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Our Dream ComeTrue

Octogram

30 total reviews 
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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The Octobgram is one of my favourite forms and I can't see any problems with this one, Steve. You tell a sweet story in this one - an enviable story. Good luck with your entry. Giddy

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thanks, Giddy.

    Steve
Comment from mizzkris20
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This is a lovely Octogram style poem. It is definitely on point. It is soft, cozy and warm. You have written a very god piece. Thank you for sharing. SMILES

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thank you!

    Steve
Comment from Gideon300
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You capture well not only the image of the dream home but what goes on inside, which is really why we dream of the picket fence and shutters in the first place. Safe, calm, and loved. Home.
Nicely written.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thank you!

    Steve
Comment from JuneYvonne
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This is really lovely Steve - everyone's dream of a cosy cottage with picket fence, and someone you love to share it with! If you are describing your real life, you are very lucky!

Your octogram has the correct rhyme scheme and syllable count and is in good iambic meter, and your picture is a perfect choice to illustrate your words.

Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thank you!

    We have the hollyhocks so that's a good start!

    Steve
Comment from MizKat
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kiwisteveh - I really enjoyed your nicely written Octogram poem. I also like the picture that works so well with your words. Great job!!

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thank you!

    Steve
Comment from Black_Oxygen
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our dream come true.

This poetry transports the reader to a warm and
cozy place. The rhymes are not forced and it
held my interest from start to finish (other
poetry does not). Thank You for your creation.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thank you for your kind words.

    Steve
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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This is a sweet Octogram Steve! Photo is spot on and is made for the poem and vice-versa. It is indeed a dream come true when one can finally have their own little cottage! I'm sure that many readers will relate well to this poem .... I did! :) Strong ababccdd rhyming and good flow throughout. Happiness and pride shine through.

bichonfrisegirl aka Connie

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thanks, Connie - glad you enjoyed.

    Steve
Comment from nancyjam
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Wonderful Octogram poem.
I love the loving thoughts conveyed
and the sweet images of the cottage
by the sea,representing a dream come true.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thanks, Nancy

    Steve
Comment from Connie C
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What a lovely Octogram this is as you describe the home that you have wished for in such wonderful imagery. You make it easy to see this home filled with the love of a family. My best to you in the contest.
Connie

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Connie, thank you for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.

    Steve
Comment from sgalletti
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This is an absolutely lovely octogram entry Steve. Vivid concrete imagery, great choice of rhyming words, strong iambic meter (glad to see this) and a delightfully upbeat message. Nice alliteration incorporated as well. I enjoyed this piece very much and wish you all the best in the contest with a very strong contender. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
    Thanks, Sue - glad you enjoyed this.

    Steve