Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "I Am Human You Are Human Too!"Love and Life with many emotions
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Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
I think this went on a bit longer than necessary, to get the message across? Fairly well written, but didn't 'get' many of the poetic attempts ( How to be God's perfect pair
Worried about everyone's stare )?? I don't think anyone is 'God's perfect pair'- and didn't understand the 'worrying about everyone's stare' ? Keep writing though, you do show promise.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I think this went on a bit longer than necessary, to get the message across? Fairly well written, but didn't 'get' many of the poetic attempts ( How to be God's perfect pair
Worried about everyone's stare )?? I don't think anyone is 'God's perfect pair'- and didn't understand the 'worrying about everyone's stare' ? Keep writing though, you do show promise.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thanks, Granted Maybe there won't be any perfect pairs of God's but we sure cn try.
Comment from acvguard11
great job....i love the picture that accompanys the poem....really love the words you used...dont let others discourage you great job and keep writing
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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great job....i love the picture that accompanys the poem....really love the words you used...dont let others discourage you great job and keep writing
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thank You for the nice comments they were greatly appreciated.
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
I truly like the message here, anything is possible with God's guidance and love.
I think artwork or a photo would have helped to lead readers in.
Renee
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I truly like the message here, anything is possible with God's guidance and love.
I think artwork or a photo would have helped to lead readers in.
Renee
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your comments, I have added a picture. Please take another look see. I think it goes very well. Thank you
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I agree, the artwork is lovely and adds to it too. :-)
Comment from Siddhartha Jatana
I guess, this is a beautiful presentation of faith and emotions...
Before some appreciations, I'll like to suggest something...Lol
"We are all human beings made by Gods insight of what Humans are..."=>Please use apostrophe in God i.e.God's...same for "How to be Gods perfect pair ..."
Well, now the time for applause...Lol
I truly loved your piece filled with plethora of emotions...
Ma favorite bits:
"Now that you have forgiven Me, I need to forgive myself.
I need to look at my own life's wealth...
I need to look back at all the good I have done...
I need to remember all the smiles and the fun... "
Wow!
"Who cares what the world has to say; its what is inside that should matter most..."
Wow again!
"Burn with the yearning
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God is Love, God is Life..."
Amazing!
"For in His world, we do belong!! "
Commendable!
Well done!
Keep it up!
Thanks for sharing...
God bless you!
Love and Regards,
Sid
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I guess, this is a beautiful presentation of faith and emotions...
Before some appreciations, I'll like to suggest something...Lol
"We are all human beings made by Gods insight of what Humans are..."=>Please use apostrophe in God i.e.God's...same for "How to be Gods perfect pair ..."
Well, now the time for applause...Lol
I truly loved your piece filled with plethora of emotions...
Ma favorite bits:
"Now that you have forgiven Me, I need to forgive myself.
I need to look at my own life's wealth...
I need to look back at all the good I have done...
I need to remember all the smiles and the fun... "
Wow!
"Who cares what the world has to say; its what is inside that should matter most..."
Wow again!
"Burn with the yearning
...
God is Love, God is Life..."
Amazing!
"For in His world, we do belong!! "
Commendable!
Well done!
Keep it up!
Thanks for sharing...
God bless you!
Love and Regards,
Sid
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind comments, they were very much appreciated. Thank you have a wonderful day and may God bless.
Comment from laren
This is a great poem with a deep message, sometimes we lose our way, we were designed for love, troubles, some times addictions makes us think in wrong ways to live, now there is repent and both have seen the God's light of love,
Congratulations!
Laren
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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This is a great poem with a deep message, sometimes we lose our way, we were designed for love, troubles, some times addictions makes us think in wrong ways to live, now there is repent and both have seen the God's light of love,
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thank you for the kind review. Have a wonderful day!
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Thank you for sharing, I wish you the same,
Laren
Comment from writer723
Stirring poetry, with easily relatable thoughts and emotions. I have felt that way before. I love the way you expressed how we can turn to God in spite of our mistakes in life. You have a lovely way with words. I enjoyed the honesty you conveyed in your poem about relationships with both people and God.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Stirring poetry, with easily relatable thoughts and emotions. I have felt that way before. I love the way you expressed how we can turn to God in spite of our mistakes in life. You have a lovely way with words. I enjoyed the honesty you conveyed in your poem about relationships with both people and God.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thank you for the kind review. Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Angel Debbie:
I did another review as promised -- check your possessive nouns in verses 1, 10 & 12 -- fix those and I will up this to a 5 star review
I really like the message you are sending
out with this piece; however, I kept getting
hung up on the spag issues -- I have made
suggestions below to help you strengthen this
piece and still not lose the powerful voice
it shares -- if you let me know when you make
corrections, I will be glad to review again
all who loves me for who am >> all who love me for who am
shed many a tears. >>> shed many a tear. (a is a singular term so tear must be also)
what Gods love truly is >>> what God's love truly is (same comment any time you use God as a possessive noun -- suvh as when you said -- God's perfect pair -- same with our Lord's teachings and love
Trial and tribulations >>> Trials and tribulations (must agree -- either both singular or both plural)
God is Love God is Life >>> God is Love, God is Life
God can handle, every strife... >>>
God can handle every strife...
love, jan
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Angel Debbie:
I did another review as promised -- check your possessive nouns in verses 1, 10 & 12 -- fix those and I will up this to a 5 star review
I really like the message you are sending
out with this piece; however, I kept getting
hung up on the spag issues -- I have made
suggestions below to help you strengthen this
piece and still not lose the powerful voice
it shares -- if you let me know when you make
corrections, I will be glad to review again
all who loves me for who am >> all who love me for who am
shed many a tears. >>> shed many a tear. (a is a singular term so tear must be also)
what Gods love truly is >>> what God's love truly is (same comment any time you use God as a possessive noun -- suvh as when you said -- God's perfect pair -- same with our Lord's teachings and love
Trial and tribulations >>> Trials and tribulations (must agree -- either both singular or both plural)
God is Love God is Life >>> God is Love, God is Life
God can handle, every strife... >>>
God can handle every strife...
love, jan
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Thank You for your comments, I have since made the changes and it does sound better. Thank you can you please rethink your review as you stated. Thank again for your help.
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Thank You for helping me distinguish what are possessive nouns, I am not real smart when it comes to things like that and I appreciate it when people tell me what I have done wrong so I may fix my errors. Thank You so much I hope it now rates a five.
