Our Dream ComeTrue
Octogram30 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
The Octobgram is one of my favourite forms and I can't see any problems with this one, Steve. You tell a sweet story in this one - an enviable story. Good luck with your entry. Giddy
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
The Octobgram is one of my favourite forms and I can't see any problems with this one, Steve. You tell a sweet story in this one - an enviable story. Good luck with your entry. Giddy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks, Giddy.
Steve
Comment from mizzkris20
This is a lovely Octogram style poem. It is definitely on point. It is soft, cozy and warm. You have written a very god piece. Thank you for sharing. SMILES
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
This is a lovely Octogram style poem. It is definitely on point. It is soft, cozy and warm. You have written a very god piece. Thank you for sharing. SMILES
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Gideon300
You capture well not only the image of the dream home but what goes on inside, which is really why we dream of the picket fence and shutters in the first place. Safe, calm, and loved. Home.
Nicely written.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
You capture well not only the image of the dream home but what goes on inside, which is really why we dream of the picket fence and shutters in the first place. Safe, calm, and loved. Home.
Nicely written.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from JuneYvonne
This is really lovely Steve - everyone's dream of a cosy cottage with picket fence, and someone you love to share it with! If you are describing your real life, you are very lucky!
Your octogram has the correct rhyme scheme and syllable count and is in good iambic meter, and your picture is a perfect choice to illustrate your words.
Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
This is really lovely Steve - everyone's dream of a cosy cottage with picket fence, and someone you love to share it with! If you are describing your real life, you are very lucky!
Your octogram has the correct rhyme scheme and syllable count and is in good iambic meter, and your picture is a perfect choice to illustrate your words.
Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you!
We have the hollyhocks so that's a good start!
Steve
Comment from MizKat
kiwisteveh - I really enjoyed your nicely written Octogram poem. I also like the picture that works so well with your words. Great job!!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
kiwisteveh - I really enjoyed your nicely written Octogram poem. I also like the picture that works so well with your words. Great job!!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Black_Oxygen
our dream come true.
This poetry transports the reader to a warm and
cozy place. The rhymes are not forced and it
held my interest from start to finish (other
poetry does not). Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
our dream come true.
This poetry transports the reader to a warm and
cozy place. The rhymes are not forced and it
held my interest from start to finish (other
poetry does not). Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is a sweet Octogram Steve! Photo is spot on and is made for the poem and vice-versa. It is indeed a dream come true when one can finally have their own little cottage! I'm sure that many readers will relate well to this poem .... I did! :) Strong ababccdd rhyming and good flow throughout. Happiness and pride shine through.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
This is a sweet Octogram Steve! Photo is spot on and is made for the poem and vice-versa. It is indeed a dream come true when one can finally have their own little cottage! I'm sure that many readers will relate well to this poem .... I did! :) Strong ababccdd rhyming and good flow throughout. Happiness and pride shine through.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks, Connie - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
Wonderful Octogram poem.
I love the loving thoughts conveyed
and the sweet images of the cottage
by the sea,representing a dream come true.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
Wonderful Octogram poem.
I love the loving thoughts conveyed
and the sweet images of the cottage
by the sea,representing a dream come true.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks, Nancy
Steve
Comment from Connie C
What a lovely Octogram this is as you describe the home that you have wished for in such wonderful imagery. You make it easy to see this home filled with the love of a family. My best to you in the contest.
Connie
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
What a lovely Octogram this is as you describe the home that you have wished for in such wonderful imagery. You make it easy to see this home filled with the love of a family. My best to you in the contest.
Connie
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Connie, thank you for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from sgalletti
This is an absolutely lovely octogram entry Steve. Vivid concrete imagery, great choice of rhyming words, strong iambic meter (glad to see this) and a delightfully upbeat message. Nice alliteration incorporated as well. I enjoyed this piece very much and wish you all the best in the contest with a very strong contender. Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
This is an absolutely lovely octogram entry Steve. Vivid concrete imagery, great choice of rhyming words, strong iambic meter (glad to see this) and a delightfully upbeat message. Nice alliteration incorporated as well. I enjoyed this piece very much and wish you all the best in the contest with a very strong contender. Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks, Sue - glad you enjoyed this.
Steve