Comment from readandwrite

Needs Improvement

I'm so confused....what's going on in this poem? You need to explain just a little more so the reader has more information about the characters, scenery, etc. Give your reader people to be with in this poem! I liked the theme though. Take that and run with it!

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 Comment Written 07-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Perhaps you didn't get the idea of this contest which was to use dialogue only. It does make a warped kind of sense if you accept two characters speaking alternate lines.
Thanks for reviewing.