The Night
Openly inviting! Too much so. Which?15 total reviews
Comment from Sophiaalexandra
I really liked this poem. It was short so i feel as if it may be up for a small amount of open interpretation. It definitely leaves as impact. Thank you for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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I really liked this poem. It was short so i feel as if it may be up for a small amount of open interpretation. It definitely leaves as impact. Thank you for sharing with us.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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The essence of the night! I thank you for your compliments and this review and appreciate them very much. Mike
Comment from nora arjuna
Mike, great poem, a dark one, but I thought this form should have internal rhyme too? Check out the rules again and see if I'm right. I'm going to check too to be doubly sure. Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Mike, great poem, a dark one, but I thought this form should have internal rhyme too? Check out the rules again and see if I'm right. I'm going to check too to be doubly sure. Good luck!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Some and come, are the internal rhymes that I have chosen. Maybe a bit unconventional, but end rhyme I have only heard referenced for the last words. I hope that I am right as I don't want to chop it up. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
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ah i see it now. somehow I tend to look for it somewhere in the middle. :)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Mike! I find these essence poems very interesting and yours is delightfully mysterious. I like the word "dire" and it gives your poem a hint of terror. Best of luck in the contest.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Hello Mike! I find these essence poems very interesting and yours is delightfully mysterious. I like the word "dire" and it gives your poem a hint of terror. Best of luck in the contest.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. I love that quality of being overly inviting but ambigious, in a way I was thinking about the essense of the night.
Comment from Arkine
Interesting poem. It can mean a few things I suppose. Dark campfire stories could be one. Or those that are scared of the dark and seek the symbolic shelter of the fire's light. A gesture of friendship when one is feeling that they are lost. A safe beacon for those wandering in the dark.
Great job! :)
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Interesting poem. It can mean a few things I suppose. Dark campfire stories could be one. Or those that are scared of the dark and seek the symbolic shelter of the fire's light. A gesture of friendship when one is feeling that they are lost. A safe beacon for those wandering in the dark.
Great job! :)
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Yet, is the object next to the fire or outide on its perifery. I love the ambiguity of this one. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Lillianna
OHOH. Very dark and sinister. Almost like come into my web said the spider. Well that is what I got out of it. Nice job. Keep up the good work L
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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OHOH. Very dark and sinister. Almost like come into my web said the spider. Well that is what I got out of it. Nice job. Keep up the good work L
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Yea, that's what I love about it. You don't know if your safer by the fire or not. I enjoyed adding that element of uncertainity in there. Thank you very much for the compliments and the review. Have a great week ahead too. Mike
