X Marks the Spot
Bob and Bill go fishing...25 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the dumb fishermen who couldn't fish their way out of a barrel. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the dumb fishermen who couldn't fish their way out of a barrel. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Ha! You've reviewed my two contest poems in a row. I wonder if you picked they were by the same hand...
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Carolyn 12
Oh this is soo cuite..I have some elderly friends who do bass fishing and will send this along to them they will love it.. Thank you for the giggle..
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Oh this is soo cuite..I have some elderly friends who do bass fishing and will send this along to them they will love it.. Thank you for the giggle..
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your review. I am happy you want to share my little rhyming joke.
Comment from WilliamDeen
LOL...this is hilarious! He marked the bottom of the boat... but we brought the other boat today!!! They were so bright fishermen.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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LOL...this is hilarious! He marked the bottom of the boat... but we brought the other boat today!!! They were so bright fishermen.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed the joke.
Comment from RYME4U
Very funny story/poem. It is a lively , well rhymed piece. I like the illustration, too. You have done a very good job on this , Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Very funny story/poem. It is a lively , well rhymed piece. I like the illustration, too. You have done a very good job on this , Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a cute one, Anonymous Writer. Here is a similar poem that I posted some time ago:
FISHY
Two fishermen out on a boat
Were having a terrible day.
They'd spent many hours afloat,
With nary a fish to display.
"Let's try a new spot on the lake,
And give it ten minutes," said Joe.
"All right, but I'm tired," said Jake.
"If that doesn't work, then we'll go."
They moved to a promising spot,
And quickly the promise came true.
They counted the fish that they caught
And ended with more than a few.
"On Friday let's come back again,"
Said Jake. "I've enjoyed this a lot."
Joe answered, "We're logical men.
But how will we find the right spot?"
"No problem. This place is a lock."
And Jake kneeled down, and he wrote
A giant white X with his chalk,
Right there on the floor of the boat.
"That does it," he said. "There's no doubt."
"You're crazy," yelled Joe. "In a day
This boat will take other guys out.
Your marker will give it away."
Sally
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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This is a cute one, Anonymous Writer. Here is a similar poem that I posted some time ago:
FISHY
Two fishermen out on a boat
Were having a terrible day.
They'd spent many hours afloat,
With nary a fish to display.
"Let's try a new spot on the lake,
And give it ten minutes," said Joe.
"All right, but I'm tired," said Jake.
"If that doesn't work, then we'll go."
They moved to a promising spot,
And quickly the promise came true.
They counted the fish that they caught
And ended with more than a few.
"On Friday let's come back again,"
Said Jake. "I've enjoyed this a lot."
Joe answered, "We're logical men.
But how will we find the right spot?"
"No problem. This place is a lock."
And Jake kneeled down, and he wrote
A giant white X with his chalk,
Right there on the floor of the boat.
"That does it," he said. "There's no doubt."
"You're crazy," yelled Joe. "In a day
This boat will take other guys out.
Your marker will give it away."
Sally
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Oops!
I wouldn't have done mine if I'd known of your posting! It's one thing to pinch an old joke, but I wouldn't want to steal another poem.
The similarity in the way the two poems are told is striking... You have Jake and Joe while I have Bill and Bob and we both use dialogue to spice it up...
Thanks for the review, Sally
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I know that the similarity was inadvertant, so no worry.
Sally
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I used to hear that story as a "little moron" joke. You have told it well in verse. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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I used to hear that story as a "little moron" joke. You have told it well in verse. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Jeanie.
Yes, it's an old joke, and now I find someone else has already done it as a poem too...
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from MizKat
Your poem is cute, interesting, and enjoyable, but your author notes are what gave me a good laugh. Thanks for sharing both. Kat
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Your poem is cute, interesting, and enjoyable, but your author notes are what gave me a good laugh. Thanks for sharing both. Kat
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Ha! You've reviewed my two contest poems in a row. I wonder if you picked they were by the same hand...
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from NadineM
This poem certainly maade me laugh! Too funny! Great rhyming and rhythm to this story and poem. Great contest entry- best wishes.
Thanks for sharing this with me!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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This poem certainly maade me laugh! Too funny! Great rhyming and rhythm to this story and poem. Great contest entry- best wishes.
Thanks for sharing this with me!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Nadine. I'm glad you enjoyed my little joke in a poem.
Comment from Mari_
LOL!
Funny punchline in the last stanza. Your author notes was funny as well!
Such great rhyme & meter. Only one thing: In the second stanza, "eyes" & "paradise" does not rhyme. You can fudge it I guess lol. Or I can use my southern accent & it does rhyme.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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LOL!
Funny punchline in the last stanza. Your author notes was funny as well!
Such great rhyme & meter. Only one thing: In the second stanza, "eyes" & "paradise" does not rhyme. You can fudge it I guess lol. Or I can use my southern accent & it does rhyme.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Yeah, you use your southern accent and I'll use my foreign one...
Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Cynthia Tee
Oh very well done here my friend. This is very funny. Poor Bob and poor Bill they are truly a sorry pair! Perfect abcb rhyming throughout and the poem flows easily. Artwork suits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Oh very well done here my friend. This is very funny. Poor Bob and poor Bill they are truly a sorry pair! Perfect abcb rhyming throughout and the poem flows easily. Artwork suits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Cynthia - and welcome to FS BTW
