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Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Waves of longing."Mostly romance.
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Comment from Winbow
The waves never cease, coming or going. A seed in the garden grows and grows, (unless uprooted) the essence of existence is to love and to be loved.
A breeze, never visible but always there. The longing for a loved one or the times once had here, there, everywhere. Memories.......
Lovely Piri. Yet a slight sadness to it. A sadness that will not go away.
I really like your metaphors. Well done.
ps what is doggie's name?
Des
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The waves never cease, coming or going. A seed in the garden grows and grows, (unless uprooted) the essence of existence is to love and to be loved.
A breeze, never visible but always there. The longing for a loved one or the times once had here, there, everywhere. Memories.......
Lovely Piri. Yet a slight sadness to it. A sadness that will not go away.
I really like your metaphors. Well done.
ps what is doggie's name?
Des
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
you chose the perfect pic to go with this
totally looks as though she is sitting there contemplating your words
great job once again
and thanks for sharing :-)
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you chose the perfect pic to go with this
totally looks as though she is sitting there contemplating your words
great job once again
and thanks for sharing :-)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from Kingsland
this is a good day to be alive and on site
here is another brilliant piece of writing
some many fine poets on this site
and it is a pleasure to read your works of art... John
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this is a good day to be alive and on site
here is another brilliant piece of writing
some many fine poets on this site
and it is a pleasure to read your works of art... John
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from 24chas
Another stellar effort from you, Pili. I love the way this poem flows and the beautiful message that it contains. Your style really is a pleasure to read.
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Another stellar effort from you, Pili. I love the way this poem flows and the beautiful message that it contains. Your style really is a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from JosephCa64
Very well done, very good use of language, It is at once haunting and hopeful. The emotion is expressed very well. A very nice piece of work. Very good job!
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Very well done, very good use of language, It is at once haunting and hopeful. The emotion is expressed very well. A very nice piece of work. Very good job!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from AuroraSky
Oh, that reviewer giving one star simply has not felt the words and flow in this poem! I am not impressed, but hopefully life offers them the chance to know and feel.
Love this-
'the meaning
of existence,
enveloped
in your arms
we find the answers,
in the midst of life.'
In his arms, wondrous...keep dreaming, the ancient ways of faith, the physical of the ethereal, absolutely magical.
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Oh, that reviewer giving one star simply has not felt the words and flow in this poem! I am not impressed, but hopefully life offers them the chance to know and feel.
Love this-
'the meaning
of existence,
enveloped
in your arms
we find the answers,
in the midst of life.'
In his arms, wondrous...keep dreaming, the ancient ways of faith, the physical of the ethereal, absolutely magical.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from spazmasterr
This poem opens with the invitation of flow...Waves of longing
and the combination of person and nature is well used.
and again with the arms!!
Looking forward to the next one!
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This poem opens with the invitation of flow...Waves of longing
and the combination of person and nature is well used.
and again with the arms!!
Looking forward to the next one!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from Calvin Lee
Hello Sweetheart,
Your piece has more than one meaning when read more than once. In certain areas it has quite a few. It's like getting three poems for the price of one. Great job,
Calvin Lee
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Hello Sweetheart,
Your piece has more than one meaning when read more than once. In certain areas it has quite a few. It's like getting three poems for the price of one. Great job,
Calvin Lee
Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from Thomas Raine
I suck at love poems, so this is a work of art compared to the stuff I submit every now and then. Good job on this one.
- TR
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I suck at love poems, so this is a work of art compared to the stuff I submit every now and then. Good job on this one.
- TR
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
Comment from swapna.sanand
I think the structure requires more effort, a few sentences jotted down does not make a beautiful poem, it has to be savoured by the reader, appeal to his senses and his perception .
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I think the structure requires more effort, a few sentences jotted down does not make a beautiful poem, it has to be savoured by the reader, appeal to his senses and his perception .
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2005
