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Comment from damommy
It IS a fantastic story! I love every word of it. Having a branch of family who were blind, I grew up in the blind community. They are always so cheerful. I'm going to remember the closed fist vs the open hand forever now. Great story!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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It IS a fantastic story! I love every word of it. Having a branch of family who were blind, I grew up in the blind community. They are always so cheerful. I'm going to remember the closed fist vs the open hand forever now. Great story!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Awe. Thank you so much. Don't know a lot about blind people so I tried to sound authentic. Thank you again for this nice review and stars. Gretchen
Comment from RodG
Ah, but it is a fantastic story about friendship and gratitude. You do a splendid job of characterizing both men, but especially through DIALOG. You also teach us a wonderful lesson about appreciating what senses we do have. Thank you for sharing this. Rod
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Ah, but it is a fantastic story about friendship and gratitude. You do a splendid job of characterizing both men, but especially through DIALOG. You also teach us a wonderful lesson about appreciating what senses we do have. Thank you for sharing this. Rod
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much. These two men kept me up most of last night with their talking. Lol. I seriously appreciate your kind review and the stars. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I have a one of a kind walking stick.(")
This is a very nice story, Gretchen. Now I remember how much I missed you when you quit the site for a while. You are indeed an excellent writer. Well done. Nancy:)
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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I have a one of a kind walking stick.(")
This is a very nice story, Gretchen. Now I remember how much I missed you when you quit the site for a while. You are indeed an excellent writer. Well done. Nancy:)
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Nancy. You know, as a writer, how your inner voice tells you "no one is gonna like what you post." It's so reassuring to hear such nice things. Please let us know how your daughter is doing. Still praying for y'all. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really like this story because it reminds us of the blessings, we often take for granted. I know I'm guilty of that. Thank you for the reminder.
After dinner I sit down at my computer and start to write. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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I really like this story because it reminds us of the blessings, we often take for granted. I know I'm guilty of that. Thank you for the reminder.
After dinner I sit down at my computer and start to write. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Barbara. I will fix that now. I appreciate your kind comments and the help. Gretchen
Comment from humpwhistle
This story doesn't have to be fantastic. It's honest and heartfelt. Fantastic is a fantasy. Funny, I've written at least a dozen stories that take place on park benches. They are both meeting places, and observation posts. Anything can happen on a park bench.
Your story is sentimental without being maudlin. You give me room to 'see' the story. I see the blind man as black--played by Ossie Davis. I hear his voice.
Nicely done, Gretchen.
Peace, Lee
My shackles go down a little.--Hackles, maybe?
The old blind man is there again. Another relic who spends part of his day tossing bread crumbs--this led me to believe they shared the same bench in the past. Perhaps you can make me 'see' two benches where I only 'saw' one before?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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This story doesn't have to be fantastic. It's honest and heartfelt. Fantastic is a fantasy. Funny, I've written at least a dozen stories that take place on park benches. They are both meeting places, and observation posts. Anything can happen on a park bench.
Your story is sentimental without being maudlin. You give me room to 'see' the story. I see the blind man as black--played by Ossie Davis. I hear his voice.
Nicely done, Gretchen.
Peace, Lee
My shackles go down a little.--Hackles, maybe?
The old blind man is there again. Another relic who spends part of his day tossing bread crumbs--this led me to believe they shared the same bench in the past. Perhaps you can make me 'see' two benches where I only 'saw' one before?
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Love Ossie Davis. Hoyt Axton is who I see as the old reporter.
Thank you, I've heard shackles all my life, but it could be wrong. Who knows. I'll go back and check on how to insert second bench. Shouldn't be hard. Thank you for this awesome review and the very helpful comments. Gretchen
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Wow! I haven't heard Hoyt Axton's name in a long time. Nice to remember him.
Perhaps we're thinking of two different things. Hackles are hairs that stand up on a dog's back.
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I stand corrected. It was indeed hackles. I thank you for calling it to my attention. Also changed one sentence to indicate multiple benches. Thanks for pointing out those details. Gretchen
Comment from Faith Williams
But it is a fantastic story! Such a great story about gratitude and using the examples of a closed hand versus an open hand creates such a vivid picture. It is simple. but deep. Well-written and well done.
One small thing--I believe you mean Desert Storm as opposed to Dessert Storm though it did give me an interesting though as to what a storm filled with desserts might look like.
Thank you so much for sharing your lovely piece.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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But it is a fantastic story! Such a great story about gratitude and using the examples of a closed hand versus an open hand creates such a vivid picture. It is simple. but deep. Well-written and well done.
One small thing--I believe you mean Desert Storm as opposed to Dessert Storm though it did give me an interesting though as to what a storm filled with desserts might look like.
Thank you so much for sharing your lovely piece.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you again for your kind words and the stellar rating. I appreciate both. I did correct dessert to Desert. Thank you. Gretchen