Comment from Mischief's Momma

Excellent

This is truly a lovely poem Brooke!

What a peaceful way t describe the start of the day, great job!

I hope it did well in the contest,
Sharon

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009

Thank you, Sharon. The contest does not end until November 12, so we shall see :-) Brooke

Comment from Steve Pantazis

Exceptional

How about a six to start the new week? Your poem reads effortlessly and makes me want to wait for the sun to rise at daybreak and devour the early morning mist. Superb!

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009

Thank you, Steve - it is a lovely early week present :-) You are most generous! Brooke

Comment from perunest

Excellent

You have captured, quite well, the
glorious ascent of the sun, especially
when it chases away the early morning
mist. "and dawn removes the ebon veil of night,"
is a spectacular image - your phraseology is
wonderful! Good luck in the contest! Carolyn

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009

Thank you, Carolyn. I appreciate your thoughtful and encouraging comments :-) Brooke

Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

Dawn removes the ebon veil of night <--This line alone is stunning poetry!

You have beautifully and effectively conveyed the wonderment of a new and glorious day. This makes me want to rise early and watch the miraculous sun light up my day!

Fabulous contest entry. Sure to do well!

I'll gaze upon the booth in wonderment
Brooke's ottava rima poem circumvent

(Best I could do this late. haha)
Nic

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009

Thank you, Nic :-) You're the best!! Brooke :-)

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

hey
this poem is mezmerising from the time you first set eyes on it
the display alone is haunting and spellbinding
The words takes you on a journey to a land of magical insoiration and deep into the earth of the time of day
have a smiley day

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009

Thank you, my friend. I so appreciate your lovely comments. Brooke :-)

Comment from Maurice WA Johnson

Excellent

Oooooooooooh! Good one, my friend. Only using the 'Blue Earth' photo would improve this one! But 'disquietude'? Realy? This sort of jumped out at me, distracting from the overall flow of the piece. It somehow seems out of place.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Maurice :-) I love "disquietude" - sorry it doesn't work for you. Brooke

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

How can one match this mistress of the form
Whose sweet Ottava Rima sets the norm.

Alright, I know its a couplet, but I don't have the time or the skill to write 8 lines right now:-)
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Reg. And I love your couplet!!! :-) Brooke

Comment from clawhammer

Excellent

This is great work. I love the meaning of the poem and the arrangement. You are so far beyond my literary prowess that I don't feel i can really critique your structure other than saying it seems near perfect. Well done.

Brek

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, my friend :-) You are more than generous in your comments. Brooke

Comment from DeboraDyess

Excellent

A truly wonderful contest entry. I'm reminded of a Proverb that says the righteous are like the first light of dawn, growing until the full light of day. This is lovely (and yes, I know the poem and the Porverb aren't really alike, but it made me think of how we're to be like this to other people.) Belssings, Deb

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Deb - I appreciate your gracious comments :-) Brooke

Comment from MJMuraco

Excellent

Your poem has beautiful imagery and it flows nicely. I enjoyed these linesHow could disquietude or fear persist,
illuminated by a star so bright?
I gaze upon my world in wonderment,
resplendent in the glow of sun's ascent.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Mary Jayne, for a thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke