If Fall Should Ever Disappear
rhyming quatrains174 total reviews
Comment from Thatguypk
Good luck in the contest. I imagine you'll do very well with this poem. It is very beautiful. I also love the autumn (fall) and the colours that it brings to nature. I do love your writing. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Good luck in the contest. I imagine you'll do very well with this poem. It is very beautiful. I also love the autumn (fall) and the colours that it brings to nature. I do love your writing. :-)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Thatguypk, thank you so very much for your kind good luck wishes (I won) and for your most generous exceptional rating!!! :-) Brooke
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh, what an imaginative way to deal with the prompt. I have read lots of great entries in this one, but there is a certain sameiness to some of them, while yours comes at it from a whole different angle. I specially liked the flock of geese and the pumpkin like a harvest moon. Beautiful imagery. Working "cornucopia" in so smoothly is masterly, and perfect word play on "ever green".
Best wishes, and hope you had a wonderful holiday seeing Sawyer.
Yours
Sally
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Oh, what an imaginative way to deal with the prompt. I have read lots of great entries in this one, but there is a certain sameiness to some of them, while yours comes at it from a whole different angle. I specially liked the flock of geese and the pumpkin like a harvest moon. Beautiful imagery. Working "cornucopia" in so smoothly is masterly, and perfect word play on "ever green".
Best wishes, and hope you had a wonderful holiday seeing Sawyer.
Yours
Sally
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Sally, thanks so very much for your gracious review :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed. I am now home from my trip and missing Sawyer and my daughter already. Brooke :-)
Comment from Terry wrote
We are so blessed to live where we do, in a land of four seasons, of rich color, of moist refreshment in the air; it is an easy place to love, and an easier life than some, to live. Your poem elicited each of these thoughts.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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We are so blessed to live where we do, in a land of four seasons, of rich color, of moist refreshment in the air; it is an easy place to love, and an easier life than some, to live. Your poem elicited each of these thoughts.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Terry, thank you so very much for your gracious comments and your most generous exceptional rating. I truly appreciate it. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gladness
Ah, what if? A nice walk through scenes of autumn. It is my favorite time of year. Thanks for this sweet flowing tribute to this colorful time of year. Anita
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Ah, what if? A nice walk through scenes of autumn. It is my favorite time of year. Thanks for this sweet flowing tribute to this colorful time of year. Anita
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Anita, thank you so very much for your encouraging review :-) Brooke
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Hi Brooke, Very nicely written poem in abcb rhyming and solid meter (no surprises there lol). Your words paint nice images in the readers mind with subtle well done metaphors. I surely love the autumn around here and could not imagine living somewhere without it. Did you make it home yet? I'm sure you had a blast with Sawyer and his parents. Good luck in the contest.
All the best, Rodger
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Hi Brooke, Very nicely written poem in abcb rhyming and solid meter (no surprises there lol). Your words paint nice images in the readers mind with subtle well done metaphors. I surely love the autumn around here and could not imagine living somewhere without it. Did you make it home yet? I'm sure you had a blast with Sawyer and his parents. Good luck in the contest.
All the best, Rodger
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Hi, Rodger. I made it home last night - nothing like driving from the airport in the dark and rain. LOL I had the best time in the world on my vacation except for the part where I had to go and Sawyer's mom wouldn't let me steal him from her :-) I like your contest entry, too, my friend. Good luck to you, too. Brooke :-)
Comment from MissMerri
Ah yes... Nothing can rob us of our dreams and favorite memories. This is so beautifully written and vividly colorful in its descriptions of Fall. You bring to life the scenes we all love and wish we could describe so well. I love your poetry! You always seem to find just the right words. This is excellent.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Ah yes... Nothing can rob us of our dreams and favorite memories. This is so beautifully written and vividly colorful in its descriptions of Fall. You bring to life the scenes we all love and wish we could describe so well. I love your poetry! You always seem to find just the right words. This is excellent.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Adonna, thank you so very much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Taffspride
Such incredible visuals in this glorious poem. This certainly is a winner in my book.
With no stumbling over words the work just flows, and trips lightly off the tongue.
I particularly like the last stanza, since here in Florida, Autumn is not quite a pronounced as up north. I too can still dream about it, and remember.
Good luck in the contest.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Such incredible visuals in this glorious poem. This certainly is a winner in my book.
With no stumbling over words the work just flows, and trips lightly off the tongue.
I particularly like the last stanza, since here in Florida, Autumn is not quite a pronounced as up north. I too can still dream about it, and remember.
Good luck in the contest.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Ann, thank you so very much for your encouraging review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I love the art work and to see the color
Of the leaves and their special beauty.
Nature shares her many gifts with us all.
The beauty around is a gift for us all.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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I love the art work and to see the color
Of the leaves and their special beauty.
Nature shares her many gifts with us all.
The beauty around is a gift for us all.
Honey tree
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Annie, thank you so very much for your gracious review and for your most generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Good morning Brooke,
This is both beautiful and haunting
in its vibrant imagery and choice of meter
that appeals to or plays with all of the senses.
Just beautiful.
Laurie
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Good morning Brooke,
This is both beautiful and haunting
in its vibrant imagery and choice of meter
that appeals to or plays with all of the senses.
Just beautiful.
Laurie
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Laurie, thank you so much for your most encouraging review and for your wonderfully generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from fdgsr
I will ever admire your sense of rhythm in your poems. You produce so much and so often with perfect syllable count and rhyme. Even when the theme is shallow and nondescript you come up with fine work. This one is unique with the absence of autumn in a sense. I have often wondered about my last breath or scene to be sensed and snuffed out in a flash. I guess I could write a poem and let it live forever in the minds of the few who read it. Probably not worth the thought. I may forget this, but I doubt it.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I will ever admire your sense of rhythm in your poems. You produce so much and so often with perfect syllable count and rhyme. Even when the theme is shallow and nondescript you come up with fine work. This one is unique with the absence of autumn in a sense. I have often wondered about my last breath or scene to be sensed and snuffed out in a flash. I guess I could write a poem and let it live forever in the minds of the few who read it. Probably not worth the thought. I may forget this, but I doubt it.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for your positive comments about my use of meter :-) Brooke
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Thanks Brooke. I have a poem, which I hesitate to put here. I wonder how it would be received? It is about tomorrow never gets here, because today gets in the way. "My everlasting lover is today." I will go to my archives and find it.
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I do hope you post it. :-)
