Could-have-beens
Minute Poem20 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Yes, I think we all have 'could-have- beens,' in our lives. I want to wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Yes, I think we all have 'could-have- beens,' in our lives. I want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Barbara.
Steve
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Steve.
-You wrote a good minute poem with a good topic.
-I like how you italicize each concluding line for emphasis.
-A good first verse shows his uncertainty about approaching her.
-Maybe his hopes were brighter when they were at the party.
-But it doesn't seem like it was meant to be.
-I like the image "dusty scenes."
-A good entry; good luck!!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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-Nice image and presentation, Steve.
-You wrote a good minute poem with a good topic.
-I like how you italicize each concluding line for emphasis.
-A good first verse shows his uncertainty about approaching her.
-Maybe his hopes were brighter when they were at the party.
-But it doesn't seem like it was meant to be.
-I like the image "dusty scenes."
-A good entry; good luck!!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Hi, Pam. Thank you very much for this thorough review. I appreciate it.
Steve
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You are welcome, Steve.
Comment from Begin Again
We live in a wonderful world of what-ifs and lost opportunities. Have you ever wished that you could hit the rewind switch and been able to relive or change one tiny moment of life and how things might have been so different? God's plan, I guess.
Nice little poem to get the brain thinking this morning.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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We live in a wonderful world of what-ifs and lost opportunities. Have you ever wished that you could hit the rewind switch and been able to relive or change one tiny moment of life and how things might have been so different? God's plan, I guess.
Nice little poem to get the brain thinking this morning.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Carol. Sometimes I hear people say that they wouldn't change anything in their past lives. Are they crazy?
Steve
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I can't imagine anyone's life being perfect, especially if they have suffered through tragedies and wonder if only they had done one thing different. Have a great day!
Carol
Comment from Jim Wile
What a delightful little poem, Steve. Life seems to be full of these little scenes of opportunities lost. How different our lives might have turned out had we only pursued them. And now, we're left with regrets and fantasies of what might have been.
The poem was beautifully rendered with a picture of a real cutie and good choices of background and font colors. Very well done. - Jim
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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What a delightful little poem, Steve. Life seems to be full of these little scenes of opportunities lost. How different our lives might have turned out had we only pursued them. And now, we're left with regrets and fantasies of what might have been.
The poem was beautifully rendered with a picture of a real cutie and good choices of background and font colors. Very well done. - Jim
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Jim. I guess my poem focuses on potential romantic incidents, but of course 'could-have-beens' may apply to a much wider context. Who wouldn't change mistakes they have made?
Steve
Comment from Mark Jackson
I like this it works in all the way a minute poem should. I do find myself a little confused in the narrative but that is not terrible as the journey was wonderful and the end positive.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I like this it works in all the way a minute poem should. I do find myself a little confused in the narrative but that is not terrible as the journey was wonderful and the end positive.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Mark!
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We look back at the lost opportunities Steve and regret not making a move. Your Minute is well metered and rhymes and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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We look back at the lost opportunities Steve and regret not making a move. Your Minute is well metered and rhymes and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. There's lots I would change!
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
A fine poem for the contest. The further one gets down the track the greater the number of could-have-beens and should-have-beens there are that lie behind. That's why I try not to look back.
In your second stanza, I had logically assumed 'I dreamt that night'. Perhaps I'm misinterpreting the intention.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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A fine poem for the contest. The further one gets down the track the greater the number of could-have-beens and should-have-beens there are that lie behind. That's why I try not to look back.
In your second stanza, I had logically assumed 'I dreamt that night'. Perhaps I'm misinterpreting the intention.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Tony. Can't change it now, so no use worrying about it!
Yes, 'dream' was intentional, just as 'love' rather than 'loved' in the last line... This guy has it bad!
Steve
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading this poem. This brings back memories of some of the dances I attended during the summer.
Picture goes well with the poem. I have had many could have -beens.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed reading this poem. This brings back memories of some of the dances I attended during the summer.
Picture goes well with the poem. I have had many could have -beens.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Brenda. Glad I stirred a few personal recollections.
Steve
Comment from lyenochka
Great use of the Minute poem to capture that "minute" of could have been events. I guess the narrator reflects on the love that could have happened had he dared so many years ago. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Great use of the Minute poem to capture that "minute" of could have been events. I guess the narrator reflects on the love that could have happened had he dared so many years ago. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
Don't we all have these 'dusty scenes' store in our memories?
Steve
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is an unusual minute poem. It speaks of scenes so long ago and then ends with I love you so! I am not sure where that came from since these could have been from long ago. So, good luck with the contest I hope you win hands down.
Jesse
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This is an unusual minute poem. It speaks of scenes so long ago and then ends with I love you so! I am not sure where that came from since these could have been from long ago. So, good luck with the contest I hope you win hands down.
Jesse
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Jesse. Perhaps you hit on the heart of the poem. certainly the suggestion is that the speaker of the poem still loves this person he missed his chance with many years ago.
Steve
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Thanks, Steve. Now I understand.
Jesse
