Pursuit
Modern day tracker33 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
Susan, this is great flash fiction. You tale is full of suspense and you have left us with a clift hanger. The words you mentioned must have been part of the requirement and you fit them in perfectly. Good luck with the contest. It sounds like a winner to me.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Susan, this is great flash fiction. You tale is full of suspense and you have left us with a clift hanger. The words you mentioned must have been part of the requirement and you fit them in perfectly. Good luck with the contest. It sounds like a winner to me.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Hi again! I lost by a vote! Oh well. Fun anyway! ") I appreciate your kind review and am especially glad you enjoyed this! ")) Luv, susan
Comment from Betty517
I was standing right next to the Marshall. So sad that he lost his horse. I hope he gets rescued! Loved this read, very interesting and thought provoking story.
Betty
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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I was standing right next to the Marshall. So sad that he lost his horse. I hope he gets rescued! Loved this read, very interesting and thought provoking story.
Betty
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Hi Betty! Wow, thank you!! I am so glad you liked this. That alone, makes the work so worthwhile! Hug! Susan
Comment from sasil
Wow--you do a great job taking the reader right inside the character's mind--making us feel his fear, his frustration, the futility. Great use of prompt words to tell your tale too. You make the scene/tension very real--my heart's still thumping! Best wishes in the contest, Suze!
S.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Wow--you do a great job taking the reader right inside the character's mind--making us feel his fear, his frustration, the futility. Great use of prompt words to tell your tale too. You make the scene/tension very real--my heart's still thumping! Best wishes in the contest, Suze!
S.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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HI Sasil! ") This review is so encouraging...I send you a thousand thank you's too. Along with hugs to match! ") I worked hard on this and with help from kind fans, I am proud of this one. LOVE and smiles...susan
Comment from bard owl
Oh, well done. I enjoyed your story that lured me in and kept me wondering about the poor guy who lost his horse and was now abandoned on a mountainside. Excellent imagery. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Oh, well done. I enjoyed your story that lured me in and kept me wondering about the poor guy who lost his horse and was now abandoned on a mountainside. Excellent imagery. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hello Linda! Thank you. Your review is very encouraging and I appreciate that. With everyone's help, I hope I got the spags. It's great to hear from you. Susan
Comment from Lise Deangelo
This story is suspenseful and well-written. I enjoyed reading it. I thought Marshall Lane was portrayed well and clearly to the reader. I thought you did a good job of showing. Also I liked the open ending. Thanks for sharing and best wishes for the contest :) Lise
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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This story is suspenseful and well-written. I enjoyed reading it. I thought Marshall Lane was portrayed well and clearly to the reader. I thought you did a good job of showing. Also I liked the open ending. Thanks for sharing and best wishes for the contest :) Lise
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Lise! Thank you Very Very much! I am thrilled to see you liked this effort. Your time for me is appreciated so, and I am honored to have this review from you. ")) Luv, susan
Comment from humpwhistle
Very nicely done. I was unaware that this was a 'use-these-words' story until I had finished reading. It never occurred to me. The words fit in seamlessly. Great job creating the situation, and probing the Marshall's mind.
You chose the perfect place to stop too.
Great work, Susan.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Very nicely done. I was unaware that this was a 'use-these-words' story until I had finished reading. It never occurred to me. The words fit in seamlessly. Great job creating the situation, and probing the Marshall's mind.
You chose the perfect place to stop too.
Great work, Susan.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi again Lee, I have to thank you again. You have sprinkled my day with the stardust of encouragement that I need so badly right now. Peace to you too, my friend. ")) Susan
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
The style is awesome, i liked how you started the story, and the complications in the story were dealt within. I wish you luck, and I enjoyed reading and reviewing it for sure.
well done
K
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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The style is awesome, i liked how you started the story, and the complications in the story were dealt within. I wish you luck, and I enjoyed reading and reviewing it for sure.
well done
K
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi K! Many thank you's! Your kind words are so encouraging...and I needed that on this day. It's always so nice to hear from you! May you have a wonderful day, today! ")) Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A story of tension, fear
and hopelessness, all
comes together in this
Flash fiction... something
I can't master (always
have far too much to say)
on him[,](;) he would die here[;](,) a victim of circumstance and bad luck.
Good luck with the contest, Susan.
Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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A story of tension, fear
and hopelessness, all
comes together in this
Flash fiction... something
I can't master (always
have far too much to say)
on him[,](;) he would die here[;](,) a victim of circumstance and bad luck.
Good luck with the contest, Susan.
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Margaret! How are you this Sunday? Our weather has improved, I hope to get outside if the neighbors will leave me alone for once. I switched the ; and , too! Why can't I see these things? My brain is stuck on stupid I guess. Thank you for this great help. I worked hard on trying to get this one right, and with your help, maybe it will be better this time! Many thanks and a hug to match my friend. Susan
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Hope you enjoy a time without aggravation, Susan. M
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I have gone wrong somewhere, Margaret. The strife is starting to win. I will try to keep my chin up tho. It's all I can do. Thank you. How is your son in law doing? I hope they are happy and well! And you too! ")) xoxo, susan
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My son - he and his bride are in Kenya for their honeymoon (they've lived together for 12 yrs) wonderful wedding, so relaxed and happy-go-lucky. some of the photos are on facebook.. are you on there? M
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So sorry, daughter IN LAW..."( I am losing it. No, I haven't tried facebook? I dont' like my photos of myself and people always have to see you. I will try to find your site tho. What should I look for? I'm happy they are doing well!") Susan
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just go in facebook and type at the top, Margaret snowdon and hit one picture which will show them all one by one. M x
Comment from robina1978
Is Flashfiction alright. Can't have been easy to get all these words in.
Think one typing mistake: should gun not be guy.
Did hold my attention all the way.
One problem did not find it that scary, or was that not required?
Still well written.
Wish you all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Is Flashfiction alright. Can't have been easy to get all these words in.
Think one typing mistake: should gun not be guy.
Did hold my attention all the way.
One problem did not find it that scary, or was that not required?
Still well written.
Wish you all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Ine. Thank you! Oh, 'young gun' is a phrase used by people over here, probably more in the west, and law enforcement types... I wasn't going for horror, but did want people to feel the fear of falling? I'm happy you read this for me Ine. I always value your thoughts. Hug! Susan
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OK, thought it might possibly be right. The fear of falling it did tell. Hugs, Ine
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Outstanding, Susan! The only change I might make is to "dead as a doornail". Maybe "dead as last night's supper" or something. I love the way you left it, with a fragile thread of hope. Well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Outstanding, Susan! The only change I might make is to "dead as a doornail". Maybe "dead as last night's supper" or something. I love the way you left it, with a fragile thread of hope. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Nancy! I will read it again tomorrow and see? "doornail" is a cliche...yes. I'm glad you appreciated the gist of the ending. I wanted the readers to decide if he is saved? But then, in flash, we are to have a conclusion?? Hmmmm, let me know what you think. I appreciate! HUGS and a thousand thank you's. Suse
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You've given us a choice of conclusions. No problem there. :) Nancy
