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Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for sharing your whimsical, story poem with us. I enjoyed your aaab rhyme scheme in these quatrains and the complementary photo you selected. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thanks for sharing your whimsical, story poem with us. I enjoyed your aaab rhyme scheme in these quatrains and the complementary photo you selected. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Joan, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is funny, but a bit strange. I did like the format. The story makes sense. Your word choice (rhyme) is good.
I see no changes.
Good job.
Thanks for sharing (I think--only kidding).
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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This is funny, but a bit strange. I did like the format. The story makes sense. Your word choice (rhyme) is good.
I see no changes.
Good job.
Thanks for sharing (I think--only kidding).
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Jannypan, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Janet7053
Bill, Your rhyming word at the last line of each verse is unusual. I particularly liked the aaa pattern in each verse. It isn't easy to secure three rhyming words that also fill the bill meaning wise.
I like deranged and 'strange" It's unique in that we really don't know what you are referring to.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Bill, Your rhyming word at the last line of each verse is unusual. I particularly liked the aaa pattern in each verse. It isn't easy to secure three rhyming words that also fill the bill meaning wise.
I like deranged and 'strange" It's unique in that we really don't know what you are referring to.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Janet, for the positive review. I think the cousins got 'deep sixed'.
Comment from patcelaw
Interesting poem and rhyming pattern strange how it changed I think are you my friend deranged? LOL have a blessed weekend coming, Patricia
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Interesting poem and rhyming pattern strange how it changed I think are you my friend deranged? LOL have a blessed weekend coming, Patricia
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Patricia, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Cass Carlton
Hhmm! sounds like 'where do they go when they are needed? Where indeed!!
This is a time honoured theme sung by womankind ever since Man found he could make excuses for evading his responsibilities. The rhymes are fine although not exact, but it seems to work quite well. the rhythm is good and even , the story of the poem is amusing and to the point. Well told cheers Cass
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Hhmm! sounds like 'where do they go when they are needed? Where indeed!!
This is a time honoured theme sung by womankind ever since Man found he could make excuses for evading his responsibilities. The rhymes are fine although not exact, but it seems to work quite well. the rhythm is good and even , the story of the poem is amusing and to the point. Well told cheers Cass
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Cass, for the positive review. Bill
