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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "haiku (whale's teeth have rings)"
'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from Jeanie Mercer
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This uses an interesting comparison between whales and trees. I assume whales shed their teeth like deciduous trees shed their leaves. I did not know that. Good luck in the contest, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Hi Jeanie, it was a neat fact to learn. I didn't know it either until recently. Thanks for this wonderful review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sanku
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You have adhered to all the norms of the prompt. This was informative too. i did not know that whales teeth has rings and that you can count their age by that .the satori line is great .all the best for the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thanks Sanku, I'm glad you liked the haiku. :-) Carolyn
Comment from misscookie
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As I say every day "as long as I live
The more I learn
Thank you for telling me about the whales teeth
Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thanks misscookie, it is fun to learn new things about God's creatures. I didn't know this either until recently. :-) Carolyn
reply by misscookie on 22-Aug-2014
    You're very welcome, have a blessed week end.
    Cookie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, notesandmore, you did an excellent job writing this haiku about how to find a shark's age. I don't want to get close enough to find out, lol. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thank you for your comments, glad you enjoyed the haiku. :-) Carolyn
Comment from l.raven
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HI you, always glad to see you...I didn't know that about whales teeth...so thank you very much...we learn something everyday...and great poem...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo love ya

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thanks Linda, I didn't know that either until I studied up on whales.... Guess we never get to old to learn something new. LOL. So glad you liked the haiku..
    Love..luff you, :-) Carolyn
reply by l.raven on 22-Aug-2014
    you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from RYME4U
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Well done. This is interesting. It taught me something I didn't know. You have expressed the subject nicely with well chosen words

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thank you RYME4U,
    I am glad you found the haiku to be of interest.
    :-) Carolyn
Comment from Cajungirl
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your contest meets all of the requirements

I love whales they are very large yet graceful. I did not know that their teeth hid the secret to their age.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thanks V, I enjoyed learning that as well as I studied about the great mammal, the whale. So glad you liked the haiku. :-) Carolyn
Comment from royowen
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This is a good entry in this haiku poetry contest, Carolyn, I love the idea that trees and whales are connected with deciduous members! Well written, I'm sure just for ingenuity, you will have a great chance, good luck, well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thanks Roy, I am glad you enjoyed this one. It was fun to study and compile this short haiku. God's creatures are full of surprises. Love, Carolyn
Comment from shelley kaye
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this was okay, however the haiku does not meet all the rules

rules state ~ 3 lines in a short/long/short 13 or less syllable count

whale's teeth have rings 4
count age like trees 4
both deciduous 5


thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest :-)




 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thank you shelly kaye for reading a commenting. I appreciate your time. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
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Carolyn;
Your haiku fits the requirements for the contest and just barely syllable wise right under the wire.
I like your cleverness and wittiness and writing this haiku is very perceptive and your imagery is very descriptive and expressive in your first two lines and also very and also very interconnected.
The third line or satori sums up your idea or concept very well.
Good luck in the contest for this is an excellent entry in the starshine always lead you on your way when it is dark.
Alex

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
    Thanks Alex, Your comments have made me feel good about this haiku as you are such a master of poetry. I appreciate all the encouragement you give so generously.
    :-) Carolyn
reply by krys123 on 20-Aug-2014
    You are indeed an sincerely welcome Carolyn and it is my pleasure.
    Alex