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The Divine Nonsense of Jim Wile

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A collection of 13 humorous poems

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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Here here Jim, I feel the same way when reading a book. Keep it simple and let's get to know the characters without there being a crowd of them. I read Hemingway's book and it was not my favourite, although I do love his style, a poignant write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thanks, Dolly. This is one of the big reasons I like e-books--the search function to help me remember who all those dang characters are!
Comment from royowen
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I must admit when I read someone's work the less the characters in the story, the more I follow, some will write two separate scenes consecutively, and I struggle to follow the story, perhaps my perspective is too narrow, beautifully written Jim, very skilful writing indeed, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thanks, Roy. This is another reason I like reading e-books. That search function sure helps me remember who all the characters are!
reply by royowen on 03-Jan-2023
    Yep, I understand
Comment from jessizero
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I have been guilty of this in the past. I have found what you said to be true. Too many characters can ruin a story. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thanks, Jessi. This is one of the main reasons I like e-books. That search function sure helps me remember who all those characters are!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, Too Many Characters, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, reminds me of what my son said to me when I first read him The Old Lady Who Lived in a Shoe: "Who are all the children? What's their names?" That was fun for me, filling in dozens of additional characters, but I feel he was left re-thinking his question selection.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Oh, that sounds like fun. I'll bet you came up with some funny ones too. Thanks for the good review.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
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Great poem! The voice of the poem rings true. I like the use of colloquial language which brings it alive. The meter reflects the rhythm of everyday speech. I agree, I have to go back in some novels to check who is who!

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thank you for all those stars, Sarah! Yep, that's where the search function for e-books is invaluable.
reply by Sarah Das Gupta on 03-Jan-2023
    Or for TV dramas, my grandsons always seem to know what's happening!
Comment from Helena Cheu
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The image definitely matches the tone of the poem! Reminds me of the old man yells at cloud Simpsons meme. The full rhyme scheme (AABB...etc.) fits perfectly too.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thank you very much for the good review, Helena.
Comment from Kayte Ray
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I like your "linguistic freedom" and use of words as pronounced within the written word. You really use it to build a solid character in the speaker. I also like your rhyme scheme. Good work

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thank you, Kayte. This one kind of goes along with my previous essay on why I prefer e-books to physical books (I can search for names easily when I forget them!)
Comment from Faith Williams
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Lol... I guess you haven't read Lord of the Rings then? Or any Tolkien for that matter. Anyway, your poem made me smile and chuckle this dreary, gray morning. Your rhyme is excellent (I am a little envious of those who rhyme so easily--not my strong suit). Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
    Thanks for the great review, Faith.

    Actually, LOTR is my favorite work of fiction of all time, but I first read it back in high school and have read it many times since. I know it so well, that it doesn't tax my memory now that I'm older.