The Ottava Rima
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "What Lies Beyond My Window?"ottava rima poetry
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Comment from BethShelby
I like this. There are many who live within their small little world never venturing to leave the confound of what is familiar. I think of my grandmother who lived her whole life in the same small town and usually in her house. and I wonder if she envied those who saw more of the world. I think I rather be a little fish in a big pond.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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I like this. There are many who live within their small little world never venturing to leave the confound of what is familiar. I think of my grandmother who lived her whole life in the same small town and usually in her house. and I wonder if she envied those who saw more of the world. I think I rather be a little fish in a big pond.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Beth, for a most insightful response :-) Brooke
Comment from sgalletti
Oh, I love this poetic form. Promise - I will write one soon. But, I want it to be 'just right'. You are such an inspiration. Loved the alliteration of the b's and v's. You provide great examples of the ottova rima. Thank you - again! Sue
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Oh, I love this poetic form. Promise - I will write one soon. But, I want it to be 'just right'. You are such an inspiration. Loved the alliteration of the b's and v's. You provide great examples of the ottova rima. Thank you - again! Sue
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Sue - I'll be patient :-) Brooke
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Well...I just sponsored a contest thanks to you! And, referred everyone to your portfolio for great examples. And, posted my very first ottava rima as well. So.....I REALLY want your honest review so I can edit (you know how I like to do that!) and learn....for my next one! Thank you Brooke. Sue
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is quite good. Ottava rima are very difficult to write and you did an excellent job. Not only the form, but also the content are quite good. Superb job.
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This is quite good. Ottava rima are very difficult to write and you did an excellent job. Not only the form, but also the content are quite good. Superb job.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Alvin - I appreciate your generous rating and thoughtfully positive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from pixiemillie
Oh, Brooke- -the writing of someone with 'wanderlust' in the heart. How many of us feel like this sometimes--getting out from behind those four walls- -experience the freedom of the gypsy soul- -wandering, no responsibilities per se, not having to look back but only forward- -but for some reason I can't believe this is the true you, but only that part that rises up in all of us once in awhile. Another well-written ottava rima which in a way has a very lonely feel to it. Thank you. RoS
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Oh, Brooke- -the writing of someone with 'wanderlust' in the heart. How many of us feel like this sometimes--getting out from behind those four walls- -experience the freedom of the gypsy soul- -wandering, no responsibilities per se, not having to look back but only forward- -but for some reason I can't believe this is the true you, but only that part that rises up in all of us once in awhile. Another well-written ottava rima which in a way has a very lonely feel to it. Thank you. RoS
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Rose of Sharon - so glad you got the meaning from this :-) I have lots and lots of wanderlust!!! Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
I enjoyed the poem and that old saying in the notes, the snakehead fishes that someone released in Maryland come to mind, they can walk for lake to lake on their fins.
The poem is well written, laid out and illustrated. I believe it is about comfort and contentment. I'd say, just enough to enjoy life from time to time, but not so much that one is truly comfortable doesn't feel like venturing out. In a sense, poetry is that good balance for me.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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I enjoyed the poem and that old saying in the notes, the snakehead fishes that someone released in Maryland come to mind, they can walk for lake to lake on their fins.
