The Fateful Voyage of Martha Moriary
The sea holds many deadly secrets. I am just one of them...42 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Dean - loved this post for many reasons, I happen to agree on the oceans vastly unexplored depths. It wasn't that long ago when we thought nothing could live in the dark depths where the pressure was so intense it was thought nothing could thrive without light.....when we finally were able to get down that far low and behold an array of life that looked so freaky one has to wonder how is it surviving - yet they do. We have a tendency to put our own parameters around expectations of life. We do the same for space - dark void of life - ah but some of the "objects" moving past the space station resemble those I've seen in the deepest sea.....so I wonder are we putting limitations to what we ourselves have no knowledge on. Interesting points - loved this work though your pictures scared the crap out of me!
I'm not really good with scary stuff - tend to want to hide behind a pillow.
Great imagery, impressive story building - and skillfully penned.
Thanks for sharing - except for the scary pics:)
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Dear Dean - loved this post for many reasons, I happen to agree on the oceans vastly unexplored depths. It wasn't that long ago when we thought nothing could live in the dark depths where the pressure was so intense it was thought nothing could thrive without light.....when we finally were able to get down that far low and behold an array of life that looked so freaky one has to wonder how is it surviving - yet they do. We have a tendency to put our own parameters around expectations of life. We do the same for space - dark void of life - ah but some of the "objects" moving past the space station resemble those I've seen in the deepest sea.....so I wonder are we putting limitations to what we ourselves have no knowledge on. Interesting points - loved this work though your pictures scared the crap out of me!
I'm not really good with scary stuff - tend to want to hide behind a pillow.
Great imagery, impressive story building - and skillfully penned.
Thanks for sharing - except for the scary pics:)
Maureen
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Maureen. A "sixer", coming from a talented writer such as yourself, truly means a lot to me. I am very glad you were entertained, despite the spooky pix, LOL!
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Dean. I have always enjoyed the tales of the seas. Whether fact or fiction they made great fodder for the unknown. This tale is one of them. Full of anticipation and the relentless evil that seems to be wantin' the lass. This is an excellent tale with a sad ending and a foreboding warning for future sea travelers,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Dean. I have always enjoyed the tales of the seas. Whether fact or fiction they made great fodder for the unknown. This tale is one of them. Full of anticipation and the relentless evil that seems to be wantin' the lass. This is an excellent tale with a sad ending and a foreboding warning for future sea travelers,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, Jim. I know, with your historical history fiction, that I can't pull the wool over knowledgeable authors such as yourself, so my research has to be well done to get historical pieces correct. I am glad you found it both chilling, and entertaining, sir.
Thanks so much, again!
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
An epic tale of the sea and what some might call mythical monsters, but more recently some massive squid-like creatures have washed up on beaches and when you realise that some of the 'big' ships that originally reported encountering beasts like this were a hundred feet or less ...
Nicely done, though we are mapping and exploring more of the ocean depths now with all manner of technology. Trouble is the more we explore, the less we seem to understand ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Hi Dean Kuch,
An epic tale of the sea and what some might call mythical monsters, but more recently some massive squid-like creatures have washed up on beaches and when you realise that some of the 'big' ships that originally reported encountering beasts like this were a hundred feet or less ...
Nicely done, though we are mapping and exploring more of the ocean depths now with all manner of technology. Trouble is the more we explore, the less we seem to understand ...
Patrick
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Patrick, I'm truly glad you enjoyed this one.
You're absolutely correct too, we are learning more & more about our ocean's depths with each passing day, but, were we meant to? H-m-m-m-m-m...
Thanks again, my friend!
Comment from elpsog
As poem it is a very well scribed work of art with a rhyme of aabb all the way through. The flow of words is gentle on the tongue and the story spun is well done. I am not however in agreement with its theology. The maiden call out for forgiveness before succumbing to death. Would not The Lord save from hell's kingdom?
Ray
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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As poem it is a very well scribed work of art with a rhyme of aabb all the way through. The flow of words is gentle on the tongue and the story spun is well done. I am not however in agreement with its theology. The maiden call out for forgiveness before succumbing to death. Would not The Lord save from hell's kingdom?
Ray
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, Ray, I appreciate the read, review and insights. As far as poor Martha goes, I suppose it all has to do with how much faith we really have when we pray. Apparently, poor Martha's faith was no so strong. Perhaps, being the daughter of a wealthy family, it was the first time she'd ever felt the need to have to pray at all. I'll leave that part up to the readers to decide.
Thanks again, much obliged!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
If you find you're out to sea, moon glow's forsaken the darkened sky,
listen closely, lasses...you might hear... a dainty young maiden's cry.
A new young gal I'm seeking, you see, so make sure your faith is true,
Or I'll rise up from beneath the sea, and my next bride might be you!
I was just thinking yesterday - where could you be, Dean!!
I see you've come back to haunt us with your creepy dark poems - a great write, but I won't worry about him when he comes looking for a new young bride, because, thankfully, my age is against me.
welcome back, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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If you find you're out to sea, moon glow's forsaken the darkened sky,
listen closely, lasses...you might hear... a dainty young maiden's cry.
A new young gal I'm seeking, you see, so make sure your faith is true,
Or I'll rise up from beneath the sea, and my next bride might be you!
I was just thinking yesterday - where could you be, Dean!!
I see you've come back to haunt us with your creepy dark poems - a great write, but I won't worry about him when he comes looking for a new young bride, because, thankfully, my age is against me.
welcome back, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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It is great to be writing again, thank you, Margaret. As a side note, I almost chose the name Margaret for the ill-fated damsel in this one. Good thing I didn't, 'ey? LOL...
Comment from JM daSilva
You didn't read the message I left of my extended absence. I won't be here much, but I'll write a review now and then. Great poem.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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You didn't read the message I left of my extended absence. I won't be here much, but I'll write a review now and then. Great poem.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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Thank you, JM. I won't be here too much, either. Trying to shop my wares to publishers is a full-time job and quite a daunting task! It takes up the majority of my free time. I really appreciate the read and kind review. Email me sometime, my friend...
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Ok, I'll email you. Good luck on your search.
Comment from Alan K Pease
In the heyday of whaling blue whale were caught that had sucker marks that estimated that squid were 100 feet long. In a tragedy in Newfoundland squid of 40 ft were washed uo on a beach; ore recently the Calfornia coast. Your monster is hideous and resemble the Alien of movie fame. In multimedia you can't be beat for poetry, story and graphics. I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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In the heyday of whaling blue whale were caught that had sucker marks that estimated that squid were 100 feet long. In a tragedy in Newfoundland squid of 40 ft were washed uo on a beach; ore recently the Calfornia coast. Your monster is hideous and resemble the Alien of movie fame. In multimedia you can't be beat for poetry, story and graphics. I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the read, review & kind compliments, Alan. I am very glad that you enjoyed this one, and that you were entertained by it. That is worth more than any "six" to me, my friend!
Thanks again...
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very interesting poem. This ones does makes one shiver. LOL. I have myself heard of strange sights in the sea. I would not doubt those occurrences' for one moment. Nice job.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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This was a very interesting poem. This ones does makes one shiver. LOL. I have myself heard of strange sights in the sea. I would not doubt those occurrences' for one moment. Nice job.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thank you,in777wr#. I truly am thankful for your read & review of my work. Glad you liked it!
Comment from Darkhorse555
you painted a amazing image right hear dear friend Flames spewed forth from salty air ending excellently very beautifully crafted excellent piece
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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you painted a amazing image right hear dear friend Flames spewed forth from salty air ending excellently very beautifully crafted excellent piece
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, my dark fiend! I whole heartedly appreciate your kind comments.
Comment from robina1978
Really excellent pictures to complement this horror poem. A virgin goes on the boat and thought first she was safe. But the got attacked and she died. The mistake she made was praying to the devil.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Really excellent pictures to complement this horror poem. A virgin goes on the boat and thought first she was safe. But the got attacked and she died. The mistake she made was praying to the devil.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks, robina, I appreciate your viewpoint.
Actually, poor Martha's heart was in the right place as she'd muttered her prayers, but therein lie the problem, she muttered them. Her faith was weak, she never really believed she'd be saved. Alas, because of that, she happened to be right.
Thanks again...
