I Once Believed
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Comment from tteach
I once believed in fairytales
and hope that flew on wings unseen.
So sure was I that love prevails,
but that was then when I was green
This stanza lets us know that things have changed. There was the past...the time in which the narrator truly believed in fairy tales and mysteries. Then, in the second stanza, we read that experience and lost love have "killed" that belief.
too bad there isn't one more stanza. I'd love to have read that the narrator has found some glimmer of that old belief. maybe the joy of a whisper, or rejoicing in a tender memory. but that's okay, as not all stories end happily.
terry
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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I once believed in fairytales
and hope that flew on wings unseen.
So sure was I that love prevails,
but that was then when I was green
This stanza lets us know that things have changed. There was the past...the time in which the narrator truly believed in fairy tales and mysteries. Then, in the second stanza, we read that experience and lost love have "killed" that belief.
too bad there isn't one more stanza. I'd love to have read that the narrator has found some glimmer of that old belief. maybe the joy of a whisper, or rejoicing in a tender memory. but that's okay, as not all stories end happily.
terry
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Terry. I appreciate your kind thoughts - the mood I was in when writing this would not have honestly produced that third verse :-) Brooke
Comment from kintesiegel
What really amazes me is how prolific you are. You must write all the time. This is a real dandy of a poem, so concise and well constructed.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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What really amazes me is how prolific you are. You must write all the time. This is a real dandy of a poem, so concise and well constructed.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Well, one poem a day! LOL Thank you!! Brooke :-)
Comment from Nicnac
What a smooth, melancholy poem.
Interesting photo choice. It adds a lot of flavor to this piece.
I liked your use of the word green.
Well written and highly emotive.
Nic
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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What a smooth, melancholy poem.
Interesting photo choice. It adds a lot of flavor to this piece.
I liked your use of the word green.
Well written and highly emotive.
Nic
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Nic. I truly do appreciate your thoughtfulness :-) There was no obvious illustration choice available - I got creative. :-) Brooke
Comment from Curt Mongold
As one who strives for the most influential way to express ideas in verse, I know that what I see here is a cycle in excellence and just plain good writing.
Ride that wave until its done!
Always,
Curt
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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As one who strives for the most influential way to express ideas in verse, I know that what I see here is a cycle in excellence and just plain good writing.
Ride that wave until its done!
Always,
Curt
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Curt, thank you - you are kind and encouraging, and I am appreciative :-) Brooke
Comment from Rick Koestler
Experience has taught me well
that more than hope on wings can fly,
and so I've come to bid farewell
to love that paused but passed me by.
Great poem, Brook, but now you got me thinking this is your experience. Say it isn't so!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Experience has taught me well
that more than hope on wings can fly,
and so I've come to bid farewell
to love that paused but passed me by.
Great poem, Brook, but now you got me thinking this is your experience. Say it isn't so!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Rick. It's my experience, but the disillusionment occurred long ago - now I just get moody once in a while! :-) Brooke
Comment from F Oktoprimasakti
Hi Brooke,Another beautiful poem. it speaks to all I am sure. Yes, when I was young, I also dreamt that life would always be happy..but I do believe that God's love for us remains the same every day, it comes to stay, not to ever pass us by. I love the picture you picked for your poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Hi Brooke,Another beautiful poem. it speaks to all I am sure. Yes, when I was young, I also dreamt that life would always be happy..but I do believe that God's love for us remains the same every day, it comes to stay, not to ever pass us by. I love the picture you picked for your poem.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Fransiska, I appreciate such thoughtful comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from jayesnb
Wonderfully written poem.
About six months ago I lost someone I loved and it has been a hard road. I thought she would be there always.. But it wasnt to be.
Thanks for sharing this post.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Wonderfully written poem.
About six months ago I lost someone I loved and it has been a hard road. I thought she would be there always.. But it wasnt to be.
Thanks for sharing this post.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you, jayesnb, for the review and for letting me this poem connected with your own experience. I am so sorry for your loss. Brooke
Comment from skye
Truly remarkable, we believe in magical things, but question love.
I love this poem, love the form, and find that your insight is strong.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Truly remarkable, we believe in magical things, but question love.
I love this poem, love the form, and find that your insight is strong.
Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Skye. It is always lovely to hear from you :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
I love this poem, Brooke. A bit melancholy, to lose our childhood dreams of our prince arriving to save us from evil. But I think the poet you are, you'll always have a bit of that dreaming girl inside.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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I love this poem, Brooke. A bit melancholy, to lose our childhood dreams of our prince arriving to save us from evil. But I think the poet you are, you'll always have a bit of that dreaming girl inside.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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You're right, Karyn, even in my most jaded moments, there is that girl with rose-colored glasses waiting to get out :-) Thanks so much, my observant friend. Brooke
Comment from unbridledspirit
Very nice poem. Good use of words to express being naive and then finding maturity and a different way of looking at things. Well written and well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Very nice poem. Good use of words to express being naive and then finding maturity and a different way of looking at things. Well written and well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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I appreciate your response to my poem :-) Brooke