The poem is well written, laid out and illustrated. I believe it is about comfort and contentment. I'd say, just enough to enjoy life from time to time, but not so much that one is truly comfortable doesn't feel like venturing out. In a sense, poetry is that good balance for me.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Mike. I appreciate your thoughtfulness, as always :-) Brooke
Comment from raw form
I'm definitely the little fish in a big pond I traveled the middle of the country to start over again and this is kind of how I felt before I did so. I'm glad I did do it because I am so much better off, God knows where I'd be if I didn't make the move. As usual always on point for me Brooke. :-)
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I'm definitely the little fish in a big pond I traveled the middle of the country to start over again and this is kind of how I felt before I did so. I'm glad I did do it because I am so much better off, God knows where I'd be if I didn't make the move. As usual always on point for me Brooke. :-)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
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Thank you, my friend, for your thoughtful response - you are one of the brave ones who ventured out! Brooke
Comment from TheBritsWife
Hi Brooke! I just got back from a trip to Scotland, (I fell in love with the country) and I felt like you were speaking to me with your wise and beautifully crafted ottava rima! My life used to be so limited and everything has changed so much for the better. I may be a small fish, but the view from the large pond is amazing. Thank you so much for sharing this with me! I loved everything about this beautiful poem, including the picture you chose. - Karen :-)
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Hi Brooke! I just got back from a trip to Scotland, (I fell in love with the country) and I felt like you were speaking to me with your wise and beautifully crafted ottava rima! My life used to be so limited and everything has changed so much for the better. I may be a small fish, but the view from the large pond is amazing. Thank you so much for sharing this with me! I loved everything about this beautiful poem, including the picture you chose. - Karen :-)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
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Karen, thank you so much!! I would love to visit Scotland - I am green with envy - your generous response to my poem is most appreciated!! Brooke :-)
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Hi Brooke!
Great poem! How do you remember all those forms of poetry? Your mind amazes me! LOL!
I love the message, too. At one time in my life the whole planet was my pond, but now I stick pretty close to family and my pond is much smaller. If you go through life without living, I think it's a sin.
Penny
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Hi Brooke!
Great poem! How do you remember all those forms of poetry? Your mind amazes me! LOL!
I love the message, too. At one time in my life the whole planet was my pond, but now I stick pretty close to family and my pond is much smaller. If you go through life without living, I think it's a sin.
Penny
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Penny - I map out the form on the page before I write, but don't tell!! :-) Thanks for your thoughtful response, my friend. Brooke
Comment from melyuki
Hi Brooke, great thoughts are cast by looking out this window. I love the wording in your poem "if I bid all that bind me an adieu, what vantage points and vistas might I find." The very essence of your thoughts. So deep, and revealing so much to the reader. These lines lend opportunity for the reader to seek beyond his own limits. The wonders of what might be, in so doing..... A great verse with a powerful message, summed up in your last two lines. Stay safe in the confinements of what you know, or extend your boundaries and take a chance.... Love it. Your writing always makes me Think. so stimulating for my brain.. Thanks again Brooke and as always, the flow works well and the rhthm and rhyming superb. smiles and lots of them , from Mel
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Hi Brooke, great thoughts are cast by looking out this window. I love the wording in your poem "if I bid all that bind me an adieu, what vantage points and vistas might I find." The very essence of your thoughts. So deep, and revealing so much to the reader. These lines lend opportunity for the reader to seek beyond his own limits. The wonders of what might be, in so doing..... A great verse with a powerful message, summed up in your last two lines. Stay safe in the confinements of what you know, or extend your boundaries and take a chance.... Love it. Your writing always makes me Think. so stimulating for my brain.. Thanks again Brooke and as always, the flow works well and the rhthm and rhyming superb. smiles and lots of them , from Mel
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Mel, and good morning. Nothing brings me greater satisfaction than reading a comment that shows beyond a doubt how the reader truly engaged in what I was saying. You've gotten my day off to a great start!!! Brooke :-)
Comment from stormwolf2
This puts me in the mind of someone from a royal household who is trapped by their heritage and is longing to escape into the wide open world. But life isn't always greener on the other side. Which path do we chose?
Well penned my friend with good imagery. Good rhyme and rhythm.
Loved the picture.
Best wishes,
Malcolm
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This puts me in the mind of someone from a royal household who is trapped by their heritage and is longing to escape into the wide open world. But life isn't always greener on the other side. Which path do we chose?
Well penned my friend with good imagery. Good rhyme and rhythm.
Loved the picture.
Best wishes,
Malcolm
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Malcolm - I just laughed my way through your poem dedicated to the women of FS. LOL I appreciate your thoughtful read of this slightly less funny poem :-) Brooke
