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haiku (a small child)

A Haiku for the club challenge

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Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your Haiku Poem - heart wrenching picture of this little girl reaching for a flower- the dress says it all- have a daughter- can't imagine- good poem- Bless AP

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you AP, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
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I like your take on the picture. The "flower" could be symbolic of her secure childhood with her family. The "roots severed" shows us that the connection to her ancestry has been cut off. So sad.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Exactly, thank you for your wonderful and understanding comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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She could have lost a flower so she chose to now hold an invisible, imaginary flower thar a he will never be able to lose. Thats it.

I like the intriguing photo and your poem was very well written, matching it perfectly.

Alex

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Mark D. R.
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The flower in her hand is not necessary for the import of your post.

The sad-looking child's life is fractured and her roots are not likely stable.

Mark

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Mark, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from shelley kaye
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i thought the flower was pinned in her hair LOL!

great essence haiku - sad, yet with an air of hope between the lines...

thank you for sharing
shelley :)


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, after looking at the picture I was not sure, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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This could go into a different direction like the child will lose that innocence when the flower fades. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

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 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, and yes I did consider that, wonderful pickup, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Wonderful haiku and presentation but the event is a challenge of writing as concise as possible...

For example...

small child

cries for her flower ~

roots severed

Thank you very much for participating in the haiku club event.

Well done!


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 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Oh! OK, as always very much appreciated****kahpot