Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Sunday Morning"The story about three women who need to make money
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Comment from rwilliam
Whoa "Love, Laura AND three kisses... hee hee no doubt in his mind now. LOL .Loved it!!!
Great chapter. I an usually tell where a story is going but you have me wandering. I like that! Looking forward to reading more. :)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Whoa "Love, Laura AND three kisses... hee hee no doubt in his mind now. LOL .Loved it!!!
Great chapter. I an usually tell where a story is going but you have me wandering. I like that! Looking forward to reading more. :)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Just hope she got it right! I've decided to give her a bit of a makeover--just in case she hasn't! Alexis x
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Laura is sticking her neck out a little with the Christmas card but I think it will be just the thing to spark closer ties with Jack. Karen is manning the phone for them and hoping to make some big bucks in order for them to catch up on bills. Well done Alexis. :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Laura is sticking her neck out a little with the Christmas card but I think it will be just the thing to spark closer ties with Jack. Karen is manning the phone for them and hoping to make some big bucks in order for them to catch up on bills. Well done Alexis. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Laura doesn't know whether he has feelings for her or not. He's a bit of a cold fish at times, which is the opposite to her late husband. Only time will tell! Alexis x
Comment from Curly Girly
Jack's Christmas card sounded cold. I hope Laura has not gone to far with the use of 'love' in her reply card. Some men are funny about using the LOVE word.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Jack's Christmas card sounded cold. I hope Laura has not gone to far with the use of 'love' in her reply card. Some men are funny about using the LOVE word.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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I hope so too. She can but try! Thank you for your input yet again. Alexis x
Comment from MelReyn
The plot thickens! Laura giving Jack a bit of encouragement was unexpected for me, but I liked it. I also like how she thought the card out, that it was an intentional choice and not just something she does for everyone. I also liked how you highlight the differences between Jenny and Karen. These women are very different but they have something (need of money) in common that brings them together. But you show the sparks those differences could cause. I like it.
I spotted one typo: "When she remember(ed) her conversation with Mr. Stewart..."
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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The plot thickens! Laura giving Jack a bit of encouragement was unexpected for me, but I liked it. I also like how she thought the card out, that it was an intentional choice and not just something she does for everyone. I also liked how you highlight the differences between Jenny and Karen. These women are very different but they have something (need of money) in common that brings them together. But you show the sparks those differences could cause. I like it.
I spotted one typo: "When she remember(ed) her conversation with Mr. Stewart..."
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for spotting that. Yes, Laura's relationship with Jack might develop into something more meaningful but I'm not convinced that he's 'man' enough for her yet. Only time will tell! Alexis x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I always sign off that way, whether it is to a female or a male. It is nice, warm and friendly. AND can be taken any way you might want it to. That would be something, if he is thinking he might stand a chance, Laura seems to like the idea! I like these fill in chapters, we get to see more of their day to day thoughts and what they are up to out of the 'office'! Well done, Alexis! Loved it. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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I always sign off that way, whether it is to a female or a male. It is nice, warm and friendly. AND can be taken any way you might want it to. That would be something, if he is thinking he might stand a chance, Laura seems to like the idea! I like these fill in chapters, we get to see more of their day to day thoughts and what they are up to out of the 'office'! Well done, Alexis! Loved it. :) Sandra
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Me too, Sandra and, until recently, I thought everyone did. Some people don't realise how impersonal or formal just a name sounds though! Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
If Jack is hoping for/expecting
more, then by Laura writing - Love, Laura -
is she perhaps giving him the wrong message
(Unless she means it, of course)
stisfaction
satisfaction(.)
encourageing
encouraging
Great chapter, Alexis -
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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If Jack is hoping for/expecting
more, then by Laura writing - Love, Laura -
is she perhaps giving him the wrong message
(Unless she means it, of course)
stisfaction
satisfaction(.)
encourageing
encouraging
Great chapter, Alexis -
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank goodness you and I are in the same time zone, Margaret. It means you have usually picked up all my spag before our friends across the pond find it. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from MelB
Toward the top - moment of stisfaction - a is missing
I still just crack up laughing thinking of her saying that to the vet! That was a good save with the boyfriend idea. Until next time.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Toward the top - moment of stisfaction - a is missing
I still just crack up laughing thinking of her saying that to the vet! That was a good save with the boyfriend idea. Until next time.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Well spotted. I really appreciate your eagle eye. Thank you! Alexis x
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Your welcome!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of reading your entertaining story with its realistic dialog and humor. You put us readers right in the middle of the action, wanting to make a comment or two. Great job. :-)
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the pleasure of reading your entertaining story with its realistic dialog and humor. You put us readers right in the middle of the action, wanting to make a comment or two. Great job. :-)
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank you! Your review and encouragement is really appreciated. Alexis x
