(cat's paws with caprice) haiku
a haiku79 total reviews
Comment from Amicus
Once I read your note, I was able to appreciate more than just the pleasant sound of this clever haiku. I prefer the playful sea also.
The use of caprice was a really terrific choice here--it makes the poem to my way of thinking!
Nice haiku.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Once I read your note, I was able to appreciate more than just the pleasant sound of this clever haiku. I prefer the playful sea also.
The use of caprice was a really terrific choice here--it makes the poem to my way of thinking!
Nice haiku.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your great review. I also like caprice, so thanks for noticing that :-) Brooke
Comment from DrCarter2001
I'm glad you explained cat's paws were because I read I was visualizing literal cats running across the water! The light, airy feel and use of water really fulfills the haiku theme.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I'm glad you explained cat's paws were because I read I was visualizing literal cats running across the water! The light, airy feel and use of water really fulfills the haiku theme.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thanks so much- though it's pretty darned cute to think of actual cats doing it too! Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
Go sailing once and you will learn all about waves, the one term you don't want to hear is, "As smooth as glass." I know the waves that are contained in you well written poem. Sometimes, they can be enchantingly entertaining.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Go sailing once and you will learn all about waves, the one term you don't want to hear is, "As smooth as glass." I know the waves that are contained in you well written poem. Sometimes, they can be enchantingly entertaining.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Mike, it's nice to get a positive review from someone who actually knows the waves - thank you, Brooke
Comment from Peter@Poole
This is an interesting, even intriguing, haiku, Brooke, but I needed your notes in order to interpret it. I'm aware of cat's paws from my sailing days. When becalmed, one needs to be watchful for cat's paws in order to determine where the next puff of wind will come from. Peter
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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This is an interesting, even intriguing, haiku, Brooke, but I needed your notes in order to interpret it. I'm aware of cat's paws from my sailing days. When becalmed, one needs to be watchful for cat's paws in order to determine where the next puff of wind will come from. Peter
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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You're one of only a couple of people who knew the term - I should have figured you would from sailing. Thank you, Peter. Brooke :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This paints a very beautiful image for your readers of the ocean as captured by the wind you have done very well good colour choices regards Fuller
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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This paints a very beautiful image for your readers of the ocean as captured by the wind you have done very well good colour choices regards Fuller
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Fuller, thank you for your encouraging review. Brooke
Comment from Alexander E Poet
beautifully worded, i like how it flow a good job and a remarkable piece of work. Great talent. Rich amazing I love the story that this haiku There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one Alexander QQ...
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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beautifully worded, i like how it flow a good job and a remarkable piece of work. Great talent. Rich amazing I love the story that this haiku There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Alexander, thanks for a positive review. Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Thank you for your informative explanation of 'cat's paws' feline they are not. I have never heard the expression and so have learned something new today; I liked your mini poem and please keep writing about our favourite subject; the endless sea. She has so many moods, cat's paws and lion's roars. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your informative explanation of 'cat's paws' feline they are not. I have never heard the expression and so have learned something new today; I liked your mini poem and please keep writing about our favourite subject; the endless sea. She has so many moods, cat's paws and lion's roars. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments, Brooke :-)
Comment from sharon fallis
This is a very lovely haiku. Well thought out and portrayed correctly with all it syllable counts in the right places. Good metaphors and wonderful visuals and imagery. Thanks for sharing. Sharon
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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This is a very lovely haiku. Well thought out and portrayed correctly with all it syllable counts in the right places. Good metaphors and wonderful visuals and imagery. Thanks for sharing. Sharon
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Sharon, thank you for your attention to form as well as content! Brooke
Comment from jmyron
Well done. The syllable is right on, the story is great, and the satori is good as well. It is, however, a Senryu, not a Haiku.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Well done. The syllable is right on, the story is great, and the satori is good as well. It is, however, a Senryu, not a Haiku.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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those labels just don't bother me, especially on this site where their site sponsored contests allow people to enter poems about motorcycles and clowns in haiku contests, just so they count the syllables. Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Well darlin, cats paws was what they fixed yore shoes with when the bottoms wore out. Ya couldn't irrigate the fields at night with holes in yore shoes! Ya cain't have an excitin day and play it safe. Ya got to take off yore shoes and run through them fields fer excitment!
Dave
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Well darlin, cats paws was what they fixed yore shoes with when the bottoms wore out. Ya couldn't irrigate the fields at night with holes in yore shoes! Ya cain't have an excitin day and play it safe. Ya got to take off yore shoes and run through them fields fer excitment!
Dave
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I had no idea that cats paws had this additional definition. How fascinating! Thanks, Brooke
