Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "In Dreams I am a Gliding Swan"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from sierra scribbler
This is wonderful. I love the picture art- nice choice for your words. Yes, why is it that in our dreams everything is so simple and lovely? Then we wake up!
Thanks for sharing.
-Aleta
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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This is wonderful. I love the picture art- nice choice for your words. Yes, why is it that in our dreams everything is so simple and lovely? Then we wake up!
Thanks for sharing.
-Aleta
Comment Written 28-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Aleta. When you figure out the answer to that one, please share! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Mike K2
Very well written and you pose a valid question that only you can answer. In my case, I feel that fears result from a lack of faith. I work through them and indeed, some fears can be realized and shake faith further, but I would rather err on that side and pay the price. It is important to renew oneself to be that swan.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Very well written and you pose a valid question that only you can answer. In my case, I feel that fears result from a lack of faith. I work through them and indeed, some fears can be realized and shake faith further, but I would rather err on that side and pay the price. It is important to renew oneself to be that swan.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Mike. I'm glad you found meaning in this. Brooke
Comment from Queenise
Very beautiful poem that makes you want to glide in some peaceful place. Lovely art. Imagery,flow,pace is good and I thought this form was one that you definitely have mastered. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Very beautiful poem that makes you want to glide in some peaceful place. Lovely art. Imagery,flow,pace is good and I thought this form was one that you definitely have mastered. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Queenise - I'm so glad you enjoyed this triolet :-) Brooke
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You're welcome,Brooke. Queenise
Comment from closetpoetjester
So short, so heartfelt, so moving. I felt a tear start to trickle half way through then more at the end. So sorry for your pain but you have not only reached into your heart but others aswell. A beautifully written and inspirational verse. It's simplicity and honesty makes me sad for you and whatever you have been through and are obviously going through. You really do have a way with words.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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So short, so heartfelt, so moving. I felt a tear start to trickle half way through then more at the end. So sorry for your pain but you have not only reached into your heart but others aswell. A beautifully written and inspirational verse. It's simplicity and honesty makes me sad for you and whatever you have been through and are obviously going through. You really do have a way with words.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, closet poet jester. This is a most generous and gracious review, and I am truly grateful :-) Brooke
Comment from Artasylum
great job on this... such sadness is read between the lines and i want to reach out to the sleeper and help her manifest her dreams into reality...thanks diana
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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great job on this... such sadness is read between the lines and i want to reach out to the sleeper and help her manifest her dreams into reality...thanks diana
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Diana. What a lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
Graceful triolet, Brooke; I think you write poetry as gracefully as a swan. :)
I like the contrast between the nighttime dreams of being a swan with the daytime fear/lack of peace. Usually, I associate night with fear and day with hope, but you've reversed that here and it works well.
Enjoyed the gentle rhythm of peaceful words like "glides", "placid", dreams, peace. The words help me feel the peace enveloping this peaceful swan gliding through your dreams. In contrast, the harder sounds of "breaks" and "throbbing ache" subtly shift the mood to a less peaceful one fitting with the fears that awake with the dawn.
My favorite lines:
why must my fears awake with dawn/replacing peace with throbbing ache (I have felt those fears and that throbbing ache, so this resonates with me, as I'm sure it does with others.)
Lovely! LK
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Graceful triolet, Brooke; I think you write poetry as gracefully as a swan. :)
I like the contrast between the nighttime dreams of being a swan with the daytime fear/lack of peace. Usually, I associate night with fear and day with hope, but you've reversed that here and it works well.
Enjoyed the gentle rhythm of peaceful words like "glides", "placid", dreams, peace. The words help me feel the peace enveloping this peaceful swan gliding through your dreams. In contrast, the harder sounds of "breaks" and "throbbing ache" subtly shift the mood to a less peaceful one fitting with the fears that awake with the dawn.
My favorite lines:
why must my fears awake with dawn/replacing peace with throbbing ache (I have felt those fears and that throbbing ache, so this resonates with me, as I'm sure it does with others.)
Lovely! LK
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Laura, for a characteristically insightful, detailed and attentive review :-) I'm especially pleased you got the day/night reversal. Brooke
Comment from El.Marjie
In dreams I am a Swan is a strong poem. I like the rhyming and flow, and the emotion it speaks. Sometimes we do wake up with the weight of the world on our shoulders. We are told to pray, and "the peace of God which passes all understanding will rule our hearts... Not sure about the wording here. Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. Hope you don't mind if I share the thoughts it raises within me. God bless! Marjie
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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In dreams I am a Swan is a strong poem. I like the rhyming and flow, and the emotion it speaks. Sometimes we do wake up with the weight of the world on our shoulders. We are told to pray, and "the peace of God which passes all understanding will rule our hearts... Not sure about the wording here. Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. Hope you don't mind if I share the thoughts it raises within me. God bless! Marjie
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Marjie. I am honored that you share your thoughts - nothing means more to me than that something I have written has resonated with a reader :-) Brooke
Comment from Aislinge
Beautiful poem! Love the imagery, and the meter of this. Lovely atmosphere as well created by the chosen words.
Thank you for a great read!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Beautiful poem! Love the imagery, and the meter of this. Lovely atmosphere as well created by the chosen words.
Thank you for a great read!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Aislinge. I appreciate your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Angelite
Loved the message in here.
Heartbreaking when you cant bring peace into our wakeful life.
I enjoyed the style you have chosen, adds to the words.
thanks for sharing.
Angel
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Loved the message in here.
Heartbreaking when you cant bring peace into our wakeful life.
I enjoyed the style you have chosen, adds to the words.
thanks for sharing.
Angel
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Angel, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this triolet and found meaning in it. Brooke :-)
Comment from fionageorge
This is a beautiful triolet, Brooke. I could feel myself drift off in to a dream and see this beautiful swan, to awaken to reality. Flows freely, and of course, as per usual, the rhythm and rhyme is impeccable. Warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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This is a beautiful triolet, Brooke. I could feel myself drift off in to a dream and see this beautiful swan, to awaken to reality. Flows freely, and of course, as per usual, the rhythm and rhyme is impeccable. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Marijke. I'm pleased you enjoyed this triolet ;-) Brooke
