The Ghost of Marion Lear
A tale of love, loss and revenge in the old west...75 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
Your incredible talent never ceases to amaze me. I just loved this poem and the marvelous story that it told. I have no doubt Charlie enjoyed it. He is a marvelous write and I love his work too. Sorry I took so long to get to this one...been busy recuperating.
Your incredible talent never ceases to amaze me. I just loved this poem and the marvelous story that it told. I have no doubt Charlie enjoyed it. He is a marvelous write and I love his work too. Sorry I took so long to get to this one...been busy recuperating.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from JPilcher
Pure brilliance. This is, without a doubt, the best thing I've ever read on FS to date. You're definitely in a league of your own Dean - not just here on FS either.
PS- Yay for Marion! A bittersweet win (to say the least!) but.. A payback none the less.
Pure brilliance. This is, without a doubt, the best thing I've ever read on FS to date. You're definitely in a league of your own Dean - not just here on FS either.
PS- Yay for Marion! A bittersweet win (to say the least!) but.. A payback none the less.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. I am back from my travels and trying to catch up. I enjoyed this wee yarn and well, I like western stuff...but yours had your tocuh and that made it special.
May you be well through the holidays and beyond.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
Hi. I am back from my travels and trying to catch up. I enjoyed this wee yarn and well, I like western stuff...but yours had your tocuh and that made it special.
May you be well through the holidays and beyond.
padumachitta
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thanks for giving it a once over, padu. I really appreciate that, and welcome back!
Have yourself a very merry Christmas and a safe, happy & prosperous New Year. :)
~Dean
Comment from forestport12
Its amazing to me how you can do a western poem and slip in the perfect words like "spinster" as an example. The correct word usage through the story in poetry creates the imagery and the realism of the setting. I love the talk, attitude, and the grit of the old western stories and this really, really, was a great story in rhyme.
Merry Christmas!
Its amazing to me how you can do a western poem and slip in the perfect words like "spinster" as an example. The correct word usage through the story in poetry creates the imagery and the realism of the setting. I love the talk, attitude, and the grit of the old western stories and this really, really, was a great story in rhyme.
Merry Christmas!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Dean Another great write mate. You are the master of the various styles and they are all portrayed so brilliantly. And yes you are correct, Charlies work is great. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
G'day Dean Another great write mate. You are the master of the various styles and they are all portrayed so brilliantly. And yes you are correct, Charlies work is great. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Fez. I sincerely appreciate that and I'm quite sure that Charlie would too.
Much obliged. :)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Dean, I swear you can write anything. This definitely captured the Western 'flavour', and although it wasn't the usual fright-filled (gory, gruesome - LOL) writing I've come to expect most often from you, it was a wonderful story poem that I found, rings with sadness.
Nicely done (as always).
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
Ah, Dean, I swear you can write anything. This definitely captured the Western 'flavour', and although it wasn't the usual fright-filled (gory, gruesome - LOL) writing I've come to expect most often from you, it was a wonderful story poem that I found, rings with sadness.
Nicely done (as always).
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Dawn. I thought I'd try to end the year on a much kinder, gentler note. But, never fear. I'll be back next year with a horrific vengeance, LOL.
Thanks so much again for all of your kind support throughout the year. You're a great person, so never change, you hear?
~Dean
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What a nice thing to say, my friend - thank you! You're pretty terrific too, Mr. Kuch :)
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Comment from mikemagine
Top-notch, Dean! Sad, but still an awesome story. Good to know Randy bought the proverbial farm. Off track, that drawing of Marion is quite provocative! Beautiful woman with a beautiful heart. Poor Joe...And of course poor Marion...
Thanks for sharing!
Mike
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
Top-notch, Dean! Sad, but still an awesome story. Good to know Randy bought the proverbial farm. Off track, that drawing of Marion is quite provocative! Beautiful woman with a beautiful heart. Poor Joe...And of course poor Marion...
Thanks for sharing!
Mike
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Mike. I'm glad ya liked it. :)
~Dean
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Dean
I love the concept and you story reads well in dialogue and narrative. I find a few hiccups in meter with a few lines and after three readings. Of course I'm no meter expert and it may just be me and the afternoon wearies ... I'm only just starting my pm coffee. What I really thirst for is a nip of a few choice jugulars ... I might go and hang out in the mulberry tree and see who might be strolling by ... just waiting for the sun to go down ... damn daylight saving ... a gal hasta go thirsty.
I digress ...
You capture the wild west and nothing better than a good shoot-out, even better, a double shoot. Randy got his just deserts ... hehe. All that ... choke ... choke ... dust .... give me a good sea shanty. A grand tale well told. Love the images. Shady Lady ... lol. Nice to dedicate to Charlie. Hugs Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
Hi Dean
I love the concept and you story reads well in dialogue and narrative. I find a few hiccups in meter with a few lines and after three readings. Of course I'm no meter expert and it may just be me and the afternoon wearies ... I'm only just starting my pm coffee. What I really thirst for is a nip of a few choice jugulars ... I might go and hang out in the mulberry tree and see who might be strolling by ... just waiting for the sun to go down ... damn daylight saving ... a gal hasta go thirsty.
I digress ...
You capture the wild west and nothing better than a good shoot-out, even better, a double shoot. Randy got his just deserts ... hehe. All that ... choke ... choke ... dust .... give me a good sea shanty. A grand tale well told. Love the images. Shady Lady ... lol. Nice to dedicate to Charlie. Hugs Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Lovi. I really appreciate your kind comments. :)
~Merry Christmas! ~Dean
Comment from Veeb
Wonderfully clever, Dean. I found this to be a compelling tale from start to finish. Your characters were well chosen and you gave them authenticity and personalities without overdone descriptions. (I'm afraid one of my (many) peccadillos is reading overly described characters.)
Poor Marion never got over Randy. I've known a few widows like that; very sad. Maybe in her next incarnation. I'm guessing Randy didn't become a zombie, but I was ready for it!
Cheers to you for a great tale!
Wonderfully clever, Dean. I found this to be a compelling tale from start to finish. Your characters were well chosen and you gave them authenticity and personalities without overdone descriptions. (I'm afraid one of my (many) peccadillos is reading overly described characters.)
Poor Marion never got over Randy. I've known a few widows like that; very sad. Maybe in her next incarnation. I'm guessing Randy didn't become a zombie, but I was ready for it!
Cheers to you for a great tale!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
Comment from GE Parson
Brother Dean, I really like this poem, because I know where it took place, and when, and who the characters were involved.
YEAH I DO!
It took pace in an Arizona town, called Casa Granda, may years go in the late 1800's. Randy was my Uncle on my fathers ie, in other words he was my uncle.His name was actually Randolph but everyone knew him him called him Randy.
Naww just kidding.
Have a blessed Holy Day
Your Buddy in Christ,
Jerry
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
Brother Dean, I really like this poem, because I know where it took place, and when, and who the characters were involved.
YEAH I DO!
It took pace in an Arizona town, called Casa Granda, may years go in the late 1800's. Randy was my Uncle on my fathers ie, in other words he was my uncle.His name was actually Randolph but everyone knew him him called him Randy.
Naww just kidding.
Have a blessed Holy Day
Your Buddy in Christ,
Jerry
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Hah, you had me goin' for a second there, Jerry...LOL!
Thanks a bunch for the great review. I really appreciate it.
God bless! :)