Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Whoop-Whooop Guy"A book of poems on people.
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Comment from Judgement Dave
Liked this.
I've seen him many a time - at both straight & gay clubs. Or maybe it's just a common type. Recognisable anyway.
Liked the start and end using the chicken metaphor. Especially liked the ending:
'Looking for a rooster
or a hen? Three hours later,
still alone,
strut, strut, strutting.'
JD
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Liked this.
I've seen him many a time - at both straight & gay clubs. Or maybe it's just a common type. Recognisable anyway.
Liked the start and end using the chicken metaphor. Especially liked the ending:
'Looking for a rooster
or a hen? Three hours later,
still alone,
strut, strut, strutting.'
JD
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Thanks JD. Yes, they are everywhere - at least one in every crowd:)
Comment from LIJ Red
I never knew his whole name. First name, Ennius, known as Anus. Only man to dance in the hard as nails old Eightball pool room. I wondered what ever became
of him....another excellent free verse portrait...
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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I never knew his whole name. First name, Ennius, known as Anus. Only man to dance in the hard as nails old Eightball pool room. I wondered what ever became
of him....another excellent free verse portrait...
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much. yes, Anus is his name - lol.
Comment from rspoet
Great annoying imagery in this fine poem
I would have left 2 hours and fifty nine minutes earlier.
Sought peace and quiet
Of course, I wouldn't have been able to then write this poem
but that's a fair trade
Seems they need a bouncer at the front door to direct certain clientele
the the appropriate hen/rooster house
Excellent staying power and observation
My sympathies, but a good poem
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Great annoying imagery in this fine poem
I would have left 2 hours and fifty nine minutes earlier.
Sought peace and quiet
Of course, I wouldn't have been able to then write this poem
but that's a fair trade
Seems they need a bouncer at the front door to direct certain clientele
the the appropriate hen/rooster house
Excellent staying power and observation
My sympathies, but a good poem
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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lol thanks so much:)
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Teresa. I enjoyed reading your free verse poem. It carries the reader right along at the dance club. As poets we have the fun of observation and then writing about it. Your poem is clearly expressed and interesting as well as humorous. Marilyn/BeasPeas
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Hi Teresa. I enjoyed reading your free verse poem. It carries the reader right along at the dance club. As poets we have the fun of observation and then writing about it. Your poem is clearly expressed and interesting as well as humorous. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Thank you Marilyn:)
Comment from Sis Cat
This is s fun and vivid picture poem of the "whoop whoop" guy. Without a picture, I can see him strutting the dance floor like a cock looking for a hen, a lay. You captured a snapshot of the person which informed and entertained. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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This is s fun and vivid picture poem of the "whoop whoop" guy. Without a picture, I can see him strutting the dance floor like a cock looking for a hen, a lay. You captured a snapshot of the person which informed and entertained. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for the read and review:)
Comment from honeytree
Great Words written here for these words.
It is great to observe what others are doing
I guess we all observe and watch others
We are human beings and we observe everything.
Annie
I have no six
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Great Words written here for these words.
It is great to observe what others are doing
I guess we all observe and watch others
We are human beings and we observe everything.
Annie
I have no six
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Thank you Annie:)
Comment from CD Richards
I can't help wonder if he slow-danced with himself to Whitney. That could be fun to watch. Do you think he was trying to impress, or just lost in his own little world, oblivious to everything?
Anyway, well written and amusing - thanks for the smiles. Craig.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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I can't help wonder if he slow-danced with himself to Whitney. That could be fun to watch. Do you think he was trying to impress, or just lost in his own little world, oblivious to everything?
Anyway, well written and amusing - thanks for the smiles. Craig.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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He just paced during fast or slow songs - didn't matter - lol. Thanks so much:)
Comment from Gloria ....
What a terrific character sketch, Teresa. I know I've seen this guy around and the gay club doesn't preclude their presence.
LOL, love the Looking for a rooster or a hen line at the scene and heard.
Good stuff, you.
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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What a terrific character sketch, Teresa. I know I've seen this guy around and the gay club doesn't preclude their presence.
LOL, love the Looking for a rooster or a hen line at the scene and heard.
Good stuff, you.
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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I am honored that you thought my work worthy of a six. This is the first six on it:) thank you so much!
Comment from Lulube
Really, this guy just floats around like he's part of the band, doing his whooping to the lyrics? Must not have picked up his medication for awhile now. lol
Maybe someone will pick up his sound and have a hit tune by incorporating it into the song. lol
great imagery. Your descriptive passages are enough to get the imagination going for his looks.
good job
love your notes, annoying
lulube
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Really, this guy just floats around like he's part of the band, doing his whooping to the lyrics? Must not have picked up his medication for awhile now. lol
Maybe someone will pick up his sound and have a hit tune by incorporating it into the song. lol
great imagery. Your descriptive passages are enough to get the imagination going for his looks.
good job
love your notes, annoying
lulube
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Thanks lulube. yes he really did just walk back and forth across the dance floor all night except later when he stood up on the bench (stage). Thanks so much:)
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lol it takes all kinds to fill up this world.
lulube
Comment from Oatmeal
Tab,
The comments you made at the bottom made me laugh. Thank you so much. The theme was well chosen. The flow was smooth. Your arrangement here is very creative. Your feelings are expressed well.
No problems noted. No errors seen.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Tab,
The comments you made at the bottom made me laugh. Thank you so much. The theme was well chosen. The flow was smooth. Your arrangement here is very creative. Your feelings are expressed well.
No problems noted. No errors seen.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Thank you Oatmeal:)