Jobsworth
First Contact with Earth32 total reviews
Comment from Jonesy
Loved it, just loved it! What I like most is I kept picturing in my head (as I'm sure you did) what it might be like for an alien to land on Earth and meet someone like this for their first contact. Although being in the U.S., I'd have gone with redneck (ignorant rural sort, if you're not familar).
Funny all the way through, and maybe the only thing preventing me from giving this a six is I prefer my humor a little more subtle.
P.S. IT trainer, huh? I did that myself for a few years.
***But first let me tell you about a funny thing*** Loved this line!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Loved it, just loved it! What I like most is I kept picturing in my head (as I'm sure you did) what it might be like for an alien to land on Earth and meet someone like this for their first contact. Although being in the U.S., I'd have gone with redneck (ignorant rural sort, if you're not familar).
Funny all the way through, and maybe the only thing preventing me from giving this a six is I prefer my humor a little more subtle.
P.S. IT trainer, huh? I did that myself for a few years.
***But first let me tell you about a funny thing*** Loved this line!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Dammit. I'm too funny?
Glad you liked it.
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I'm too funny?
Well this one sure is, but it was more broad-based humor, wasn't it? It's like this: I can appreciate quality writing regardless of whether it's my style. This clearly qualifies.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This was a very funny and interesting read. Much enjoyed your characters and the dialogue. Love the last line of the story. Totally cool piece. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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This was a very funny and interesting read. Much enjoyed your characters and the dialogue. Love the last line of the story. Totally cool piece. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Thank you. I was in two minds as to whether to leave the last line in, but I'm glad I did now.
Comment from FredCollingwood
Dear snodlander,
Good stroy. I found no spags
He read the ticket the earthman had given him. Oh good, he could pay online. haha.
Nickname
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Dear snodlander,
Good stroy. I found no spags
He read the ticket the earthman had given him. Oh good, he could pay online. haha.
Nickname
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Thank you, glad you liked it
Comment from Josipher32
This was a wonderfully written humor science fictional piece. Good characterization. Interesting use of dialgue. Good plot.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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This was a wonderfully written humor science fictional piece. Good characterization. Interesting use of dialgue. Good plot.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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You're very kind, thank you.
Comment from Eagle Eye Jerry
Hey Snodlander
Ah, Jobworths! They are a figure of ridicule the world (and even the galaxy) over! I hate these officious little shits!
I loved how you gave this jobsworth the job that seems to define them the most --- the dreaded traffc warden! This was funny and well written. Very enjoyable.
Eagle Eye
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Hey Snodlander
Ah, Jobworths! They are a figure of ridicule the world (and even the galaxy) over! I hate these officious little shits!
I loved how you gave this jobsworth the job that seems to define them the most --- the dreaded traffc warden! This was funny and well written. Very enjoyable.
Eagle Eye
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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OK. You're passion on the subject is just a little frightening, but I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review
Comment from Lady & Louis
Ah, gods, I enjoy your writing, snodlander. It's just so bloody funny. I grew up on English humour (well, I say "grew up" but interpret that as you will) - the Goons and Python. Your writing's in that wonderful self-deprecating and definitely twisted vein. Love it.
This is no exception; the idea of the unfortunate ambassador running into a pond-life variety of British bureaucracy is just too funny. Yellow lines and red tape. Perfect. There's not a thing to change in this.
Cheers,
LL :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Ah, gods, I enjoy your writing, snodlander. It's just so bloody funny. I grew up on English humour (well, I say "grew up" but interpret that as you will) - the Goons and Python. Your writing's in that wonderful self-deprecating and definitely twisted vein. Love it.
This is no exception; the idea of the unfortunate ambassador running into a pond-life variety of British bureaucracy is just too funny. Yellow lines and red tape. Perfect. There's not a thing to change in this.
Cheers,
LL :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Dammit, I wish I had thought of the yellow lines and red tape line.
Thank you for the six, and the comparison with the Goons.
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My pleasure!
LL :)
Comment from Norzah
I really had a good laugh out of this one: an Ambassador of the Federation of Slotharian Planets landing his shuttle in a carpark and getting a ticket from the attendant. What a beautiful idea for a real comedy. The message that seeped through, intentionally or otherwise, is also interesting viz. that the earth authorities are not really on guard against alien landings and that car park attendants have heard so many crazy excuses about parking in the wrong area that nothing surprised them anymore. Love the piece.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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I really had a good laugh out of this one: an Ambassador of the Federation of Slotharian Planets landing his shuttle in a carpark and getting a ticket from the attendant. What a beautiful idea for a real comedy. The message that seeped through, intentionally or otherwise, is also interesting viz. that the earth authorities are not really on guard against alien landings and that car park attendants have heard so many crazy excuses about parking in the wrong area that nothing surprised them anymore. Love the piece.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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I will deny to my dying breath that any of my stories have a serious message, but thank you for your review and kind comments. Glad you liked it
Comment from Honus X Heppablatte
I get the feeling from reading this impressive piece that somehow you have tuned into the celestial radio station broadcasting inspiration from the vast beyond. Your words are alive with bright detail and strike as hard as steel. A spectacular piece. It was a sheer joy to read!
You got talent, man. I always come away from your stuff entertained.Zaphod Beeblebrox would be proud!
I'd give you a 6 but am currently fresh out.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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I get the feeling from reading this impressive piece that somehow you have tuned into the celestial radio station broadcasting inspiration from the vast beyond. Your words are alive with bright detail and strike as hard as steel. A spectacular piece. It was a sheer joy to read!
You got talent, man. I always come away from your stuff entertained.Zaphod Beeblebrox would be proud!
I'd give you a 6 but am currently fresh out.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Well, I'm going to take an honourary six, ayway. Thanls for your review
Comment from ledford
Good job:-) Just one suggestion which doesn't warrent docking a star...
"Days he had rehearsed it on the long journey" Awkward..I would revise.
"he hadn't considered the possibility of hecklers in the audience." Ha...cute!
Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2008
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Good job:-) Just one suggestion which doesn't warrent docking a star...
"Days he had rehearsed it on the long journey" Awkward..I would revise.
"he hadn't considered the possibility of hecklers in the audience." Ha...cute!
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2008
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It may be a cultural thing. It's the way I and my peers would express it, but I'll look at it when I have some distance
Thanks, glad you liked it
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol snodlander I wonder if people in USA have a name for Jobsworths lol. I could certainly imagine this happening. Thanks for the chuckle
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2008
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Lol snodlander I wonder if people in USA have a name for Jobsworths lol. I could certainly imagine this happening. Thanks for the chuckle
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2008
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I believe not, hence my explanation of what a jobsworth is in the notes.
Glad it made you chuckle. Thanks