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Moth to the Flame

Mirrored Cinquain

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Comment from jessizero
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I liked this mirrored poem. Your repetition of the word "senseless" was very effective. I also liked the picture you supplied. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you for stopping by and I am sorry for the delayed reply
Comment from lyenochka
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You did a super job with this Mirror Cinquain form and it makes me think of someone who is passionately in love and willing to give up everything because of the attraction.
One question about:
my flame my end
(I wonder if you meant "my" both times. If so, maybe a comma could help the double subject "my flame, my end". Or did you mean "my flame may end" ? )

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    There should be a comma. I was not sure in these modern forms punctuations are used .That is why I left it .when i started here first i used to see many poems with a footnote - ' no punctuations intentional'. It is definitely better in this case( my old fashioned view)
    Thank you Helen .again sorry for the delay in replying.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It always amazes me how close these moths fly to the flame and sometimes they are burned. They do the same with light bulbs and often singe their wings. They are indeed hypnotised by the light, a fine post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much and I am sorry my reply is delayed..I was not well..
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I enjoyed reading. I have often wondered why moths, and such are always drawn to the flame. Of course, it's the light, but don't they feel the heat? HMMM

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    I used to wonder that always ..Thanks for stopping by
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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I guess a chinquapin has a beginning and an end that are repeated and it takes imagination to put meaning between the two
Good luck in the challenge

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much and sorry for the delay in reply.
Comment from shelley kaye
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ooh cool mirror cinquain
interesting theme and thought-provoking word choices
love the 'crazy orbits' in the center!
smooth flow and nice imagery

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much
Comment from Brenda Strauser
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What a nice poem. It is written well. I like some of the words in the poem: hypnotized I fly close. The picture is so beautiful, especially the butterfly. Very good job

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much.I am sorry my reply is very late.
Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was very deep. I love that even with the heat, and knowing the danger the flame presents, you (the moth) cannot leave. Entranced with whatever it sees. Beautifully written. Gretchen

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much i am sorry my reply is very late .was not keeping well..
Comment from papa55mike
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It sounds like someone is caught in the moment of temptation and just can't turn away. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you for stopping by .I am sorry My reply is late..
Comment from Mark Jackson
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Very good, I do like the use of the word Senseless to describe both the flame and the moth after meeting the flame. The middle bit is good too. 5 stars thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much I am sorry that my reply is late
reply by Mark Jackson on 16-Apr-2024
    That is fine and you are welcome.