Hickory, Dickery & Dock Escapade
A Mango and Bert Story26 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A fun little story which portrays sibling rivalry in a fun and humorous way which all kids will identify with. very relatable. I like the story within a story aspect too. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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A fun little story which portrays sibling rivalry in a fun and humorous way which all kids will identify with. very relatable. I like the story within a story aspect too. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Wendy for taking the time to read and share with me.
John
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi John,
This is a really good children's story, though I think it strikes a chord with the rest of us grown-ups. I think it would make a really good contest. Your story was very clever and terribly original.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi John,
This is a really good children's story, though I think it strikes a chord with the rest of us grown-ups. I think it would make a really good contest. Your story was very clever and terribly original.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Rhonda,
Thank you so much for reading and sharing with me.
John
Comment from XinaD
This is an absolutely adorable spin on a much loved children's classic. Well done. It was a lot of fun to see the personalities, and I could see this being an exceptional illustrated book for young readers. Great job!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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This is an absolutely adorable spin on a much loved children's classic. Well done. It was a lot of fun to see the personalities, and I could see this being an exceptional illustrated book for young readers. Great job!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Wow. You can see this as a children?s book? That was/is my goal. I have a few stories with Mango & Bert.
Thank you for the uplifting and positive review!
Cheers,
John
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I absolutely can. I'd love to read more about Mango and Bert. It's a fresh fun twist on nostalgic gold. Who wouldn't love reading this to their littles?
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is very creative and was fun to read. Thank you for sharing this with us.
The next morning, Mango sat down to a delightful breakfast of kibble pancakes smothered in beef gravy. (Maybe - The following morning, Mango sat to a delightful breakfast of kibble pancakes smothered in beef gravy.)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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This is very creative and was fun to read. Thank you for sharing this with us.
The next morning, Mango sat down to a delightful breakfast of kibble pancakes smothered in beef gravy. (Maybe - The following morning, Mango sat to a delightful breakfast of kibble pancakes smothered in beef gravy.)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Barbara for the positivity.
I?ll make your suggested change
John
Comment from Daylily
So cute! This is a jolly little tale featuring a cheerful collection of animals. The dynamics of the two little families are very true to life for a lot of humans. It is cleverly written and flows well for children of all ages. (I can happily say I have never completely grown up.) :-)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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So cute! This is a jolly little tale featuring a cheerful collection of animals. The dynamics of the two little families are very true to life for a lot of humans. It is cleverly written and flows well for children of all ages. (I can happily say I have never completely grown up.) :-)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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You and me both which is probably why children stories are my favorite to write
John
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi John, a fun story. I could feel the adventure from within. Of note:
--"Momma, did you hear that? Dickory called me yuck."
(That reminded me of my own kids. The only thing that could have been possibly worse was if they were sitting next to each other in a car, and they touched each other. Oh my goodness, what a catastrophe that would nave been.)
--One time he came home with rainbow colored cotton candy.
(My grandkids would love if their dad brought home colored cotton candy for dinner. Oh dandy!)
Hickory was nowhere to he found.
A fun ending. Now we know where the Hickory, Dickory, Dock rhyme has come from. Good imagery in that scene as well. Well done. M
(As parents, we all know that fear)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Hi John, a fun story. I could feel the adventure from within. Of note:
--"Momma, did you hear that? Dickory called me yuck."
(That reminded me of my own kids. The only thing that could have been possibly worse was if they were sitting next to each other in a car, and they touched each other. Oh my goodness, what a catastrophe that would nave been.)
--One time he came home with rainbow colored cotton candy.
(My grandkids would love if their dad brought home colored cotton candy for dinner. Oh dandy!)
Hickory was nowhere to he found.
A fun ending. Now we know where the Hickory, Dickory, Dock rhyme has come from. Good imagery in that scene as well. Well done. M
(As parents, we all know that fear)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Oh the car rides? we had three in the back and most times it was okay till they started playing "punch buggy".
Thank you Margaret for reading and sharing,
John
Comment from jim vecchio
A very amusing tale, one children ought to enjoy. Are you going to continue the "Mango and Bert" stories? If so, keep them in the same vein. Keep the language and situations just as they are now. No major concerns.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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A very amusing tale, one children ought to enjoy. Are you going to continue the "Mango and Bert" stories? If so, keep them in the same vein. Keep the language and situations just as they are now. No major concerns.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I have a few stories written or partially written. I?ve kept the ages the same.
Thanks for your input.
Much appreciated.
John
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I'll look forward to them.
Comment from Jeano
What a cute story you came up with. There is so much talent on this site. I enjoy reading the creative stories that are posted on here. This would make a great children's book but not sure how or if that would be legal. Not sure how tight copyright issues would be. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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What a cute story you came up with. There is so much talent on this site. I enjoy reading the creative stories that are posted on here. This would make a great children's book but not sure how or if that would be legal. Not sure how tight copyright issues would be. Nicely done.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Oh because of the nursery rhyme?.
Thank you for reading and your thoughts.
John
Comment from BethShelby
This was a really cute story. That little beagle is good writer. He might win a contest. I laughed with Dock said "Mom, he called me yuck." That reminded me of my twins when that were little. Christi said, "Don called me Shut up."
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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This was a really cute story. That little beagle is good writer. He might win a contest. I laughed with Dock said "Mom, he called me yuck." That reminded me of my twins when that were little. Christi said, "Don called me Shut up."
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Awesome. I?m glad it brought up memories.
John
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the humour here in this crazy post John and you must have had fun writing this little fictional story and I was entertained by your pen here, have a wonderful Sunday, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I loved the humour here in this crazy post John and you must have had fun writing this little fictional story and I was entertained by your pen here, have a wonderful Sunday, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Great review, Dolly. It was really fun to write.
Thank you for reading and wonderful words.
John
