Caterpillar
four quatrains in tribute to my favorite insect71 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Well, of course I had to read this one. I've written a whole novel about caterpillars who are aware of their short existence, as an allegory for our fear of mortality.
I agree they are whole and complete as they are, as a rose bud is perfection, even before it opens to a full-blown rose.
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Well, of course I had to read this one. I've written a whole novel about caterpillars who are aware of their short existence, as an allegory for our fear of mortality.
I agree they are whole and complete as they are, as a rose bud is perfection, even before it opens to a full-blown rose.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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you are certainly my kindred spirit as far as caterpillars go - since a child I've been phobic about worms and at the same time allow caterpillars to crawl all over me! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from miskko
This is a fun little poem about an unexpected subject matter. Your rhyme scheme is good, and the poem flows easily. It's a fun read.
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This is a fun little poem about an unexpected subject matter. Your rhyme scheme is good, and the poem flows easily. It's a fun read.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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hey, it's an insect contest LOL Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from skye
The journey from catepillar to butterfly is beautifully crafted in this poem.
I love the images, and the artwork is exceptionally well chosen. I do not like the catepillar.... but I LOVE butterflies.
Very well done.
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The journey from catepillar to butterfly is beautifully crafted in this poem.
I love the images, and the artwork is exceptionally well chosen. I do not like the catepillar.... but I LOVE butterflies.
Very well done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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I love both - as much as I hate worms, I'll invite a caterpillar to walk up my arm. Go figure. LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from wierdgrace
What a wonderful, and great entry for this contest, I loved it, found no errors and no revisions. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
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What a wonderful, and great entry for this contest, I loved it, found no errors and no revisions. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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I'm so glad you enjoyed - thanks for the contest encouragement! Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
Ah, wonderful job on this one. I agree, even caterpillars are God's creatures with a purpose during their time here. I love how you select each word so carefully, positioning each one to elicit just the right note. Your talent continues to delight me.
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Ah, wonderful job on this one. I agree, even caterpillars are God's creatures with a purpose during their time here. I love how you select each word so carefully, positioning each one to elicit just the right note. Your talent continues to delight me.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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You are most kind - thanks so much for your wonderful review, Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is lovely, Brooke...the life of a caterpillar
changing into a beautiful butterfly. Well penned,
my friend.
My youngest used to pick all sorts up - beetles,
ants and yes, caterpillars, which he sometimes kept
in a jar. I used to go into his bedroom of a night - in the dark to check on him - and close the curtains he was
always opening. One night I had such a fright - touching
something furry - it had somehow crawled out of the jar. What a boy he was. He's not a lot better now at 36 - as a
forester, he's always amongst the woods and tells me all sorts of stories.
Margaret
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This is lovely, Brooke...the life of a caterpillar
changing into a beautiful butterfly. Well penned,
my friend.
My youngest used to pick all sorts up - beetles,
ants and yes, caterpillars, which he sometimes kept
in a jar. I used to go into his bedroom of a night - in the dark to check on him - and close the curtains he was
always opening. One night I had such a fright - touching
something furry - it had somehow crawled out of the jar. What a boy he was. He's not a lot better now at 36 - as a
forester, he's always amongst the woods and tells me all sorts of stories.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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sounds like he knew early on what path he wanted to take! Thanks, Brooke
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Yes, but I don't like the
thought of him using
a chain-saw and being
60ft up a tree sometimes.
I pray he stays safe.
Margaret.
Comment from azbukivedi
What a great poem you have here! And I agree wholeheartedly. You know, we often leave like this, waiting for tomorrow, for some party, for kids to get a bit older, for a promotion... and forget to enjoy THE day.
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What a great poem you have here! And I agree wholeheartedly. You know, we often leave like this, waiting for tomorrow, for some party, for kids to get a bit older, for a promotion... and forget to enjoy THE day.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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You totally get the point - thank you!! Brooke
Comment from teafor2
adewpearl--Scribe's enamorement of this un-
morphed entity is made adamantly clear in
these creative rhyming quatrains. Smooth flow-
ing personificated language of the "misunder-
stood" creature present a running account of
its trek through life. Charming and affable
read. teafor2
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adewpearl--Scribe's enamorement of this un-
morphed entity is made adamantly clear in
these creative rhyming quatrains. Smooth flow-
ing personificated language of the "misunder-
stood" creature present a running account of
its trek through life. Charming and affable
read. teafor2
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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I'm glad you enjoyed my tale of the misunderstood caterpillar - thank you, Brooke
Comment from perunest
Yes, there is something unique about
the fuzzy body of the caterpillar that
makes it one of the more playful-
looking critters of the insect world.
Sometimes I forget they become butterflies.
I wonder if they know that's their fate.
This is great tribute to another
gift of nature. A winner, for sure! Carolyn
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Yes, there is something unique about
the fuzzy body of the caterpillar that
makes it one of the more playful-
looking critters of the insect world.
Sometimes I forget they become butterflies.
I wonder if they know that's their fate.
This is great tribute to another
gift of nature. A winner, for sure! Carolyn
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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something tells me they don't know much of anything LOL
Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem is well written, brooke. It was an interesting read and presented nicely. This should do well in the contest. There were no errors found. It was my pleasure to read. Good luck.
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Your poem is well written, brooke. It was an interesting read and presented nicely. This should do well in the contest. There were no errors found. It was my pleasure to read. Good luck.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
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Thank you for such encouraging words - I hope you're right!! Brooke :-)
