*s*'
Adrian
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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This story is becoming more and more riveting. I thought this chapter was very fluently written.
'Grethe, you're a tease, so you are!' (Great phrasing! Quintessentially Irish, but I think perhaps the Scots use it as well -- which is, maybe, how you have discovered it).
One typo. (* * indicates suggested insertions):
'fare I only ate on rare occasion*s*'
Adrian
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Hi Adrian, Thanks a lot for your review and I hope you'll read on. Thanks again for your correction, and I have ammended. It is strange I thought it should be occassions as well, but when I looked it up in Oxford it seemed otherwise, hence I posted it as I did. I totally agree that what you say must be the correct way. With regard to the phrasing you are referring to. It is very much Scottish, and as I lived there for a long time and my husband is Scottish it comes quite natural. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Great to think you were making headway at last...
so exciting. Looking forward to what comes next, Ulla.
Oh(,) what the heck,
when a voice said," hello!" - cap H for hello, and move that first inverted comma closer to the word.
"As a matter of fact(,) I was thinking of four weeks.
"Oh Ulla, you should know better than that[,](.)" - period
I could hear that I had said too much; She was right(,) of course, - lower s for she and add comma
Just before I closed down the computer(,) I checked
You are getting anxious(,) aren't you?
I got out locked the car, and as I turned the key in the door, it struck me like a thunder ball:
I got out, locked the car and, as I turned the key in the door, .....
Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Great to think you were making headway at last...
so exciting. Looking forward to what comes next, Ulla.
Oh(,) what the heck,
when a voice said," hello!" - cap H for hello, and move that first inverted comma closer to the word.
"As a matter of fact(,) I was thinking of four weeks.
"Oh Ulla, you should know better than that[,](.)" - period
I could hear that I had said too much; She was right(,) of course, - lower s for she and add comma
Just before I closed down the computer(,) I checked
You are getting anxious(,) aren't you?
I got out locked the car, and as I turned the key in the door, it struck me like a thunder ball:
I got out, locked the car and, as I turned the key in the door, .....
Margaret
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Margaret, I am so glad that you enjoy my story. Thanks again for keeping correcting me and your patience teaching me the puntuation. I have corrected, and I think I am slowly starting to make progress. The rules of punctuation in the English language is so different, from anything I have ever learned. All the best. Ulla
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Just ignore them if you're not in agreement, Ulla - I guess punctuation differs in different countries. Margaret
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Oh but Margaret, I would never ignore them. I am sorry if you misunderstood me. I am so grateful that you take your time and I am so keen on learning. Thanks again, you are such agreat help and you have taught me a lot. Kind regards. Ulla
Comment from barkingdog
It looks like you're one step closer when the trail seems to end again. I felt the stress of waiting for just this one piece of information from Marianne.
I guess your teenage memory will take you further.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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It looks like you're one step closer when the trail seems to end again. I felt the stress of waiting for just this one piece of information from Marianne.
I guess your teenage memory will take you further.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thanks a lot and for reading on. Yes, it was a very intense period. I do hope you'll read on. Ulla
Comment from Louise Michelle
This is another terrific installment, Ulla. You write with such skill, engaging the readers and holding their interest. Wow - what an ending - a real page turner. Interesting memoirs can always find a market, if you're considering publishing. Lou
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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This is another terrific installment, Ulla. You write with such skill, engaging the readers and holding their interest. Wow - what an ending - a real page turner. Interesting memoirs can always find a market, if you're considering publishing. Lou
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for a very encouraging review. I would like to publish one day if anybody would be interested in doing so. But who knows. Meanwhile, I am very pleased that you like my story. All best. Ulla
