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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Victor and Nick"These are fictional character sketches.
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Comment from krys123
Bill;
-Excellent story within a poem where your imagination is truly inventive and ingeniously creative. The wittiness of this poem is uniquely entertaining and I enjoyed reading it very much.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Superb rhyming where each of the rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm flows smoothly.
-The rhythmic cadence, timing and tempo wall helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The imagery was stupendous and very exquisitely expressive and exponentially and vividly descriptive throughout the writing.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this and may the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Bill;
-Excellent story within a poem where your imagination is truly inventive and ingeniously creative. The wittiness of this poem is uniquely entertaining and I enjoyed reading it very much.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Superb rhyming where each of the rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm flows smoothly.
-The rhythmic cadence, timing and tempo wall helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The imagery was stupendous and very exquisitely expressive and exponentially and vividly descriptive throughout the writing.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this and may the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for the thorough and kind review. Bill
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend
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You are so sincerely welcome, Bill.
Alex
Comment from Eric1
Hi Bill, Brilliant story in a poem my friend, it has a wonderful rhythm and flow and the rhyming is great, I love the structure, how each final line rhymes, thanks for sharing my friend.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Hi Bill, Brilliant story in a poem my friend, it has a wonderful rhythm and flow and the rhyming is great, I love the structure, how each final line rhymes, thanks for sharing my friend.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Eric, for giving it a look. Bill
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You are most welcome my friend
Comment from royowen
This is the new normal now, these things are going on all around us, and it seems to me it's not improving Bill. Well composed Bill, the poem in aaab rhying works really well in relaying the scènes played out in your excellent work, it creates a good, variable rhythm, giving it a stark presentation. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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This is the new normal now, these things are going on all around us, and it seems to me it's not improving Bill. Well composed Bill, the poem in aaab rhying works really well in relaying the scènes played out in your excellent work, it creates a good, variable rhythm, giving it a stark presentation. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Roy, for giving it a look. Bill
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Most welcome Bill
Comment from TAB_that's me
There's a lot going on in this poem - lol. A serious subject but written in good humor. The ending - ewwhh - lol.
~~Teresa~~
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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There's a lot going on in this poem - lol. A serious subject but written in good humor. The ending - ewwhh - lol.
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Teresa, for giving it a look. Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
OMG, I feed that brand to my dog, Bill. Hope they washed the lipstick off his junk before grinding. My Shih Tzu doesn't need that in his diet!
Like your poem. It's "Pulp Fiction" raw, and funny, in spite of the reader's intention.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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OMG, I feed that brand to my dog, Bill. Hope they washed the lipstick off his junk before grinding. My Shih Tzu doesn't need that in his diet!
Like your poem. It's "Pulp Fiction" raw, and funny, in spite of the reader's intention.
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
What an awful way to die and end up as dog food. I like your characters- victor and nick and sin-d the prostitute and needles the narc. Quite a bunch of losers. Good job!
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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What an awful way to die and end up as dog food. I like your characters- victor and nick and sin-d the prostitute and needles the narc. Quite a bunch of losers. Good job!
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for giving this a look. Bill
